工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答要更简洁并注意时态、语法和发音错误。开头应直接回答问题（I used to work / I’m currently a student preparing for IELTS），然后用一到两句具体理由支持。避免重复、修正语法错误（例如: "a few months ago", "it was challenging but rewarding", 去掉多余词）。

範例: I used to work as a salesperson, but I quit a few months ago to prepare for the IELTS. It was challenging but rewarding because I learned a lot about customer service and communication.

建議: 回答要说清楚现在还是过去的工作地点并用更自然的表达。减少重复，修正词语搭配（例如: "had never been in contact with so many different people"）。补充一两条具体细节会更好，但不要超出五句。

範例: I worked in Taidong City for a company that exported hand tools to North America and South Africa. It was great experience because I had never been in contact with so many different kinds of people before.

建議: 回答自然、内容积极，但可以更具体地举例说明为何是个好地方（例如具体福利、文化或一次团队合作的经历），并使用连接词如 'because' 或 'for example' 使逻辑更清晰。注意时态一致。

範例: Yes, absolutely. It was a great place to work because colleagues were very supportive and we often helped each other during busy periods. For example, my team stayed late to finish an urgent order and everyone cooperated.

建議: 问题问的是偏好或是否喜欢，应明确现在或过去的感受并给出具体原因。修正语法和句子冗余（例如: 去掉重复 'in and'），并更清晰地列举活动作为证据。

範例: Yes, I really liked working there because my teammates were supportive and friendly. For example, we often went hiking and joined after-work activities, which made the workplace atmosphere relaxed.

建議: 回答方向明确但语法和拼写需改正（例如: 'abroad'），并把想法分成两到三句以提高清晰度。说明具体步骤（如学位、课程或实习）和为何想把两个领域结合会更有说服力。

範例: I plan to study in the United States to specialize in data analysis. Combining data analysis with my international business background will help me work in global market research or trade analytics, so I will look for a master's program and related internships.

× I actually quit my job few months ago because I want to prepare my IELTS test and I used to work as a salesperson.

✓ I actually quit my job a few months ago because I wanted to prepare for my IELTS test, and I used to work as a salesperson.

句中谈及“几个月前”的动作，应使用过去时，因此将 want 改为 wanted；另外 “a few months” 需要不定冠词 a；prepare 后要接介词 for。整体时态需一致以表达过去的原因。

× It's quite challenge but I am but rewarding at the same time.

✓ It was quite challenging but rewarding at the same time.

此处描述经验应使用形容词或现在分词作表语，challenge 是名词，需改为形容词形式 challenging。句子时态应与前文一致用过去式 was；删除多余的 but。

× So I would say it I learned a lot of from my job.

✓ So I would say I learned a lot from my job.

原句有多余的 it 和多余的 from 的位置错误，应去掉多余词并调整语序为 I learned a lot from my job，句子结构才完整通顺。

× I worked in Taidong City and we export hand tools to North America and South Africa.

✓ I worked in Taidong City and we exported hand tools to North America and South Africa.

前半句为过去时 I worked，后半句描述在过去的工作内容也应使用过去时，因此将 export 改为过去式 exported。

× It was quite fantastic because I I had never touched contact with so much so many different kinds of people before.

✓ It was quite fantastic because I had never been in contact with so many different kinds of people before.

原句中有重复的 I I，且短语用法错误。正确表达是 be in contact with，不能用 touched contact。also 将 so much 修为 so many 以修饰可数名词 different kinds of people。时态 had never 表示过去完成时，保留。

× I was really happy when I worked there.

✓ I was really happy when I worked there.

句子本身时态正确，无需修改。保持过去时以对应过去的工作经历。

× We had a lot of enjoyable memories and all of my colleagues were supportive and warm when we faced a lot of difficulties.

✓ We had a lot of enjoyable memories, and all of my colleagues were supportive and warm when we faced many difficulties.

原句语法基本正确，但用法上可改进：a lot of difficulties 可更自然地说 many difficulties；在两独立分句间添加逗号连接更清晰。

× I mean I had a lot of supportive and warm teammates and we shared a lot of memorable experiences together.

✓ I mean I had a lot of supportive and warm teammates, and we shared many memorable experiences together.

将 a lot of memorable experiences 改为 many memorable experiences 更适合修饰可数名词 experiences；句子其余部分时态和用法正确。

× For example, we went to hiking and in and enjoyed after work activities.

✓ For example, we went hiking and enjoyed after-work activities.

短语错误：go hiking 不用介词 to；原句多余的 in and 需删除；after-work 用连字符修饰名词 activities。调整后句子结构正确且简洁。

× I would really like to work in data analysis because my major was international business and I'm planning to study aboard in the United States, and I want to study in data analysis to combine my major together in the future.

✓ I would really like to work in data analysis because my major was international business. I'm planning to study abroad in the United States, and I want to study data analysis to combine it with my major in the future.

多个问题：aboard 拼写错误，应为 abroad；study in data analysis 用法不当，正确为 study data analysis；combine my major together 冗余且不自然，应为 combine it with my major；将句子拆成两句更清晰，并保持时态一致（would like / planning / want 可并存，但表达更自然）。