工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be slightly more natural and correct grammar: use articles and word order, and keep it concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one short detail. Avoid combining too many ideas without connectors.

範例: I work as a physician, and I’m also a first-year PhD student in public health. This means I split my time between clinical work and research, which keeps my schedule busy but rewarding.

建議: Correct grammar and phrasing, use articles and prepositions, and avoid awkward clauses. Provide one clear detail (e.g., commute time) and link it logically with a connector.

範例: My office is near Audio Station in Kitakyushu, and I live about a five-minute walk away. Because of the short commute, I find it very convenient and it saves me a lot of time each day.

建議: Make sentences complete and grammatically correct; combine simple ideas with a linking phrase. Give a specific reason why it’s good (e.g., quiet, facilities).

範例: Yes, I think it is. The area is relatively quiet and not overly crowded, so I can concentrate on my work without many distractions.

建議: Clarify intent and fix major grammar issues. Use a topic sentence stating your opinion, then support it with a specific reason. Avoid unclear phrasing like 'leave the place in this work.'

範例: Yes, I like the place where I work. It’s very convenient because of the short commute, and the neighborhood isn’t too crowded, which makes my days less stressful.

建議: Give a clearer, more direct response about plans and then provide specific conditions that would influence them. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid vague phrasing.

範例: My future work plans are flexible and depend on my career and family circumstances. For now I’m keeping my options open about relocating, but if a research opportunity arises I would consider moving for it.

× I work as a physician and at the same time I'm first year PhD student in public health.

✓ I work as a physician and at the same time I'm a first-year PhD student in public health.

Missing article and hyphenation: 'a' is needed before 'first-year PhD student' because this is a singular countable noun. Also 'first-year' is normally hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Suggestion: add the article 'a' and hyphenate 'first-year'.

× My office is located near Audio station in Kitakyushu.

✓ My office is located near Audio Station in Kitakyushu.

Capitalization and article/preposition: If 'Audio Station' is a proper name, it should be capitalized. If it is a common noun, it would typically be 'the audio station'. Suggestion: Use correct capitalization for proper nouns or add 'the' if it is a common noun (e.g., 'near the audio station').

× I live about 5 minutes walk from my office which really comfortable with it.

✓ I live about a 5-minute walk from my office, which I find really comfortable.

Count and modifier issues: '5 minutes walk' needs an article and hyphenation as a compound adjective ('a 5-minute walk'). The relative clause is ungrammatical; 'which really comfortable with it' lacks a verb and uses an unnecessary pronoun 'it'. Use a verb phrase like 'which I find really comfortable' or 'which is really convenient'. Suggestion: add 'a', hyphenate '5-minute', and rephrase the relative clause with a verb and correct pronoun use.

× Yes, I think so. There is a relatively quiet and not overly crowded.

✓ Yes, I think so. It is relatively quiet and not overly crowded.

Incorrect use of 'there is' with adjectives: 'There is' typically introduces existence of a noun, not a description using adjectives alone. Use a dummy subject 'It' to describe the place: 'It is relatively quiet and not overly crowded.' Suggestion: replace 'There is' with 'It is' when making adjectival descriptions of a place.

× I feel quite comfortable with it.

✓ I feel quite comfortable there.

Awkward pronoun use: 'with it' is unnatural referring to a place; use 'there' or 'about it' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use 'there' to refer to the place previously mentioned ('comfortable there').

× Yes, I leave the place in this work so it's very convenient but not overly crowded area.

✓ Yes, I live in this area near my work, so it's very convenient and not overly crowded.

Multiple article, verb, and word choice errors: 'leave' should be 'live'. 'the place in this work' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'live in this area near my work'. Also 'not overly crowded area' needs an article if left as noun phrase; better to make it part of the clause: 'it's very convenient and not overly crowded.' Suggestion: correct verb to 'live', rephrase to 'live in this area near my work', and join adjectives with 'and'.

× It depends on the situation, such as career and family circumstances.

✓ It depends on the situation, such as career and family circumstances.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable in present tense; no correction needed. Explanation: The present tense 'depends' correctly matches the general conditional meaning. No change required.

× It keeps my options open about where I live.

✓ That keeps my options open about where I will live.

Tense and reference clarity: 'It' is vague; 'That' referring to keeping options open is clearer. If discussing future living plans, use 'will live' to refer to future decisions. Suggestion: use 'That' and adjust tense to 'will live' if the meaning is future-oriented.

× That's what works best for me at the moment.

✓ That's what works best for me at the moment.

This sentence is correct as written. Explanation: The structure and tense are appropriate for expressing a present preference; no correction needed.