花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，存在重复和冗余，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，同时注意语法正确性。

範例: No, I don't like flowers because I'm allergic to pollen. When I'm near flowers, my skin gets irritated and I feel uncomfortable, so I usually avoid them.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然，建议使用正确的句型和词汇，避免口语填充词，增强表达的连贯性。

範例: Yes, my friend Mike loves flowers. He plants many flowers in his garden and often shares photos of them with us, which makes us happy.

建議: 回答不够清晰，语法混乱，建议直接回答问题并给出简洁理由，避免无意义的语气词。

範例: No, there aren't many flowers where I live because I'm allergic to them, so I prefer to live in places without many flowers.

建議: 表达不够准确，语法错误较多，建议使用简单句表达观点，避免复杂且错误的句型。

範例: I rarely take photos of flowers, but I have taken a few because they are beautiful and often symbolize elegance and purity.

建議: 句子结构混乱，重复表达较多，建议分句表达，注意语法和词汇的准确使用。

範例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers as gifts for occasions like birthdays and weddings. Flowers symbolize happiness and blessings.

× I'm actually allergic to pollen, so when I near the flowers my skin will become irritations which will make me feel really uncomfortable, so I scarcely never come near to the flower.

✓ I'm actually allergic to pollen, so when I near the flowers my skin will become irritated which will make me feel really uncomfortable, so I scarcely ever come near the flowers.

这里“irritations”应为不可数形容词“irritated”，表示皮肤被刺激的状态；“scarcely never”是双重否定，应改为“scarcely ever”；“flower”应为复数形式“flowers”，因为前文提到的是多朵花。

× I'm actually allergic to pollen, so when I near the flowers my skin will become irritations which will make me feel really uncomfortable, so I scarcely never come near to the flower.

✓ I'm actually allergic to pollen, so when I am near the flowers my skin will become irritated which will make me feel really uncomfortable, so I scarcely ever come near the flowers.

动词“near”需要与“be”连用构成“be near”，表示“靠近”；“come near to”中的“to”可以省略，且前文应保持一致。

× Yes I do with my friends. Mike is a is very interesting in flowers and he plants many flowers around in his garden.

✓ Yes, I do. My friend Mike is very interested in flowers and he plants many flowers around his garden.

“I do with my friends”表达不清，应改为“Yes, I do.”；“Mike is a is very interesting”中“interesting”应为“interested”，且去掉多余的“a is”；“around in his garden”应简化为“around his garden”。

× Uh, often he will show the photographs of his planted flower to us and share the happiness as well.

✓ Uh, often he will show us the photographs of the flowers he has planted and share the happiness as well.

“show the photographs of his planted flower to us”中“planted flower”应为复数“flowers he has planted”，且“show ... to us”结构中“show us ...”更自然。

× No, there are, as I said, Oh my. I'm really allergic to the flowers, but so I won't live in a place there are many flowers. Yeah.

✓ No, there aren't, as I said. Oh my, I'm really allergic to flowers, so I won't live in a place where there are many flowers. Yeah.

“there are”应否定为“there aren't”；“but so”重复，应删去“but”；“there are many flowers”前应加“where”引导定语从句。

× Well, I would say scarcely, but I had had to take photo of the flowers once or twice because they are really beautiful and many fabulous are symbols of elegant and purity, so that real.

✓ Well, I would say scarcely, but I have had to take photos of flowers once or twice because they are really beautiful and many fabulous flowers are symbols of elegance and purity, so that's real.

“had had”时态错误，应为现在完成时“have had”；“take photo”应为复数“take photos”；“many fabulous are symbols”缺少名词，应为“many fabulous flowers”；“symbols of elegant and purity”形容词用错，应为名词“elegance and purity”；“so that real”应为“so that's real”。

× Yes they do to people in my country often send flowers to others as gifts, for example birthdays or weddings gifts to others to convey not only the happiness but also the blessings they want to express and flower have many good symbols in our.

✓ Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others as gifts, for example for birthdays or weddings, to convey not only happiness but also blessings they want to express, and flowers have many good symbols in our culture.

“Yes they do to people in my country often send flowers”语序错误，应改为“people in my country often send flowers”；“birthdays or weddings gifts”应为“for birthdays or weddings”；“the happiness”去掉定冠词“the”；“flower have”应为复数“flowers have”；句尾不完整，补充“in our culture”。