工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and avoid redundancy. Use one or two short supporting details connected with linking words. Pronounce titles and activities clearly and use plural/singular correctly.

範例: I'm currently a student, and I also work as a cybersecurity engineer. In my job I do penetration testing and vulnerability scanning, and I also manage approved-vendor security assessments.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, fix grammar (verb agreement, articles), and add a concise detail with a linking word. Be specific about the company's function and your role in one or two short sentences.

範例: I work for LLC Compliance Control, an international company based in Russia. It helps businesses obtain PCI DSS certification, and I support that process by conducting security assessments.

建議: Make sentences grammatically correct and more natural: use linking words and precise language. Combine reasons briefly and correct comparative/quantitative phrases.

範例: Yes, it's a good place to work because I can work remotely, which gives me a lot of freedom, and my salary is high enough to live comfortably.

建議: Avoid fillers (uh), correct grammar (work–life balance, comparative forms, verb forms), and use linking words to connect reasons. Be concise and provide a concrete example of what you learn from colleagues.

範例: Yes, I like it because I can maintain a good work–life balance, and my colleagues are very skilled, so I learn a lot from them—for example, I recently picked up a new technique for web application testing.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms). Remove fillers, be specific about the certifications and timeline, and explain why you want them or how you'll prepare. Use linking words to make it coherent.

範例: My future plan is to advance professionally by getting cybersecurity certifications such as the OSCP. To prepare, I plan to take a structured training course and practice hands-on labs over the next year to improve my penetration-testing skills.

× Currently I'm student but also I work as cybersecurity engineer.

✓ Currently I'm a student, but I also work as a cybersecurity engineer.

Missing article 'a' before countable nouns and word order: 'a student' and 'a cybersecurity engineer' are required. Also add comma before 'but' when joining clauses. Suggestion: include articles for singular countable nouns and place 'also' before the verb for natural word order.

× I provide a penetration testing, vulnerability scanning and approved vendor scanning.

✓ I provide penetration testing, vulnerability scanning, and approved vendor scanning.

Unnecessary article 'a' before uncountable/abstract nouns and plural/gerund forms. Use parallel noun/gerund forms without 'a' and separate items with commas. Suggestion: remove 'a' and keep consistent gerund/noun forms.

× I work for LLC Compliance Control which is based in Russia and it's an international company that help business providing PCI DSS certification.

✓ I work for LLC Compliance Control, which is based in Russia, and it's an international company that helps businesses provide PCI DSS certification.

Comma needed before relative clause; verb agreement 'helps' (third person singular); 'business' should be plural 'businesses' as general plural and 'provide' infinitive without -ing after help. Suggestion: add commas, use correct verb forms and pluralize general nouns.

× Yes it is because I work remotely and it's giving me lot of freedom and my salary high enough for a good living.

✓ Yes, it is because I work remotely, and it gives me a lot of freedom, and my salary is high enough for a good living.

Present simple preferred ('it gives') instead of progressive; missing article 'a' before 'lot'; missing verb 'is' in 'my salary is high enough'. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual states and include necessary articles and linking verbs.

× Yes, I like the place where I work. Uh, the main reason is because I can maintain the work life balance and my colleagues are more skillful than me, so I can, uh, learning from them a lot.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work. The main reason is that I can maintain a work-life balance, and my colleagues are more skilled than I am, so I can learn a lot from them.

Use 'that' instead of 'because' in 'main reason is that'; add hyphens in 'work-life' and article 'a'; 'skillful' can be 'skilled' for naturalness; comparison should use subject form 'I am' rather than object 'me'; gerund form 'learning' incorrect after 'can' (modal + base verb). Suggestion: use 'can learn', correct comparative structure and include articles/hyphens.

× My future work plans is to improving US professional to receive cybersecurity certifications such as OSCP and uh, improve my skills in penetration testing.

✓ My future work plans are to improve my professional skills to obtain cybersecurity certifications such as the OSCP, and to improve my skills in penetration testing.

Subject-verb agreement: 'plans are' (plural). Use infinitive 'to improve' not 'to improving'. 'US professional' unclear; likely 'my professional skills' and 'obtain' is more natural than 'receive'. Include article 'the' for specific certification 'the OSCP'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement, use infinitive after 'to', and choose clearer noun phrases.