工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ не ясен и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует давать чёткий и связный ответ, избегая лишних и непонятных фраз. Используйте простые предложения, чтобы ясно выразить мысль.

範例: I am a student at Edu University, where I am studying computer science. This helps me improve my skills and prepare for my future career.

建議: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечетко выражен. Следует использовать правильные времена и структуру предложения, чтобы ясно объяснить ситуацию.

範例: I don't have a regular job, but I help my parents part-time during my free time.

建議: Ответ повторяет слова и не содержит конкретики. Следует использовать разнообразную лексику и конкретные детали, чтобы сделать ответ более информативным и связным.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to work because it is comfortable and equipped with all the necessary tools, like computers and office supplies.

建議: Ответ содержит много пауз и нечетких выражений. Следует практиковать плавную речь и использовать связующие слова для логичности.

範例: Yes, I like the place where I work because it is located in the city center, near parks and recreational areas, which makes it pleasant and convenient.

建議: Ответ неясен и содержит ошибки. Следует использовать правильные времена и чётко формулировать планы на будущее.

範例: In the future, I plan to work in a company with about 80 employees. However, right now I am focusing on completing my master's degree.

× I'm a student, I study at university Edu, my mother is computer science.

✓ I'm a student. I study at Edu University. My major is computer science.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'my mother is computer science' which is likely a mistranslation or misuse. It should be 'My major is computer science' to correctly express the field of study. Also, the sentence structure is run-on and needs to be split for clarity.

× It's for good for my skills and usually I'm for your student.

✓ It is good for my skills, and usually I am a diligent student.

The phrase 'It's for good for my skills' is incorrect; it should be 'It is good for my skills' to properly use the adjective 'good'. 'Usually I'm for your student' is unclear and likely means 'I am usually a diligent student' or similar. The correction clarifies the intended meaning.

× And now I saw the technical.

✓ And now I am studying technical subjects.

The original sentence 'I saw the technical' is incomplete and unclear. It likely intends to say that the student is currently studying technical subjects or fields. The correction provides a complete and grammatically correct sentence.

× I don't work but my free time I work part time at my parents work and doing something for my parents.

✓ I don't have a full-time job, but in my free time, I work part-time at my parents' business and help them with various tasks.

The original sentence has run-on structure and incorrect verb forms. 'My parents work' should be 'my parents' work' or better 'my parents' business'. 'Doing something for my parents' is incomplete and should be 'help them with various tasks' for clarity and correctness.

× I think yes, because we have all four needs for our job and it's comfortable and comfortable place and we have all needs for our job like computers, such as computer or.

✓ I think yes, because we have all the necessary things for our job. It is a comfortable place, and we have all the equipment we need, like computers.

The phrase 'all four needs' is unclear and likely incorrect quantifier usage. It should be 'all the necessary things' or 'all the needs'. Repetition of 'comfortable' is redundant. 'Such as computer or' is incomplete and should be 'like computers'.

× Yes, because my work, uh, in central, uh, city and uh, neighbor have more umm, parks or so on and uh play umm in the building.

✓ Yes, because my work is in the city center, and the neighborhood has many parks and other facilities. We also have a play area in the building.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'my work'. 'In central, uh, city' should be 'in the city center'. 'Neighbor have more' should be 'the neighborhood has more'. The sentence is fragmented and needs restructuring for clarity.

× We have all needs, uh, uh, for comfortable and.

✓ We have all the needs for comfort.

The original sentence is incomplete and uses 'comfortable' incorrectly as a noun. It should be 'comfort' as a noun. The sentence needs to be complete and clear.

× In my future I worked in.

✓ In the future, I will work in...

The sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'worked' when referring to future plans. The correct tense is future: 'I will work'.

× I work in company with 80 and.

✓ I plan to work in a company with 80 employees.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It likely means 'a company with 80 employees'. The sentence needs to be complete and grammatically correct.

× But now I focus on my master's degree.

✓ But now I am focusing on my master's degree.

The sentence uses simple present 'I focus' but the action is ongoing, so present continuous 'I am focusing' is more appropriate.