家乡— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevabınızda "uh" gibi dolgu kelimelerinden kaçının ve cümlenizi daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için daha net ifadeler kullanın. Ayrıca, "private city" ifadesi yerine "near Istanbul" gibi daha doğru ve yaygın ifadeler tercih edin.

範例: My hometown is Takeda, which is located near Istanbul. I really love it because everything is within walking distance.

建議: Cümlenizdeki dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin ve daha akıcı bir anlatım için bağlaçlar kullanın. Ayrıca, "everywhere close each other" ifadesi yerine "everything is close to each other" gibi doğru yapılar kullanın.

範例: I really like my hometown because everything is close to each other. For example, if I want to go to the park, shopping mall, or beach, I can just walk. Therefore, I don't need to use public transportation or own a car.

建議: Cümlenizi daha net ve doğru zaman kullanımıyla ifade edin. Gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltın. Ayrıca, "in abroad" yerine "abroad" kullanın.

範例: I was born in my hometown and lived there for about 20 years. After that, I went to a different state for university, and now I live abroad in the UK.

建議: Cümlenizdeki dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin ve daha akıcı bir anlatım için bağlaçlar kullanın. Ayrıca, "a small town" ve "doesn't have a lot of things for young people" gibi doğru ifadeler kullanın.

範例: To be honest, I don't think my hometown is a good place for young people because it is a small town and doesn't have many activities for them. However, it is close to Istanbul, so young people can easily go there for entertainment.

× My hometown is Takeda, uh, near the private city of Istanbul.

✓ My hometown is Takeda, uh, near the private city of Istanbul.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no 'there be' issue detected.

× I really like my hometown uh, because everywhere close each other.

✓ I really like my hometown uh, because everywhere is close to each other.

The phrase 'everywhere close each other' is incorrect because 'close' needs to be followed by the preposition 'to' when describing proximity between places. The correct phrase is 'close to each other.'

× I don't need to use any public transportation or own car.

✓ I don't need to use any public transportation or my own car.

The phrase 'own car' lacks a possessive determiner. It should be 'my own car' to indicate possession. Also, 'any public transportation' is correct as 'transportation' is uncountable.

× Yeah, I lived 20 year.

✓ Yeah, I lived 20 years.

The noun 'year' should be plural 'years' when referring to a period longer than one year.

× I went to different state for university and now I live in abroad, uh, called UK.

✓ I went to a different state for university and now I live abroad, uh, in the UK.

The phrase 'in abroad' is incorrect because 'abroad' does not require a preposition 'in'. Also, 'different state' needs an article 'a'. Additionally, 'called UK' should be 'in the UK' for clarity and correctness.

× my hometown is small town, don't have a lot of thing for a young people

✓ my hometown is a small town, doesn't have a lot of things for young people

The phrase 'small town' needs an article 'a'. 'Don't' should be 'doesn't' to agree with singular subject 'my hometown'. 'Thing' should be plural 'things' because it refers to multiple items. 'A young people' is incorrect; 'young people' is plural and does not need 'a'.

× This is a close to Istanbul if want any enjoyable time.

✓ This is close to Istanbul if you want any enjoyable time.

The phrase 'a close to Istanbul' is incorrect; 'close' here is an adjective and does not need an article 'a'. Also, 'if want' is missing the subject 'you'.