工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and fillers (e.g., “uh”), correct tense/grammar (e.g., “I chose” not “I have chose”), and keep to 2–3 sentences. Add a brief reason with linking phrase (e.g., “because” or “as”) to explain your motivation.

範例: I’m currently a postgraduate student at Kerala University, studying for a second MBA. I chose this program because I want to combine my first MBA in Psychology with business skills to strengthen my background in organizational psychology.

建議: Good clear answer and relevant detail. Improve by tightening sentences, using correct plural forms (“different age groups”), and adding a linking phrase to connect past work to current situation. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: I’m not working at the moment, but I previously worked as a child psychologist at a counseling center supporting students of different age groups. It was very rewarding because I could see clear improvements in their behaviour and confidence.

建議: Answer is positive and gives reasons, but watch grammar and word choice (“many knowledge” → “a lot of knowledge” or “much knowledge”, “beyond my core professional” → “beyond my core profession”). Use linking words like “for example” or “also” to structure points and keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes — it was an excellent place to work because the staff were very supportive and the environment encouraged learning. For example, handling many projects helped me gain knowledge beyond my core profession.

建議: Tense consistency and grammar need attention (“enjoyed” vs “has”, “vibes” is informal). Remove unnecessary pronoun repetition (“me and my colleagues, we”), correct plural forms (“feedback” usually uncountable). Keep answer to 2–3 concise sentences and use linking expressions like “for example” appropriately.

範例: I really enjoyed working there because it had a friendly, supportive atmosphere that made learning easy. For example, my colleagues and I often stayed after shifts to exchange feedback and practice new techniques.

建議: Clear goals but refine grammar and phrasing: use infinitive forms correctly (“help people reach”), correct prepositions (“training for employees” → “employee training” or “training and development”), and avoid repetition. Use linking words like “therefore” to connect experience to choice and keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I plan to work in Human Resources because I enjoy helping people reach their full potential and supporting career development. Therefore, I want to specialize in training and development, as my past experience in counseling makes this a good fit.

× Currently I am a postgraduate student at Kerala University.

✓ I am currently a postgraduate student at Kerala University.

Adverb placement: 'currently' is better placed after the subject or before the verb for natural English flow. Move 'currently' to 'I am currently' to sound natural.

× I am pursuing MBA degree which is my second degree.

✓ I am pursuing an MBA degree, which is my second degree.

Use the indefinite article 'an' before acronyms pronounced with a vowel sound (M-B-A) and add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which is my second degree.'

× I have done my MBA in Psychology and I have chose the second degree just to complete uh to complete and to enrich my background in psychology and business.

✓ I did my MBA in Psychology and I chose the second degree to complete and enrich my background in psychology and business.

Verb tense and form: use simple past 'did' and 'chose' for completed actions. 'Have chose' is incorrect because 'chose' is past; the present perfect would be 'have chosen.' Also remove filler repetition and simplify the infinitive phrase 'to complete and enrich.'

× At the moment I'm not working, but I used to work as a child psychologist at a counseling center that supports students at different age group.

✓ At the moment I'm not working, but I used to work as a child psychologist at a counseling center that supports students of different age groups.

Preposition and pluralization: use 'of' with 'groups' and make 'age group' plural to match 'students.' 'Different age groups' is the correct collocation.

× It was a very rewarding experience because I could see clear improvements in their behavior and confidence.

✓ It was a very rewarding experience because I could see clear improvements in their behaviour and confidence.

Spelling note: 'behavior' is American spelling; either is acceptable depending on variety. No grammar error beyond regional spelling. If using British English, use 'behaviour.'

× Yes, definitely. It was one of my most enriching experiences because the staff was very supportive, the work environment was very encouraging to learn new skills and abilities.

✓ Yes, definitely. It was one of my most enriching experiences because the staff were very supportive, and the work environment was very encouraging for learning new skills and abilities.

Subject-verb agreement: 'staff' can take plural verb 'were' when referring to individuals. Preposition: use 'encouraging for learning' or 'encouraging in learning.' Add 'and' to connect clauses for clarity.

× I was handling a lot of projects which helped me to gain many knowledge beyond my core professional.

✓ I handled a lot of projects which helped me gain much knowledge beyond my core profession.

Tense consistency and word choice: use simple past 'handled' for completed actions. 'Many knowledge' is incorrect; 'much knowledge' or 'a lot of knowledge' is correct. 'Core professional' should be 'core profession.' Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helped me.'

× I really enjoyed the workplace there because it has a friendly, supportive vibes.

✓ I really enjoyed the workplace there because it has friendly, supportive vibes.

Article and number agreement: 'vibes' is plural so remove the singular article 'a.' Alternatively, use singular noun 'a friendly, supportive vibe.'

× The environment was very healthy to learn.

✓ The environment was very conducive to learning.

Word choice and grammar: 'healthy to learn' is unnatural. Use 'conducive to learning' which is the correct collocation meaning supportive of learning.

× For example, me and my colleagues, we used to sit after the shifts and exchange feedbacks and practice new stuff.

✓ For example, my colleagues and I used to sit after our shifts to exchange feedback and practice new things.

Pronoun order and case: use 'my colleagues and I' (subjective case). 'We' is redundant. 'Feedback' is uncountable (don't add 's'). Use 'our shifts' and 'new things' instead of informal 'new stuff.'

× I'm planning to work in Human Resources because I enjoy helping people reaching their full potential, develop their careers, and deal with teams.

✓ I'm planning to work in Human Resources because I enjoy helping people reach their full potential, develop their careers, and work with teams.

Verb form after 'help': use the base form 'reach' (not 'reaching'). Parallel structure: keep verbs in the same form ('reach,' 'develop,' 'work with'). 'Deal with teams' is awkward; 'work with teams' is more natural.

× I'm thinking to specialize in development and trainings in for employees because with my past experiences I think this is a good fit for me.

✓ I'm thinking of specializing in development and training for employees because, with my past experience, I think this is a good fit for me.

Verb-preposition: use 'thinking of specializing' not 'thinking to specialize.' 'Training' is uncountable here (not 'trainings'). Remove extra preposition 'in' before 'for employees.' Use singular 'experience' or 'past experiences' consistently and add commas for clarity.