工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevap kısa ve doğrudan ama dilbilgisi hataları ve doğal akış eksik. "three years ago" ifadesi ve zaman uyumu yanlış; ayrıca aşırı uzun cümleler netlik azaltıyor. Daha doğal bir giriş cümlesi kullanın, zaman ifadelerini doğru yerleştirin ve bağlaçlarla mantıklı destekleyici bilgi verin. Örneğin: önce mevcut durumu söyleyin, sonra ne zaman mezun olduğunuzu ve neden IELTS hazırlığı yaptığınızı kısa bir bağlaçla açıklayın.

範例: I’m not working at the moment. I graduated from university three years ago, and since then I have been preparing for the IELTS because I want to apply for a master’s degree abroad.

建議: Cümle yapısı karışık ve anlaşılması zor. Gereksiz tekrarlar ve yanlış kelime sıralaması var. Soruyu doğrudan yanıtlayıp kısa ve net bir neden verin; eğer stajdan bahsediyorsanız stajın zamanını ve yerine dair basit bilgi ekleyin. Gereksiz ifadelerden kaçının.

範例: I’m not working at the moment because I’m focusing on IELTS preparation. I did a short internship previously, but I don’t have a current job.

建議: Yanıt belirsiz ve çok tekrar eden dolgu kelimeler içeriyor. Olumlu/olumsuz net bir fikir verilmemiş; ayrıca neden kötü olduğunu açıkça belirtmelisiniz. Kısa bir topic cümlesi ile başlayın, sonra 1–2 sebep verin ve örnekleyin. Dolgu kelimelerini azaltın.

範例: No, it wasn’t a good place for me. My supervisor was often unhelpful and made unrealistic demands, which made the internship stressful and unproductive.

建議: Cümleler dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi açısından hatalı ve tekrarlı. "Would you like the place" sorusu geleceğe yönelik tercih sorar; bu yüzden net bir tercih belirtip nedenini açıklayın. Basit, doğru gramerli cümleler kullanın ve tekrarları kaldırın.

範例: No, I wouldn’t want to work there again. The experience was very negative because of poor management, so I would prefer a more supportive workplace.

建議: Cevap belirsiz, noktalama ve kelime seçimleri yanlış; "Masters in Everett" ve sonrası anlamsal olarak tutarsız. Gelecek planlarını net sırayla ve mantıklı cümlelerle ifade edin: hangi eğitimi tamamlayacağınızı, hangi alanda çalışmak istediğinizi ve kısa bir zaman çizelgesi verin.

範例: First, I plan to complete a master’s degree abroad next year. Afterwards, I hope to find a job in my field of study, ideally in research or teaching within the arts.

× I graduated from university in three years ago.

✓ I graduated from university three years ago.

The phrase 'in three years ago' is incorrect because 'ago' already indicates past time and should not be combined with 'in'. Use 'three years ago' to indicate when the graduation happened. Suggestion: remove 'in' and keep 'three years ago' to form a correct past time expression.

× Since then, I have been preparing for the IELTS exams for masters degree in abroad.

✓ Since then, I have been preparing for the IELTS exams for a master's degree abroad.

Use 'a master's degree' with possessive and article, and 'abroad' does not need 'in'. 'IELTS exams' is acceptable but often 'the IELTS exam' is used; the present perfect continuous 'have been preparing' is correct for an ongoing action. Suggestion: add article and possessive 'a master's degree' and use 'abroad' without 'in'.

× I am not currently working because I set my preparing for the IELTS exam and and when I do not anywhere one time I have a just internship.

✓ I am not currently working because I am focusing on preparing for the IELTS exam, and when I do have free time I only take internships.

Original sentence has incorrect verb forms and word order. 'Set my preparing' is ungrammatical; use 'focusing on preparing' or 'preparing'. The phrase 'when I do not anywhere one time' is unclear; interpret as 'when I have free time'. 'a just internship' should be 'only take internships' or 'do short internships'. Suggestion: use clear verb phrases ('focusing on preparing', 'have free time', 'take internships') and correct word order.

× I had an internship, uh, three years ago. I, uh, really terrible experience for me because I felt more terrible experience my boss, umm.

✓ I had an internship three years ago. It was a really terrible experience for me because I had a bad experience with my boss.

The speaker mixes noun and verb forms incorrectly. Use 'It was a really terrible experience' rather than 'I really terrible experience'. 'I felt more terrible experience my boss' is ungrammatical; use 'I had a bad experience with my boss' or 'my boss treated me badly'. Suggestion: use 'It was' + adjective + 'experience', and 'with my boss' for the agent.

× No, actually I do not want to this. I really live a terrible experience. I do not want to leaving new experience.

✓ No, actually I do not want this. I really had a terrible experience. I do not want to have a similar experience again.

'do not want to this' should be 'do not want this' or 'do not want to do this'. 'I really live a terrible experience' mixes tenses and verbs; use past 'had a terrible experience'. 'do not want to leaving new experience' should be 'do not want to have a similar experience' or 'do not want to go through that again'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms ('had') and phrasing ('have a similar experience').

× First of all, I have a plan to finish the Masters in Everett and I. Study uh artists near uh, short lived time.

✓ First of all, I plan to finish my master's degree in Everett, and I will study art for a short period of time.

Use 'plan to' rather than 'have a plan to' (both acceptable but 'I plan to' is more natural). 'Masters' should be 'master's degree' with possessive and article. Fragment 'and I. Study uh artists...' is ungrammatical; combine clauses and use 'will study art' to express future intention. 'short lived time' should be 'for a short period of time' or 'short-term'. Suggestion: use 'master's degree', correct verb forms, and natural time expressions.