工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more accurate with grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid small hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g. ‘patients’, ‘procedures’, ‘technical skills’).

範例: I work as a radiographer in a hospital. I enjoy this job because I use technical skills to help diagnose patients and support them during stressful imaging procedures. For example, I often explain scans to anxious patients to make them feel more comfortable.

建議: Avoid repetition and correct awkward phrases (‘in a quest’ unclear). Use present simple for routines (‘I work’) and plural forms. Give one clear, specific detail about the workplace and link ideas with a connector (e.g. ‘which’ or ‘so’).

範例: I work at a specialist cancer hospital in the city. Because we see many complex cases, I use advanced imaging techniques to help diagnose tumours, which I find professionally fulfilling.

建議: Remove filler words and improve sentence flow. Begin with a direct yes/no plus reason, then add a specific example. Use collocations correctly (‘heavy workload’, ‘busy periods’).

範例: Yes, it is a very good place to work because colleagues are friendly and supportive. For example, when I have a heavy workload during busy periods, my team helps me manage the caseload efficiently.

建議: Be concise and clear: state your preference directly, then give a specific future plan or reason. Avoid vague phrases like ‘no matter where I can serve’ and reduce hesitations. Use ‘I would like to’ or ‘I hope to’ for future intentions.

範例: I enjoy my work and would like to continue in this field. In the future, I hope to work in the UK to gain international experience and learn new imaging techniques.

建議: Answer the question directly about future work plans — here the student described retirement plans instead. Clarify short-term and long-term professional goals, then mention personal plans if relevant. Use linking words (‘after that’, ‘also’) and correct verb forms (‘spend’ → ‘spend time’).

範例: In the short term, I plan to gain more specialised training in oncology imaging. After I retire, I would like to travel to scenic places such as mountains and spend more time with my family.

× I really enjoy this job because I can use my technical skill to help diagnose patient and support them during stressful procedure.

✓ I really enjoy this job because I can use my technical skills to help diagnose patients and support them during stressful procedures.

The nouns 'skill', 'patient', and 'procedure' should be plural to agree with the general, countable meanings in this sentence. Use 'skills' for multiple abilities, 'patients' for more than one patient being diagnosed, and 'procedures' for multiple stressful procedures. Suggestion: check whether the noun refers to a single item or multiple items and use singular or plural accordingly.

× As I mentioned earlier, I am working in a hospital in a quest and this is a cancer hospital.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I work in a hospital in a district and it is a cancer hospital.

The present continuous 'am working' is acceptable for temporary actions but the context 'As I mentioned earlier' and general description fits simple present 'work'. Also 'in a quest' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'in a district' or 'in a region'. 'This is a cancer hospital' should use 'it is' to refer back to 'hospital'. Suggestion: use simple present for regular employment and choose the correct noun for location; ensure pronoun 'it' refers to the hospital.

× I can serve my technical skill to help diagnose patient and support them during stressful imaging processes, which I find very rewarding.

✓ I can use my technical skills to help diagnose patients and support them during stressful imaging procedures, which I find very rewarding.

The verb 'serve' is not idiomatic here; 'use' is correct. Also 'technical skill' should be plural 'technical skills' and 'diagnose patient' needs plural 'patients'. 'Imaging processes' is better as 'imaging procedures'. The instruction required correcting only errors listed in the problem type list: changing verb choice to the correct verb that fits the -ing/verb form usage and plural nouns to match. Suggestion: prefer 'use' with 'skills' and 'procedures' when describing professional activities.

× Yes, in my workplace people are very friendly and supportive and uh, when I have lots of workloads, they help me during my busy procedure.

✓ Yes, at my workplace people are very friendly and supportive and, when I have a heavy workload, they help me during busy periods.

'Workplace' is better with preposition 'at'. 'Lots of workloads' is unidiomatic; 'workload' is usually uncountable or singular ('a heavy workload'). 'Busy procedure' is incorrect; use 'busy periods' to refer to busy times. Suggestion: use 'a heavy workload' or 'busy periods' to describe times with much work.

× As I mentioned earlier, I love this job no matter where I can serve.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I love this job no matter where I can serve it.

The sentence lacks an appropriate object for 'serve' and the prepositional structure is awkward. Adding 'it' clarifies the object: 'serve it' (serve in this job). However, a more natural phrasing is 'no matter where I work' or 'no matter where I serve.' Suggestion: use 'no matter where I work' or include the object 'it' if keeping 'serve'.

× Uh, so in my future, uh, I want to work in the UK.

✓ So in the future, I want to work in the UK.

The phrase 'in my future' is nonstandard; use 'in the future'. The rest is correct future intention expressed with 'want to'. Suggestion: say 'in the future' to describe plans.

× Yes, I have future plans after retirement, I want to visit beautiful places, mountains and I also spend lots of time with my family.

✓ Yes, I have plans for after retirement: I want to visit beautiful places and mountains, and I also want to spend a lot of time with my family.

Parallel structure and verb forms need consistency. Use 'plans for after retirement' instead of 'future plans after retirement'. Combine ideas with correct infinitives: 'I want to visit' and 'I also want to spend'. Use 'a lot of time' instead of 'lots of time' for more formal speech. Suggestion: keep verbs parallel and use clear expressions for future intentions.