地理— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding repetition and redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide a clearer opinion.

範例: Honestly, I'm not very interested in geography because I study it only as part of my high school curriculum. However, I believe that if I had the opportunity to explore it more deeply, it could be a fascinating subject.

建議: Improve clarity and coherence by using appropriate linking words and completing your examples. Also, avoid vague phrases and provide specific reasons or examples.

範例: I think geography is very useful because it helps us predict weather changes by observing natural signs like the sky or wind. Furthermore, it enhances survival skills; for instance, hunters often use geographical knowledge to locate fish habitats.

建議: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use precise vocabulary and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

範例: Yes, I have studied geography since kindergarten. My teachers used to show us videos about constellations and the formation of the Earth, which I found very interesting and memorable.

建議: Make your answer clearer and more concise by avoiding awkward phrasing and redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Although I might study geography in depth, I don't want to be a geography teacher. I'm more interested in careers like economic analysis or becoming an astronaut because they offer more opportunities to enrich my life experience.

建議: Improve fluency by using linking words and avoiding informal expressions. Also, clarify your points with more precise language.

範例: Yes, definitely. If I have the opportunity, I will study geography more deeply, not only about my own country but also about the geographical features of other nations. After all, knowledge is power, and you never know when it might be useful.

× I only learn geography because it's a part of Vietnamese syllabus at high school.

✓ I only learn geography because it's part of the Vietnamese syllabus at high school.

The phrase 'a part of Vietnamese syllabus' is incorrect because 'syllabus' is a singular countable noun and should be preceded by 'the' to specify it. Also, 'a part of' is less natural here than 'part of the'. The correction improves article usage and natural phrasing.

× I only learn geography because it's a part of Vietnamese syllabus at high school.

✓ I only learn geography because it's part of the Vietnamese syllabus in high school.

The preposition 'at' is less appropriate when referring to educational levels; 'in high school' is the correct prepositional phrase to indicate the level of education.

× But I think that if I have a chance to learn about geography, I think it would be a really great chance.

✓ I think that if I have a chance to learn about geography, it would be a really great opportunity.

Starting a sentence with 'But' in formal speech is often discouraged. Also, repeating 'I think' is redundant. Replacing 'chance' with 'opportunity' avoids repetition and improves clarity.

× From my experience, if you have a good grasp of geography, you might realize an upcoming extreme weather pattern or just normal weather pattern just by looking at the sky or feeling the speed of wind.

✓ From my experience, if you have a good grasp of geography, you might predict an upcoming extreme weather pattern or just a normal weather pattern by looking at the sky or feeling the speed of the wind.

The verb 'realize' is not appropriate here; 'predict' fits better. Also, 'feeling the speed of wind' should be 'feeling the speed of the wind' to include the definite article for 'wind'.

× For example, a lot of hunters usually detect where the fish lives in the case due to.

✓ For example, a lot of hunters usually detect where the fish live in such cases.

The phrase 'in the case due to' is incorrect and unclear. It should be replaced with 'in such cases' to convey the intended meaning. Also, 'fish' is plural here, so the verb should be 'live' not 'lives'.

× Yes, as I said before, I still learn geography in my high school, but actually I have learned about geography since when I was in kindergarten.

✓ Yes, as I said before, I am still learning geography in high school, but actually I have been learning about geography since I was in kindergarten.

The present continuous 'am still learning' is more appropriate for ongoing actions. 'Have learned' should be 'have been learning' to indicate continuous action from past to present. Also, 'since when I was' is incorrect; 'since I was' is correct.

× Back then, my kindergarten teachers usually showed videos about the constellations and the formation of the case which are really helpful and intriguing.

✓ Back then, my kindergarten teachers usually showed videos about the constellations and the formation of the earth which were really helpful and intriguing.

'Formation of the case' is incorrect; likely intended 'formation of the earth'. Also, 'which are' should be 'which were' to match past tense context.

× These videos are still ingrained in my mind up up till now.

✓ These videos are still ingrained in my mind up till now.

The repetition 'up up' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'up'.

× Well, although I might study more about geography in depth, but actually when it comes to future career, there are more things that can fascinate me such as economy analyzers or an astronaut.

✓ Well, although I might study more about geography in depth, actually when it comes to my future career, there are more things that fascinate me such as economic analysts or an astronaut.

Using both 'although' and 'but' together is redundant; one should be removed. Also, 'economy analyzers' is incorrect; the correct term is 'economic analysts'. Added 'my' before 'future career' for clarity.

× Since I feel these things is more, these things are more suitable for me and can meet my demand about enriching my life experience.

✓ Since I feel these things are more suitable, they meet my demand for enriching my life experience.

The verb 'is' does not agree with the plural subject 'these things'; it should be 'are'. The sentence is also restructured for clarity and conciseness.

× Yes, absolutely. As I said before, if I have a chance to learn more about geography in depth I will definitely take it.

✓ Yes, absolutely. As I said before, if I have a chance to learn more about geography in depth, I will definitely take it.

A comma is needed after the conditional clause for correct sentence structure.

× Besides learning about my national geography, I will learn about other nations geographic features.

✓ Besides learning about my national geography, I will learn about other nations' geographic features.

The possessive form 'nations'' is needed to correctly modify 'geographic features'.

× You know knowledge is power you won't know when it comes to use in your life.

✓ You know, knowledge is power; you never know when it will be useful in your life.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation. Adding commas and a semicolon improves clarity. Also, 'when it comes to use' is awkward; 'when it will be useful' is clearer.