智力游戏— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and 'mmm'. Also, use plural form 'puzzles' and correct verb forms such as 'I always won'. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details in a logical order.

範例: Yes, I used to play puzzles with my brother when I was a child. I often won, and my mother would reward me whenever I was the winner.

建議: Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, replace vague phrases like 'make my dream more creatively' with clearer expressions.

範例: I usually play puzzles when I feel bored because they help refresh my mind. Moreover, solving puzzles enhances my creativity and problem-solving skills.

建議: Use plural forms 'number puzzles' and 'word puzzles'. Improve sentence coherence by using linking words and clearer expressions. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'even though it at the end I cannot solve it'.

範例: I like both word and number puzzles, but number puzzles are more difficult for me because the numbers seem random. For instance, I tried twice to solve a number puzzle but couldn't complete it.

建議: Improve grammar by using correct verb forms and sentence structure. Replace unclear phrases like 'feel their leisure time' and 'she her brand is more creative' with clearer expressions. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific examples.

範例: Absolutely, I think puzzles are great for older people because they help pass leisure time and keep the mind active. For example, my grandmother does puzzles every day, and I believe her creativity is even better than mine.

× Yes, I used to play puzzle when I was a child at the time umm, I remember at the time I played puzzle with my brother.

✓ Yes, I used to play puzzles when I was a child. I remember playing puzzles with my brother.

The word 'puzzle' should be plural 'puzzles' because it refers to the activity in general, which is countable and usually plural in this context. Also, the sentence was a bit redundant and awkward, so it was simplified for clarity.

× But I always win.

✓ But I always won.

Since the student is talking about past events ('when I was a child'), the verb should be in the past tense 'won' instead of present tense 'win' to maintain tense consistency.

× and then my mother gave me some reward when I get winner.

✓ and then my mother gave me some reward when I won.

The phrase 'when I get winner' is incorrect. The correct past tense form is 'when I won'. Also, 'get winner' is not a proper expression; 'won' is the correct verb form here.

× I always play puzzle when I feel bored because it can refresh my mind and then I can solve any puzzles that I want to arrange.

✓ I always play puzzles when I feel bored because they can refresh my mind and then I can solve any puzzles that I want to arrange.

The word 'puzzle' should be plural 'puzzles' to refer to the activity generally. Also, 'it' should be changed to 'they' to agree with the plural noun 'puzzles'.

× And not only that, it can make my dream more creatively than before.

✓ And not only that, it can make my dreams more creative than before.

'Creatively' is an adverb, but here an adjective 'creative' is needed to describe 'dreams'. Also, 'dream' should be plural 'dreams' to match the context.

× I like both, but puzzle with number is more difficult than puzzle with word because the number is so random.

✓ I like both, but number puzzles are more difficult than word puzzles because the numbers are so random.

The phrases 'puzzle with number' and 'puzzle with word' are incorrect; the correct forms are 'number puzzles' and 'word puzzles'. Also, 'number' should be plural 'numbers' to agree with 'are'.

× For example, at the time I tried twice to solve the puzzle of number and even though it at the end I cannot solve it.

✓ For example, at that time I tried twice to solve the number puzzle, but in the end, I could not solve it.

The phrase 'at the time' is better as 'at that time' for clarity. 'Puzzle of number' should be 'number puzzle'. 'Cannot' should be in past tense 'could not' to match the past context. Also, sentence structure was improved for clarity.

× Absolutely yes, because it can feel their leisure time.

✓ Absolutely yes, because it can help them enjoy their leisure time.

The phrase 'can feel their leisure time' is incorrect. The modal verb 'can' should be followed by a verb that makes sense here, such as 'help them enjoy'. Also, 'their' refers to old people, so 'them' is appropriate.

× For example, my grandmother, she always do puzzle every day and every time and I think she her brand is more creative than mine.

✓ For example, my grandmother always does puzzles every day, and I think her brain is more creative than mine.

'She always do' should be 'she always does' to agree with third person singular subject. 'Puzzle' should be plural 'puzzles'. 'She her brand' is incorrect; it should be 'her brain'. Also, 'every time' is redundant and removed for clarity.