地理— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は意味が伝わりにくく、文法的な誤りや冗長な表現が多いです。より自然で効果的な英語表現を使い、主題文を明確にし、具体的な理由を簡潔に述べることが必要です。

範例: I really like geography because it helps me understand the world and the history of different countries, including Japan. When I was a child, I enjoyed looking at maps to learn more about places.

建議: 内容は伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が目立ちます。接続詞を使って論理的に話をつなげ、具体的な理由や例を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

範例: Yes, geography is very useful because it helps us understand the history and culture of different places. For example, when visiting a border, knowing geography can explain why certain events happened there. Therefore, I want my child to learn more about it.

建議: 回答が不明瞭で、言いたいことが伝わりにくいです。話す際は、はっきりとした主題文を作り、具体的な経験や理由を簡潔に述べる練習をしましょう。

範例: Yes, I studied geography until high school. I enjoyed it because it helped me understand social issues and current events better.

建議: 理由は述べられていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。より自然な英語で理由を述べ、感情表現を簡潔にすると良いでしょう。

範例: No, I don't want to be a geography teacher because it requires many skills like teaching and listening to students' opinions, which I find challenging and sometimes frustrating.

建議: 内容は良いですが、文法の誤りや語順の問題があります。より自然で流暢な表現を使い、理由を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

範例: Yes, I want to learn more about the geography of other countries because I am a journalist. Knowing more about my country and others helps me explain things clearly to people worldwide.

× I fully like geography because when I was a child I always already maps in the world and Japan as I couldn't understand what deeply about history or social studies.

✓ I fully like geography because when I was a child I always looked at maps of the world and Japan as I couldn't understand deeply about history or social studies.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'maps' without a verb and has awkward phrasing. The plural noun 'maps' needs a verb like 'looked at' to make sense. Also, 'what deeply about history' is unclear and should be 'deeply about history'. The correction adds the verb and clarifies the meaning.

× I think a geography is one of the most important factors.

✓ I think geography is one of the most important subjects.

The word 'geography' is an uncountable noun here and should not have the indefinite article 'a'. Also, 'factors' is not the best word; 'subjects' fits better in this context.

× Yes, I think this subject is a very useful because when you go to a border, you could understand where about the history of world, where the condition by understanding the geography.

✓ Yes, I think this subject is very useful because when you go to a border, you can understand the history of the world and the conditions by understanding geography.

The phrase 'a very useful' is incorrect; 'very useful' does not need an article. 'Where about the history of world' is incorrect; it should be 'the history of the world'. Also, 'could' is better as 'can' for general truths. 'The geography' should be just 'geography'.

× So I think I want to make my child's learn more about that.

✓ So I think I want my child to learn more about that.

'My child's learn' is incorrect; 'child's' is possessive but 'learn' is a verb that needs to be in infinitive form after 'want'. The correct form is 'I want my child to learn'.

× Yes, uh, until, uh, when I was a high school student, I, uh, with the study there, what about the geography?

✓ Yes, until I was a high school student, I studied geography.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'With the study there, what about the geography?' is not grammatical. The correction simplifies and uses past tense 'studied' to match the time frame.

× Because I loved to study about social problems or what is social studies, which made me understand deeply about the Daily News.

✓ Because I loved studying social problems and social studies, which helped me understand the Daily News deeply.

'Loved to study about' is awkward; 'loved studying' is better. 'What is social studies' is unnecessary. 'Made me understand deeply' is better as 'helped me understand deeply'.

× No, I don't think I want to be a geographical teacher in the future.

✓ No, I don't think I want to be a geography teacher in the future.

'Geographical teacher' is incorrect; the correct term is 'geography teacher'.

× Yeah, because being a teacher requires a lot of knowledge and skills, such as teaching or listening deeply about children's opinion, which made me annoyed and frustrated.

✓ Yeah, because being a teacher requires a lot of knowledge and skills, such as teaching and listening carefully to children's opinions, which makes me annoyed and frustrated.

'Listening deeply about children's opinion' is incorrect; it should be 'listening carefully to children's opinions'. Also, 'made me' should be 'makes me' to express a general feeling.

× Yes, I want to gain much more knowledge and information about geography because I am journalist and I have to know much deeper about my country so that I can explain it with people from all over the world.

✓ Yes, I want to gain much more knowledge and information about geography because I am a journalist and I have to know much more deeply about my country so that I can explain it to people from all over the world.

Missing article 'a' before 'journalist'. 'Know much deeper' is incorrect; it should be 'know much more deeply'. Also, 'explain it with people' should be 'explain it to people'.