智力游戏— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity and coherence: begin with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, avoid filler words and unnecessary digressions, and use one or two supporting details with clear linking words. Correct grammar and sentence structure (remove extra words like “and this”, fix verb tenses). Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Not really. I didn’t do many puzzles as a child because I attended a supplemental math school called Kumo. There we focused on mental arithmetic, which later proved useful, but at the time I found the classes boring. So I didn’t have much time or interest for puzzles.

建議: Answer directly then add specific examples with correct grammar and linking words. Replace vague phrases (“I love reading sad”) with precise descriptions. Use present simple for routines and keep sentences concise. Mention specific times and frequency.

範例: I rarely do puzzles. Usually I read on my commute or at the gym, so I don’t have time for puzzles. If I do play them, it’s only during short breaks, such as TV ad breaks or waiting for a bus.

建議: Give a clear preference with reasons and specific examples. Avoid fillers (“umm”, “I was saying”), and explain why one type is easier or harder using precise vocabulary. Keep answer within 2–4 sentences and use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘however’.

範例: Number puzzles come more naturally to me because I used to practise mental arithmetic at Kumo. Word puzzles are harder for me since they require knowledge of spelling and wordplay, which I find less familiar.

建議: Provide a direct opinion and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct collocations (e.g., “keep their brain sharp/active”), avoid repetition, and finish the thought (prevent what?). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example’.

範例: Yes, I think puzzles are beneficial for older people because they help keep the brain sharp and improve memory. For example, doing crosswords or Sudoku regularly can slow cognitive decline and provide a stimulating social activity if done in groups.

× Not so much. In my childhood, I often went to and this special school called Kumo, which is like one of the most common activities that Asian parents send their children to.

✓ Not so much. In my childhood, I often went to a special school called Kumo, which is one of the most common activities Asian parents send their children to.

The original sentence has extra words ('and this') and awkward phrasing. Remove 'and this' and change 'one of the most common activities that Asian parents send their children to' to 'one of the most common activities Asian parents send their children to' for grammatical clarity and natural word order. Suggestion: Omit redundant words and keep the relative clause directly attached to the noun it modifies.

× They're mostly teaching how to do math in their head really, really quickly, which becomes quite handy later on, but at a time it's just so boring.

✓ They mostly teach how to do math in your head really, really quickly, which becomes quite handy later on, but at the time it is just so boring.

Use simple present 'teach' to describe habitual action instead of 'They're mostly teaching'. Replace 'their' with 'your' or 'one's' because referring to students in general; here 'your' fits the conversational tone. 'At a time' is incorrect; use 'at the time' to refer to that period in the past. Contractions are acceptable but keep consistent tense. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual facts and correct fixed expressions like 'at the time'.

× I don't do puzzle that much surprisingly.

✓ I don't do puzzles that much, surprisingly.

The noun should be plural ('puzzles') after 'do' when speaking generally. Add a comma before 'surprisingly' to separate the adverb. Use plural for general activities. Suggestion: Use plural countable noun when talking about activities in general.

× I love reading sad.

✓ I love reading sad stories.

'Reading sad' is incomplete; 'sad' is an adjective and needs a noun; adding 'stories' clarifies what is being read. Suggestion: Ensure adjectives modify a noun; use 'sad stories' or 'sad books'.

× I often reading books during commuting to work and to the gym.

✓ I often read books while commuting to work and to the gym.

Use the base form 'read' with adverb 'often' for present habitual action; 'reading' is the wrong form here. Use 'while commuting' rather than 'during commuting'. Suggestion: Use 'often read' and 'while commuting' for correct verb forms and prepositions.

× Puzzle is mostly I think during the advertisement or things like that like ads break that I need to find something to keep time.

✓ I mostly do puzzles during advertisements or ad breaks when I need something to pass the time.

Reorder sentence for natural English: 'I mostly do puzzles' then specify timing. Use plural 'advertisements' or 'ad breaks', and the idiom is 'pass the time' not 'keep time'. Remove filler phrases. Suggestion: Place subject and verb together and use common idioms like 'pass the time'.

× I was saying a number of puzzles umm comes more naturally to me.

✓ I was saying that number puzzles, um, come more naturally to me.

Correct subject-verb agreement: 'number puzzles' (plural) with 'come'. The original has mismatched tense and number. 'I was saying' is awkward; better: 'I meant that number puzzles come more naturally to me.' Suggestion: Ensure plural noun takes plural verb and use clearer reporting verbs.

× But the reason is probably an entire because the alphabet is quite complicated.

✓ But the reason is probably cultural because the alphabet is quite complicated.

'An entire' is incorrect; likely intended 'cultural' or 'entirely'. 'Entire' doesn't fit context. If intending 'entirely', phrase should be 'probably entirely because...'. Here 'cultural' makes sense given explanation about alphabet. Suggestion: Choose words that fit meaning; use 'entirely' or 'cultural' as appropriate.

× Like we have many types of alphabet which can be above or below umm.

✓ For example, our alphabet has many types of letters that can be above or below the line.

'We have many types of alphabet' is awkward; use 'our alphabet has many types of letters'. Clarify 'above or below' by adding 'the line' or 'the baseline'. Suggestion: Refer to components ('letters') not the whole ('alphabet') and complete the phrase.

× The usual light is quite difficult to play with puzzle.

✓ The usual layout is quite difficult to work with when solving puzzles.

'Light' is incorrect; likely 'layout'. 'Play with puzzle' is awkward; use 'work with when solving puzzles'. Adjust word choice for clarity. Suggestion: Use precise nouns like 'layout' and common collocations like 'work with'.

× I think it's good because people can then use their brain and keep their brain until firm, especially for those wonderful and tend not to use their brain that much especially after retirement.

✓ I think it's good because people can use their brains and keep them active and fit, especially for those who tend not to use their brains much after retirement.

Multiple issues: 'keep their brain until firm' is incorrect—use 'keep them active and fit'. 'Wonderful' is wrong word; likely 'older' or 'retired people'. Add 'who' for relative clause and use plural 'brains' to match 'people'. Remove duplicate 'especially'. Suggestion: Use correct collocations ('keep active', 'tend not to') and appropriate adjectives like 'older'.

× So they just go out, play off, come back home, do some chores, also keep their brain active and prevent.

✓ So they just go out, hang out, come back home, do some chores, and also keep their brains active to prevent decline.

'Play off' is incorrect; possibly 'play golf' or 'hang out'—use 'hang out' if general. 'Prevent' needs an object—'prevent decline' or 'prevent cognitive decline'. Use plural 'brains' to match 'they'. Include conjunction 'and'. Suggestion: Use clear verbs and complete the idea by specifying what is being prevented.