工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using proper sentence structure and linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep it concise.

範例: I am both a teacher and a student. I work as a teacher helping students learn and grow, and I am also pursuing a Master's degree in Corrective Exercises at the university.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific details using linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

範例: I work at a government school, which is free for all students in my country. Every day, many children attend, and I help them with their exercises and encourage good behavior.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar mistakes, such as 'patient' should be 'patience'.

範例: It is a good place to work if you enjoy helping and managing students. However, working with children requires patience and strength.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly with correct grammar and use linking words to explain your reasons.

範例: No, I do not like the place where I work because it is located outside the town. There are traffic jams on the bus lanes, which makes commuting difficult.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and correct vocabulary. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid awkward phrases like 'do international bus business'.

範例: In the future, I plan to start my own fragrance line featuring unique scents like iris and white roses. I hope to expand my business internationally because I am passionate about entrepreneurship.

× Both of them, I work with a student as a teacher, help them to grow up well, learn new knowledge and do their best in schools.

✓ Both of them, I work with students as a teacher, help them to grow up well, learn new knowledge and do their best in schools.

The word 'student' should be plural 'students' because the sentence refers to helping multiple individuals, not just one. Using the singular form here is incorrect when referring to more than one person.

× I work in government school.

✓ I work in a government school.

The phrase 'government school' needs an article 'a' before it to indicate a singular countable noun. Without the article, the sentence is grammatically incomplete.

× They're free school for all my country's students.

✓ They're free schools for all my country's students.

The phrase 'free school' should be plural 'free schools' to agree with 'they're' (they are). Also, 'free schools' is a general plural noun here, so no definite article is needed.

× You can see a huge number of children every day everywhere in our schools and help them to do their exercises, grow well and to have best behavior.

✓ You can see a huge number of children every day everywhere in our schools and help them to do their exercises, grow well and have the best behavior.

The phrase 'to have best behavior' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'best behavior' because 'best behavior' is a superlative noun phrase that requires 'the'.

× Because you have to work with children, you need patient and be strong to help them.

✓ Because you have to work with children, you need to be patient and strong to help them.

The adjective 'patient' requires the infinitive form 'to be' before it. Also, 'be strong' should be 'to be strong' to maintain parallel structure with 'to be patient'.

× No, the place that I've worked it out scares of town.

✓ No, the place where I've worked is outside of town.

The phrase 'worked it out scares of town' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'the place where I've worked is outside of town' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× There is traffic jams at bus lanes everywhere.

✓ There are traffic jams at bus lanes everywhere.

'Traffic jams' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× I can stand this place and I don't like to work there anymore.

✓ I can't stand this place and I don't like to work there anymore.

The phrase 'I can stand this place' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is negative, so 'can't stand' should be used to express dislike.

× I'd like to open up my personal fragrance line with some special smells like iris and white roses, and not just in my country.

✓ I'd like to open up my personal fragrance line with some special scents like iris and white roses, and not just in my country.

While 'smells' is understandable, 'scents' is the more appropriate noun when referring to fragrances or perfumes.

× I like to send it out of my country and do international bus business because I am a businesswoman.

✓ I would like to send it out of my country and do international business because I am a businesswoman.

The phrase 'do international bus business' is incorrect; it should be 'do international business'. Also, 'like to' is better expressed as 'would like to' for polite future intentions.