工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, pronunciation and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and separate ideas into two short sentences. Use linking words if needed (and/but) and keep it under 5 sentences.

範例: I am currently working. I am a lecturer at a university and I also do a part-time job as an occupational therapist.

建議: Make one coherent sentence about location and then add a short supporting detail. Use correct word order and prepositions (at/in/near). Avoid repeating verbs unnecessarily.

範例: I work at Mahirung University, which is in the Salaya district of Nakhon Pathom, not far from Bangkok.

建議: Use natural vocabulary and correct grammar. Give one main statement then two short supporting details using linking words (for example, because, and). Replace unclear words like “work pad” with “workplace” or “campus.”

範例: Yes, it is. My workplace provides comfortable offices and a peaceful environment, so I can focus on my tasks.

建議: Answer directly, correct word choice and tense, and use linking words to connect reason and result. Keep sentences concise and natural.

範例: Yes, I like it. The quiet atmosphere refreshes me and helps me concentrate, so I can work more effectively.

建議: Clarify intentions and use correct grammar and vocabulary for academic goals. State the plan clearly, give a reason, and mention the next steps. Avoid vague phrases like “provide the research.”

範例: I plan to complete a PhD because my job requires advanced specialist knowledge. After I finish my doctorate, I intend to conduct and publish research in my field.

× I'm currently working I am a lecturers in university and I do a part time job as a occupational therapist.

✓ I'm currently working; I am a lecturer at a university and I do a part-time job as an occupational therapist.

The noun 'lecturers' should be singular 'lecturer' to match singular subject 'I' (singular/plural error). 'University' needs article 'a' and preposition 'at'. 'Part time' should be hyphenated as 'part-time' when used as an adjective. Use 'an' before vowel sound 'occupational' is fine but here 'an occupational therapist' is correct; original used 'a'. Also add a semicolon or conjunction to separate clauses. Suggestion: match singular/plural, use correct articles and hyphenation, and separate clauses with punctuation or conjunctions.

× I work at Mahirung University is located in Salaya district, Nekompatom.

✓ I work at Mahirung University, which is located in Salaya district, Nekompatom.

The sentence incorrectly combines two clauses without proper connector. Use a relative clause 'which is located' to link the workplace and its location (there-be/structure error). Suggestion: use a comma and 'which is' or rephrase as 'Mahirung University is located in...' and separate the ideas.

× It is not far from Bangkok.

✓ It is not far from Bangkok.

This sentence is correct; no change needed. Included to confirm preposition 'from' is correct for distance expressions.

× Yes, it is. This work pad is provide a comfortable room for working and the environment is quite peaceful.

✓ Yes, it is. This workplace provides a comfortable room for working, and the environment is quite peaceful.

'Work pad' is incorrect collocation; 'workplace' or 'workplace' fits. 'Provide' must agree with singular subject 'This workplace' so use 'provides' (subject-verb agreement). Also change structure to correct verb form and add comma before conjunction. Suggestion: use appropriate noun 'workplace' and ensure verb agrees with subject.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

Question form 'Would you like' implies offer or preference in future; interviewer asked about current feelings so 'Do you like' is more appropriate. This addresses modality/tense mismatch; prefer present simple for habitual/state.

× Yes I do. This plate made me feel more refreshed or sometimes feel more concentrated in the quiet room, so I can work well there.

✓ Yes, I do. This place makes me feel more refreshed and sometimes more focused in the quiet room, so I can work well there.

'Plate' is wrong word; should be 'place'. Tense: use present simple 'makes' for habitual/general truth rather than past 'made'. Use 'focused' (adjective) instead of 'concentrated' (less natural here). Replace 'or' with 'and' to connect effects. Suggestion: choose correct noun, use present simple for current states, and select appropriate adjectives.

× My plan is I have to get the PhD because my work is required degree about specific knowledge.

✓ My plan is to get a PhD because my work requires a degree for specific knowledge.

Awkward structure: 'My plan is I have to get' should be 'My plan is to get' (infinitive). 'The PhD' usually 'a PhD'. 'My work is required degree about specific knowledge' is incorrect; use 'my work requires a degree in a specific area' or 'requires a degree for specialized knowledge'. Suggestion: use infinitive after 'My plan is', choose articles correctly, and rephrase to make subject-verb relationship clear.

× So I have to graduate in this and after that I will provide the research.

✓ So I have to complete it and after that I will conduct research.

'Graduate in this' is awkward: 'complete it' or 'earn it' (the degree) is clearer. 'Provide the research' is incorrect collocation; use 'conduct research' or 'do research'. Maintain future 'will conduct' for planned future action. Suggestion: use correct collocations for academic actions and ensure verbs match intended meaning.