工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your answer sound more natural and confident. Also, be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add supporting details if necessary. For example, start with 'I recently graduated from university and am currently focusing on improving my English skills.'

範例: I recently graduated from university and am currently focusing on improving my English skills. Additionally, I have picked up a few hobbies that I am eager to continue.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Instead of 'I've planned to employ somewhere,' say 'I plan to find a job in the future.' Also, avoid filler words and be direct.

範例: I'm not working at the moment, but I plan to find a job in the near future.

建議: Your answer is generally good but could be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words for coherence. For example, replace 'Although' with 'Even though' and use 'because' properly. Also, 'feedbacks' should be 'feedback.'

範例: Yes, I think it would be a good place to work because it offers a friendly environment and good opportunities related to my field of study. Even though I'm not working there now, I have heard positive feedback from my family and friends.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and contains many filler words. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid fillers. Also, use correct grammar, for example, 'values hard work' instead of 'values hardworking.'

範例: Yes, I really like the place where I work because it has a vibrant atmosphere. My colleagues are nice and friendly, and the company values hard work by appreciating employees through promotions.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to give a clear and complete response with specific details. Avoid filler words and organize your answer logically using linking words.

範例: Currently, I try to live in the moment and not worry too much about the future. In the short term, I plan to explore my hobbies and enjoy my free time. In the long term, I hope to find a fulfilling job related to my studies.

× I recently graduated from university at and at the moment I'm uh, concentrating on improving my English skills and I recently, uh, picked, umm, a few hobbies which I'm really eager to continue.

✓ I recently graduated from university and at the moment I'm concentrating on improving my English skills. I recently picked a few hobbies which I'm really eager to continue.

The original sentence contains an unnecessary preposition 'at' after 'university' and is a run-on sentence. Removing the extra 'at' and splitting into two sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I'm not working currently uh, but I've planned to employ somewhere in the future.

✓ I'm not working currently, but I've planned to be employed somewhere in the future.

The phrase 'planned to employ somewhere' is incorrect because 'employ' is a transitive verb requiring an object. The correct form is 'planned to be employed' to indicate the student's intention to work somewhere in the future.

× Yes, I think it's a good place to work because it offers a friendly environment and good opportunities related to my UH field of study.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good place to work because it offers a friendly environment and good opportunities related to my field of study.

The phrase 'my UH field of study' is unclear and likely a typo or incorrect preposition use. Removing 'UH' clarifies the sentence. If 'UH' is an abbreviation, it should be explained or omitted for clarity.

× Although I'm not working right now but I heard good feedbacks from my family and friends.

✓ Although I'm not working right now, I have heard good feedback from my family and friends.

The conjunction 'although' should not be combined with 'but' in the same sentence. Also, 'feedback' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'feedbacks'. The sentence is corrected for conjunction use and noun form.

× Yes, I really like the place where I work because it has a, uh, vibrant atmosphere. My colleagues are uh, nice and friendly and my work really values, uh, umm, hardworking and appreciate us through promotions and.

✓ Yes, I really like the place where I work because it has a vibrant atmosphere. My colleagues are nice and friendly, and my workplace really values hard work and appreciates us through promotions.

The phrase 'my work really values, uh, umm, hardworking' is incorrect; 'hardworking' is an adjective, but the noun 'hard work' is needed here. Also, 'appreciate us through promotions and' is incomplete and awkward. The sentence is corrected for noun usage and clarity.

× Currently I try to live in the moment and not just uh, worry about future.

✓ Currently, I try to live in the moment and not just worry about the future.

The phrase 'worry about future' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'future'. Adding 'the' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I have two plans umm, in the long term and a short term.

✓ I have two plans: one in the short term and one in the long term.

The phrase 'in the long term and a short term' is inconsistent. Using 'one in the short term and one in the long term' clarifies the two plans and corrects the quantifier usage.

× In short term I uh, try to check my hobbies and just do whatever I do, but in a long term I like to.

✓ In the short term, I try to pursue my hobbies and just do whatever I enjoy, but in the long term, I would like to...

The phrase 'In short term' and 'in a long term' require the definite article 'the'. Also, 'try to check my hobbies' is awkward; 'pursue my hobbies' is more appropriate. The sentence is incomplete, so 'would like to...' indicates continuation.