工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer provides relevant information but is a bit long and contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your response more concise and correct grammar mistakes. Also, avoid repeating words and ensure clarity in your sentences.

範例: I am currently a master's student at the University of Windsor, in my final semester. My program combines lectures and practical projects, which help me develop both theoretical and practical knowledge. This semester, I am also doing an internship with JLR.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains repetition and grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and clearly, avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I am currently doing a co-op internship through the University of Windsor with JLR. My team is participating in a hackathon competition as part of the project.

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm but is a bit disorganized and contains filler words. Try to structure your answer clearly, use linking words, and avoid fillers to make your response more natural and effective.

範例: Yes, it is a very interesting place to work. We interact directly with company engineers, and they give us presentations about new technologies, which help us improve our projects.

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains filler words. Try to be more concise and clear, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: As a university student doing an internship with JLR, I find it a great place to work. Even as students, we benefit from their presence at our university and the valuable information they provide.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more grammatically correct. Try to express your future plans directly and use linking words if needed to add details.

範例: In the future, I plan to find a company where I can combine my mobile development skills with the new skills I am learning at the University of Windsor.

× I am in my final semester of Masters in University of Windsor.

✓ I am in my final semester of a Master's at the University of Windsor.

The phrase 'Masters' should be 'a Master's' to indicate the degree program correctly, and 'University of Windsor' requires the definite article 'the' before it as it is a specific institution.

× My program includes the combinations of lectures and the practical project which helped me to develop the both theoretical and the practical knowledge.

✓ My program includes a combination of lectures and a practical project which helped me develop both theoretical and practical knowledge.

Use 'a combination' instead of 'the combinations' because it refers to one combined set. Also, 'the practical project' should be 'a practical project' as it is one among possible projects. 'Develop the both' is incorrect; it should be 'develop both' without 'the'.

× And in my financial semester I I'm doing an internship with JLR.

✓ And in my final semester, I am doing an internship with JLR.

'Financial semester' is incorrect; it should be 'final semester'. Also, 'I I'm' is a repetition error; it should be 'I am'.

× Currently I'm not associated with any company I am doing my Co-op internship with, which is under the University of Windsor with GLRR.

✓ Currently, I'm not associated with any company; I am doing my Co-op internship with GLRR, which is under the University of Windsor.

The original sentence is a run-on and confusing. Adding a semicolon and rearranging improves clarity. Also, 'with GLRR' should come directly after 'internship' for clarity.

× Where we are where are we are in a team who is competing with each other in an hackathon project.

✓ We are in a team that is competing with others in a hackathon project.

The original sentence is repetitive and ungrammatical. 'Who' should be 'that' when referring to a team, and 'an hackathon' is incorrect because 'hackathon' starts with a consonant sound, so it should be 'a hackathon'.

× Uh, we get to support with the companies, uh, engineer, we deal with them, we talk them and they also give us the, uh, presentation upon which are the new technologies that could be helpful for us to work on our project.

✓ We get support from the companies' engineers; we deal with them, talk to them, and they also give us presentations about new technologies that could help us work on our project.

'Support with' should be 'support from'. 'Engineer' should be plural possessive 'companies' engineers'. 'Talk them' should be 'talk to them'. 'Presentation upon which are' is awkward; 'presentations about' is clearer.

× So as the university student, I am doing my internship with the GLR, so it is a very interesting place to work with them because, uh, even though we are the student, we get a benefit of having them at our university and giving us all that beneficial information that we needed to learn about the.

✓ As a university student, I am doing my internship with GLR, so it is a very interesting place to work because, even though we are students, we benefit from having them at our university and receiving all the beneficial information we need to learn.

'The university student' should be 'a university student' as it is general. 'The GLR' should be 'GLR' without 'the' unless it is part of the name. 'We are the student' should be 'we are students'. 'Get a benefit of' should be 'benefit from'. The sentence ending is incomplete and awkward; it is corrected for clarity.

× So my future plans involved me to look for a company where I could able to merge my mobile development skills and my new skills that I am currently studying at University of Windsor.

✓ So my future plans involve looking for a company where I can merge my mobile development skills with the new skills I am currently studying at the University of Windsor.

'Involved me to look' is incorrect; it should be 'involve looking'. 'Could able to' is redundant; use 'can'. 'Merge my skills and my new skills' should be 'merge my skills with the new skills'. Also, 'at University of Windsor' requires 'the' before the university name.