花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar jawaban lebih alami dan efektif. Gunakan kalimat yang jelas dan langsung menjawab pertanyaan dengan kalimat topik, lalu berikan detail pendukung yang relevan dan terhubung dengan kata penghubung.

範例: Yes, I love flowers very much. When I was young, I didn't like them because I thought it was unusual for kids to be interested in plants. However, now I appreciate their beauty and enjoy having them around.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren. Jelaskan dengan spesifik tentang siapa yang suka bunga dan aktivitas yang mereka lakukan terkait bunga.

範例: Yes, my mother loves flowers a lot. She has many flowers in our house because she often receives them from her friends and neighbors. Moreover, she enjoys gardening as a hobby.

建議: Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan tata bahasa yang benar. Jelaskan dengan jelas lokasi dan jumlah bunga, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide.

範例: Currently, there are no flowers in my office or small apartment. However, at my parents' house, there are many flowers because my mother takes good care of them and loves gardening.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk menjelaskan alasan dan situasi secara jelas dan singkat.

範例: I don't usually take photos of flowers, but sometimes when I walk in the morning, I notice beautiful flowers and take pictures to keep the memories on my phone.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat kalimat lebih jelas dan langsung. Jelaskan pendapat pribadi dan kebiasaan umum dengan kalimat yang terstruktur dan menggunakan kata penghubung.

範例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others. However, personally, I have never given or received flowers from my friends or family.

× I love flowers more much.

✓ I love flowers very much.

The phrase 'more much' is incorrect because 'much' is used with uncountable nouns and 'more' is a comparative. The correct expression is 'very much' to express a strong liking.

× Actually, I don't really like flowers when I was young because I I think that it would be so weird if I in my age at that time, which still really young kids in elementary school like plants.

✓ Actually, I didn't really like flowers when I was young because I thought it would be so weird if I, at my age at that time, which was still really young, liked plants.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't really like' with past time 'when I was young'. The verb should be in past tense 'didn't really like' to match the time frame. Also, 'I think' should be 'I thought' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I think that plants flowers are going to.

✓ I think that plants and flowers are interesting.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It lacks a proper predicate. Adding a clear predicate like 'are interesting' completes the sentence meaningfully.

× My mom really love flowers, she even has so many flowers in our house.

✓ My mom really loves flowers; she even has so many flowers in our house.

The subject 'My mom' is singular, so the verb should be 'loves' not 'love' to agree in number.

× She asked for her friends to give her a flower or our neighbor and she has.

✓ She asked her friends or our neighbors to give her flowers, and she has them.

The phrase 'asked for her friends to give' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'asked her friends to give'. Also, 'neighbor' should be plural 'neighbors' to match the context.

× She loves to gardening too.

✓ She loves gardening too.

After 'loves', the verb should be in gerund form without 'to'. 'Loves gardening' is correct, not 'loves to gardening'.

× For now, in my office there are no flowers in there and in my small apartment there is no flowers too.

✓ For now, there are no flowers in my office and no flowers in my small apartment either.

'There are no flowers' is correct for plural 'flowers'. Also, 'in there' is redundant after 'in my office'. 'No flowers either' is better than 'no flowers too'.

× But when I go home there are so many, so much so many flowers in there because my mom are taking care of them and lost to gardening too.

✓ But when I go home, there are so many flowers because my mom is taking care of them and loves gardening too.

'My mom' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. Also, 'lost to gardening' is incorrect; it should be 'loves gardening'. The phrase 'so much so many flowers' is redundant; 'so many flowers' suffices.

× I don't really like taking photos of the flowers, but sometimes when I'm walking or checking in the morning I got distracted by any flowers in the way and I just took a photo of them uh, just to make a memories of them in my phone.

✓ I don't really like taking photos of flowers, but sometimes when I'm walking or checking in the morning, I get distracted by flowers on the way and I just take a photo of them, just to make memories of them on my phone.

The sentence mixes past tense 'got distracted' and 'took' with present tense context. It should be present tense 'get distracted' and 'take' to match 'sometimes' and habitual action. Also, 'a memories' is incorrect; 'memories' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'In my phone' should be 'on my phone'.

× Maybe the answer is yes, but for me I don't. I never give my friends or my family a flower and I don't I I never accept any flower from my friends or family too.

✓ Maybe the answer is yes, but for me, I don't. I never give my friends or my family flowers and I never accept any flowers from them either.

The phrase 'I don't' is incomplete and unclear. Also, 'a flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match general meaning. 'Too' at the end is better replaced with 'either' for negative sentences.