智力游戏— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ должен быть более естественным и грамматически правильным. Избегайте неясных выражений, таких как "Since this was kept you waiting". Лучше использовать связующие слова для логичности и добавить конкретные детали.

範例: Yes, I enjoyed doing puzzles when I was a child, especially in kindergarten. They were fascinating and helped me improve my logical thinking and mental skills.

建議: Используйте более точные времена и избегайте повторений. Связывайте предложения с помощью союзов для плавности речи. Добавьте больше конкретики о типах пазлов.

範例: I usually do puzzles both during trips and when I feel bored. For instance, I play puzzle games on my phone while traveling by car, and at home, I enjoy assembling large jigsaw puzzles.

建議: Сделайте ответ более связным и грамматически правильным. Избегайте неясных выражений, например, "requires time to things". Добавьте объяснения с использованием связующих слов.

範例: I prefer number puzzles because they help me improve my logical thinking and problem-solving skills. However, I find word puzzles more difficult since they take more time and sometimes include words I don't know.

建議: Ответ должен быть более чётким и логичным. Избегайте неопределённых выражений, таких как "some other people". Используйте связующие слова для ясности и приведите конкретные причины.

範例: I believe puzzles can be beneficial for older people because they help keep the mind active. However, for those who find puzzles too difficult, it might cause stress rather than relaxation.

× Since this was kept you waiting and fascinating game.

✓ Since this game kept you waiting and was fascinating.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing verbs, making it unclear. The corrected sentence properly structures the clause with the subject 'this game' and verbs 'kept' and 'was' to convey the intended meaning.

× Moreover, it helped to improve your logic and mentality.

✓ Moreover, it helped to improve my logic and mentality.

The student is talking about their own experience, so the pronoun should be 'my' instead of 'your' to maintain consistency and clarity.

× I did puzzles both during a trip or when I felt bored.

✓ I did puzzles both during a trip and when I felt bored.

The conjunction 'or' is incorrect here because 'both' pairs with 'and' to indicate two simultaneous conditions. Also, the past tense 'did' is correct.

× For example, when I was on a trip in a car, I did puzzles in my phone.

✓ For example, when I was on a trip in a car, I did puzzles on my phone.

The correct preposition for using apps or games on a phone is 'on' rather than 'in'.

× I had a variety of apps with puzzle games, and at home I have a big puzzle which I have to collect.

✓ I have a variety of apps with puzzle games, and at home I have a big puzzle which I have to complete.

The first clause should be in present tense 'have' to match the current possession. Also, 'collect' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'complete' or 'assemble' when referring to puzzles.

× I like doing number puzzles since it helps me to improve my logic and solving problems.

✓ I like doing number puzzles since they help me to improve my logic and problem-solving skills.

The pronoun 'it' should be 'they' to agree with the plural noun 'number puzzles'. Also, 'solving problems' should be 'problem-solving skills' for clarity.

× However, I find word puzzles more challenging as it requires time to things and it may be possible that I don't know the word which is in the puzzle.

✓ However, I find word puzzles more challenging as they require time to think, and it is possible that I don't know some words in the puzzle.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun agreement ('it' should be 'they' for plural 'word puzzles'), awkward phrasing ('time to things' should be 'time to think'), and unclear expression ('may be possible' is redundant). The correction improves clarity and grammar.

× To illustrate, it may be stressful for those category of people who can't do the puzzles, but good for those who can solve the puzzles and feel calm.

✓ To illustrate, it may be stressful for those categories of people who can't do puzzles, but good for those who can solve puzzles and feel calm.

The phrase 'those category of people' is incorrect; it should be 'those categories of people' or 'that category of people'. Also, 'the puzzles' is better as 'puzzles' in general here.