工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (I work in an IT company), then give one or two specific details (company name, location, main activities). Correct grammar (use present simple and correct word order). Limit to 2–3 short sentences and avoid redundant phrases.

範例: I work in an IT company called Canada Waves. We are based near Toronto and provide software solutions for local businesses.

建議: Organize the answer: state the company name and location, then one or two specific facts about its scope. Use linking words (and, also) correctly and avoid repeating words like “all around”. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and correct prepositions (in Bolton, projects in the US).

範例: I work for a company called T Dot ID Solutions, which is located in Bolton. We undertake projects across Canada and sometimes in the United States as well.

建議: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Avoid repeating the same idea. Use past simple for past states and present perfect for experience gained. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and be specific about what you learned.

範例: Yes, it is a very good place to work because I have gained a lot of practical experience in software development. As a beginner I learned teamwork and problem-solving skills, which helped me improve quickly.

建議: Answer directly (Yes or No) then describe one or two reasons using clear language and correct grammar. Use correct expressions (outside the city, lots of greenery, we sometimes travel to remote sites). Avoid filler words and correct modal verbs (you can see). Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, I like working there because the office is outside the city in a calm area with lots of greenery. We also travel occasionally to remote sites for projects, and I enjoy those trips.

建議: Be clear about your career goals: state your plan directly, then give two specific actions or steps you are taking (for example, training, exams). Use correct vocabulary (electrician, apprenticeship, provincial seal/exam) and correct tense. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid hesitations and unclear phrases.

範例: I plan to become an electrician and switch careers from IT to skilled trades. Currently I am preparing for the provincial electrician certification exam and doing practical training to gain hands-on experience.

× I do work in an IT company, it is basically a Canada waves company and do we do work around Toronto area.

✓ I work in an IT company. It is basically a Canadian company and we work in the Toronto area.

Errors: unnecessary auxiliary 'do' used with simple present (present participle issue), incorrect adjective 'Canada waves' instead of 'Canadian', word order and punctuation. Suggestion: Use simple present 'I work' for habitual actions, use the adjective 'Canadian' for nationality, separate clauses into sentences and use 'we work in the Toronto area' for location.

× I do work in AID company called T dot ID Solutions. This company is in Bolton City and we do work all around the city and all around the country as well and we do some projects in America as well.

✓ I work at an IT company called T dot ID Solutions. The company is in Bolton and we work throughout the city and the country, and we also do some projects in the United States.

Errors: unnecessary 'do' with simple present; article and preposition errors ('in AID company' should be 'at an IT company'); repetition and awkward phrasing. Suggestion: Use 'I work at' for employment, 'throughout' for widespread work, and 'United States' or 'America' clarified; remove extra 'do'.

× I guess I can say it is a very good place because I have learned a lot of things from this company and I had started new in this company.

✓ I guess I can say it is a very good place because I have learned a lot from this company and I started here as a new employee.

Errors: unnecessary past perfect 'had started' when simple past 'started' is appropriate; awkward phrase 'started new in this company'. Suggestion: Use present perfect 'have learned' for experiences up to now and simple past 'I started' for a past action; rephrase to 'started here as a new employee'.

× I was very fresh and I was new to this work.

✓ I was very inexperienced and new to this work.

Errors: informal adjective 'fresh' used incorrectly to mean inexperienced; repetition 'was' can be combined. Suggestion: Use 'inexperienced' to convey lack of experience and combine phrases for conciseness.

× So I gained a lot of experience in this company and learned a lot of so many things.

✓ So I gained a lot of experience at this company and learned many things.

Errors: redundant 'a lot of' and 'so many things'; preposition 'in' should be 'at' for place of employment. Suggestion: Use concise expression 'gained a lot of experience' and 'learned many things'.

× Yeah, sorry to like the place.

✓ Yes, I like the place.

Errors: Incorrect and unnecessary words 'sorry to like'; informal filler 'like' misused. Suggestion: Directly state 'I like the place' to answer the question.

× It is like outside of city, so very calm place and you will can see all greenery all outside and we have to go somewhere like a very far places to do some budgets and I love travel when I go some place like far from the city.

✓ It is outside the city, so it is a very calm place and you can see greenery everywhere. Sometimes we have to travel to very far places for work, and I love traveling to places far from the city.

Errors: preposition 'outside of city' should be 'outside the city'; modal verb 'you will can' incorrect; 'all greenery all outside' awkward; 'do some budgets' unclear—probably 'for work' or 'to do some budgeting' ; 'I love travel' should be 'I love traveling'. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions, single modal verb 'can', adverb 'everywhere', and gerund 'traveling'. Clarify uncertain phrases.

× Uh, no, like I'm an ID company is basically a low old age work and I am predicting my future in an electrician company.

✓ Uh, no. I work in an IT company that mostly hires older workers, and I plan to pursue a career as an electrician.

Errors: sentence structure confused; 'I'm an ID company' incorrectly refers to person as company; 'low old age work' unclear. Suggestion: Clarify subject and intent: 'I work in an IT company' and state plan 'I plan to pursue a career as an electrician'.

× And I'm also preparing for a prior seal exam, which is like conductor for, uh, if you're getting a electric license, you need to pass it.

✓ I am also preparing for a practical exam; to get an electrical license you need to pass it.

Errors: 'a prior seal exam' unclear and likely incorrect; article 'a electric' should be 'an electric' (or better 'an electrical license'); awkward phrasing 'which is like conductor for'. Suggestion: Use clear terms: 'practical exam' or 'licensing exam' and use correct article 'an' before vowel sound, and 'electrical license'.

× So now I'm preparing it and.

✓ So now I'm preparing for it.

Errors: sentence fragment ending with 'and'; missing preposition 'for'. Suggestion: Complete the sentence with 'preparing for it' or add what follows after 'and'.