工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答不够简洁，句子结构混乱，存在重复和语法错误。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用正确的语法表达工作经历。

範例: I have worked as an English teacher at an institution for several years since I graduated from college.

建議: 回答中存在重复，表达不够流畅。建议使用连贯的句子，避免重复，并清晰描述工作内容。

範例: I currently work in Chaoyang District, Beijing, as an English teaching assistant, where I help monitor students' daily learning and assist teachers.

建議: 回答较为完整，但表达略显重复且有语法错误。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，避免重复，并注意语法准确。

範例: I don't think it's an ideal place to work because the job involves sales, and persuading students' parents to pay tuition fees is challenging. Therefore, the pressure from sales targets makes the job less enjoyable for me.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并避免口语化填充词。

範例: Not really. Although the work environment is clean and nice, the atmosphere can be stressful sometimes, especially because the job involves sales, which I find difficult.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不流畅。建议使用正确的时态和连词，清晰表达未来计划。

範例: I plan to become an English teacher in the future. However, since I haven't studied English for several years, I need to review it and take an exam to prove my proficiency.

× I have worked for several years after I graduated from my College in and after I graduated from school, I just worked as an English teacher in an institution and to teach students learn the English.

✓ I worked for several years after I graduated from college, and after I graduated from school, I worked as an English teacher in an institution to teach students English.

句子中时态使用不当，'have worked'与后面的过去时间状语冲突，应使用一般过去时。'to teach students learn the English'结构错误，应改为'to teach students English'。建议使用一般过去时描述过去发生的动作，避免时态混乱。

× I just worked as an English teacher in an institution and to teach students learn the English.

✓ I just worked as an English teacher in an institution to teach students English.

'to teach students learn the English'中'learn'多余且用法错误，应直接用'teach students English'。介词和动词搭配错误，需简化表达。

× Now I work in Beijing, Chaoyang District, and I work as an English teaching assistant to monitor students daily learning and help the teachers to, uh, monitor the students and help them.

✓ Now I work in Chaoyang District, Beijing, as an English teaching assistant to monitor students' daily learning and help the teachers.

句子结构重复且冗余，'help the teachers to, uh, monitor the students and help them'重复表达，应简化。'students daily learning'缺少所有格，应为'students' daily learning'。建议简化句子，避免重复。

× I think it's not an ideal place to work because the nature of the job is related to sales and we have to persuade the student, students, parents to pay for their tuition fee, which is a little difficult for me.

✓ I think it's not an ideal place to work because the nature of the job is related to sales and we have to persuade the students' parents to pay their tuition fees, which is a little difficult for me.

'student, students, parents'表达混乱，应为'students' parents'。'tuition fee'应使用复数'tuition fees'，因为通常指多笔费用。注意单复数和所有格的正确使用。

× Not really, although the work environment is clean and nice, but the atmosphere of the walk is sometimes a little oh stressful and our work is related to sales is hard for me.

✓ Not really. Although the work environment is clean and nice, the atmosphere at work is sometimes a little stressful, and our work related to sales is hard for me.

'although'和'but'不能同时使用，二者功能重复。'atmosphere of the walk'应为'atmosphere at work'。句子应分开，避免连词使用错误。

× Well, I decide to be an English teacher in the future, but because I don't study English for several years, so I need to review the English for a period and take the arts exam to demonstrate my English.

✓ Well, I have decided to be an English teacher in the future, but because I haven't studied English for several years, I need to review English for a period and take the arts exam to demonstrate my English.

'I decide'应使用现在完成时'have decided'表示决定已做。'I don't study English for several years'时态错误，应为现在完成时否定'haven't studied'。'so'与'because'重复使用，应去掉'so'。建议注意时态和连词的正确使用。