工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ваш ответ содержит много пауз и повторений, что снижает его естественность и эффективность. Рекомендуется говорить более связно, избегать лишних слов и повторов, а также структурировать ответ с четким вступлением и поддерживающими деталями.

範例: I currently work as a certification manager at a company that sells a variety of home products, ranging from construction materials to decorative items. I enjoy my job because it allows me to ensure product quality and work with diverse teams.

建議: Ответ не ясен и содержит много пауз и грамматических ошибок. Рекомендуется формулировать предложения более четко и грамотно, использовать связующие слова для логичности и полноты ответа.

範例: I work in the quality department, where I am responsible for checking and ensuring the quality of all our products before they reach customers.

建議: Ответ содержит много пауз и нечетких формулировок. Рекомендуется говорить более уверенно, использовать связующие слова и конкретизировать преимущества работы.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to work because it offers flexible options like remote and office work. Additionally, the company provides social benefits such as insurance and opportunities for professional development.

建議: Ответ неполный и нечеткий, с грамматическими ошибками. Рекомендуется давать полный ответ с описанием, использовать связующие слова и избегать незавершенных предложений.

範例: Yes, I like the place where I work. We have a small, cozy room where we handle all the certifications provided by our suppliers, which makes the work environment comfortable.

建議: Ответ неясен и содержит много ошибок. Рекомендуется четко и логично излагать планы, использовать связующие слова и избегать повторов.

範例: I plan to move to Canada in the near future and possibly change my career direction. Previously, I worked in chemical analytics, and I hope to continue in that field or explore related opportunities.

× Currently I work as certification manager in literature company.

✓ Currently I work as a certification manager in a literature company.

The sentence is missing the indefinite articles 'a' before 'certification manager' and 'a' before 'literature company'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Adding 'a' clarifies that the speaker holds one position in one company.

× Our company sells uh, variety products for home like such as from construction materials to decorative products.

✓ Our company sells a variety of products for the home, such as construction materials and decorative products.

The phrase 'variety products for home like such as from' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'a variety of products for the home, such as...'. Also, 'for home' should be 'for the home' to specify the place. 'Like such as' is redundant; use either 'like' or 'such as'.

× I like my job because, uh, it's sometimes, uh, I like my job.

✓ I like my job because sometimes it is enjoyable.

The original sentence is repetitive and lacks clarity. The corrected sentence removes redundancy and provides a clear reason for liking the job.

× I work at a quality department, uh, my job involves uh, involves umm, check, take all items we responsibility to quality our items I.

✓ I work in the quality department. My job involves checking and taking responsibility for the quality of all our items.

The preposition 'at' should be 'in' when referring to departments. The sentence structure is fragmented and unclear; it is corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Because my work, umm, it allows to work in remote, uh, part and also, uh, work in office and uh, have many social uh, benefits from my work, like insurance, like other benefits to development.

✓ Because my work allows me to work remotely and also in the office, and I have many social benefits from my job, like insurance and other development benefits.

The modal verb 'allows' requires an object ('me') and the infinitive form 'to work'. 'In remote part' is incorrect; 'remotely' is the correct adverb. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So I have a we have a little room when we take all certifications which provides us from supplier and our place is very cozy and.

✓ We have a small room where we keep all the certifications provided to us by suppliers, and our place is very cozy.

The sentence has singular/plural mismatches and awkward phrasing. 'A little room when we take all certifications' is incorrect; it should be 'a small room where we keep all the certifications'. Also, 'provides us from supplier' should be 'provided to us by suppliers'.

× So now I have a plan to move in Canada and maybe to change my directions.

✓ I now have a plan to move to Canada and maybe change my career direction.

The correct preposition with 'move' is 'to' not 'in'. 'Change my directions' is vague; 'change my career direction' is clearer. The sentence is adjusted to future intention with proper prepositions.

× To be honest, I I use it to work at Chemist Analytics and maybe I think in the future I want to continue my first.

✓ To be honest, I used to work at Chemist Analytics, and maybe in the future, I want to continue my first job.

The phrase 'I use it to work' is incorrect; the past habit is expressed as 'I used to work'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct tense usage.