工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时要使用正确时态与句子结构，直接回应问题并给出简短背景。可以先说“I'm a student”或“I'm a graduate”，然后用一两句补充细节（如毕业时间或学校地点）。注意连词与标点，使句子清晰。

範例: I'm a recent graduate. I finished my degree at a university in Shenzhen last year, where I studied pharmacy.

建議: 问题询问工作地点与单位，回答应聚焦一两句明确说明公司和城市，并补充你在公司的职位或工作内容。避免无关信息或句子碎片，注意衔接词。

範例: I work for Yorktown, a pharmaceutical company based in Shenzhen. I work in the research department, focusing on drug formulation.

建議: 回答要更具体并使用恰当词汇说明理由。用一两个支持性细节，并用连接词（because, for example）连贯句子。避免错误词汇（如“self cultural”不明确），用准确表达描述工作内容和收获。

範例: Yes, it's a good place to work because my role involves biological research and lab techniques. For example, I often perform cell culture and analytical tests, which have greatly improved my technical skills.

建議: 回答需清晰表达情感和原因。避免用错词（如“worry”和“children”不合语境），用明确词汇描述同事氛围与支持，并给出一两个具体例子说明他们如何帮助你。

範例: Yes, I really like working there because my colleagues are friendly and supportive. For instance, they mentor me on experiments and give advice on career development, which has helped me improve professionally and personally.

建議: 回答应具体且用准确词汇描述职业计划。说明你想学的技能类型、时间框架及目的，使用连接词解释原因。避免不明词组（如“ethnic holes”），改用恰当表达。

範例: In the next two years, I plan to develop advanced laboratory skills, such as molecular biology techniques and quality control procedures, so I can qualify for senior positions and create more opportunities for career advancement.

× I am a student last year I graduate in university in Shenzhen.

✓ I was a student. Last year I graduated from a university in Shenzhen.

句子中时间状语“last year”表示过去，动词应使用过去时。原句中用了现在时“am”与“graduate”，且缺少连词或标点使句子不连贯。建议把陈述拆成两句并将动词改为过去式，同时在“graduate”前加介词“from”。

× Yorktown is a company in Shenzhen. The location is about. My major is at my college. My major is pharmacy.

✓ Yorktown is a company in Shenzhen. Its location is nearby. I majored in pharmacy at college.

原句“The location is about.”不完整，缺少宾语或补充信息，属于句子结构错误；“My major is at my college.”表达不自然，应该用动词结构说明所学专业或使用过去时表明过去的学习状态。将不完整句补全，并用过去时或完成体更符合语境。

× My major is at my college.

✓ I majored in pharmacy at college.

“major”作为名词后面通常用介词in来说明专业（major in ...），而不是“is at”。此外描述已经完成的学习应使用过去式“majored”。建议使用“major in”结构或用被动/完成式视语境而定。

× Yes, it is a good place to work because my work is related to biology such as self cultural and self based essays.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work because my work is related to biology, such as cell culture and self-paced assays.

原句中“self cultural”和“self based essays”词不达意，应该是“cell culture”（细胞培养）等专业术语；“such as”后面应接并列名词短语并用逗号分隔。建议使用正确的专业词汇并保持并列结构。

× The experience highly enhance my technological skills.

✓ The experience has greatly enhanced my technological skills.

“experience”作为主语，描述其对技能的影响应使用完成时态或过去时，且动词需使用过去分词“enhanced”；副词“highly”搭配不自然，应改为“greatly”。因此使用现在完成时“has enhanced”更恰当，表示经历对当前技能的影响。

× Yes, I indeed like the place where I worry because I remember my friendly children and some kind of friends.

✓ Yes, I do like the place where I work because I remember my friendly colleagues and some other friends.

原句中将“work”误写为“worry”；“children”显然用词错误，应该是“colleagues”（同事）或“coworkers”；“some kind of friends”表达笨拙，应改为“some other friends”。需要注意代词和名词的准确选择以表达正确含义。

× They help me a lot in my career and personal life.

✓ They have helped me a lot in my career and personal life.

根据语境谈及过去的帮助并对现在仍有影响，使用现在完成时更合适。虽然原句语法上可接受，但改为完成时更符合上下文时间关系。

× I plan to learn more ethnic holes skills in two years because more experience can create more opportunities for advancements in this community.

✓ I plan to learn more technical skills in the next two years because more experience can create more opportunities for advancement in this field.

原句“ethnic holes skills”显然为拼写或用词错误，应为“technical skills”；“in two years”容易被误解为“两年后才开始”，更自然的表达是“in the next two years”；“advancements in this community”用词不当，改为“advancement in this field”。因此需要纠正词汇并调整时间短语以匹配计划性未来时。