花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences clear and concise, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: Yes, I love flowers, especially Jasmine because of its beautiful smell. I have planted Jasmine near my room at home, so I feel fresh every day when I am near it.

建議: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and some unclear parts. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Also, pay attention to verb tenses and sentence clarity.

範例: Yes, my baby sister loves flowers, especially red roses. Whenever I go to the flower shop, I always buy red roses for her because they make her very happy.

建議: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains unclear phrases. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use correct vocabulary. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as' to list flowers. Keep sentences simple and clear.

範例: Yes, I have many flowers at my home. For example, in my garden, there are Jasmine, roses, and other varieties of flowers.

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm but has grammatical errors and some repetition. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words like 'because' to explain reasons.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of flowers because it makes me happy. I like capturing them from different angles, especially when I see various types of flowers.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words like 'to' and 'because' to explain reasons. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

範例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others to express their love and happiness. For example, when someone returns from another country, their loved ones usually welcome them with flowers.

× I really like the smell and it's quite beautiful and pretty flower ever so in my home the Jasmine I planted in my near my room, so every day I feel fresh near the.

✓ I really like the smell and it's quite a beautiful and pretty flower. At my home, I planted Jasmine near my room, so every day I feel fresh near it.

The original sentence incorrectly combines adjectives and lacks articles before singular nouns. 'Beautiful and pretty flower ever' is ungrammatical; it needs an article 'a' before 'beautiful'. Also, the sentence structure is confusing and missing prepositions. Adding 'a' before 'beautiful and pretty flower' and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I planted in my near my room, so every day I feel fresh near the.

✓ I planted it near my room, so every day I feel fresh near it.

The pronoun 'the' is incorrectly used here. It should be 'it' to refer back to the Jasmine flower. Using the correct pronoun helps maintain coherence and clarity in the sentence.

× Of course my baby sister she really likes flowers especially the red rose which make her very happy when I'm whenever I'm going to gardening sorry flower shop, I will always bought some red rose for her, she make happy.

✓ Of course, my baby sister really likes flowers, especially red roses, which make her very happy. Whenever I go to the flower shop, I always buy some red roses for her; she feels happy.

The original sentence has run-on structure, incorrect verb forms, and awkward phrasing. 'She make happy' should be 'she feels happy'. 'I will always bought' is incorrect; it should be 'I always buy'. Also, 'whenever I'm going to gardening sorry flower shop' is confusing and needs correction to 'whenever I go to the flower shop'. Proper sentence segmentation and verb forms improve clarity and grammar.

× especially the red rose which make her very happy

✓ especially red roses which make her very happy

'Red rose' should be plural 'red roses' because it refers to flowers in general, and the verb 'make' agrees with the plural subject. Using plural form here is appropriate to express general liking.

× I will always bought some red rose for her

✓ I always buy some red roses for her

'Bought' is past tense and incorrect here; 'buy' is present tense to match habitual action. Also, 'red rose' should be plural 'red roses' to indicate multiple flowers. Correct verb tense and plural noun usage are necessary.

× she make happy

✓ she makes me happy

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'she'. Also, 'happy' needs an object; 'makes me happy' is correct. Subject-verb agreement and sentence completeness are important.

× Yes, in my home I have many flowers in there surrounded by home varieties of flowers are there.

✓ Yes, at my home I have many flowers. It is surrounded by various kinds of flowers.

The original sentence is awkward and has plural/singular confusion. 'Varieties of flowers are there' is ungrammatical. Rephrasing to 'It is surrounded by various kinds of flowers' clarifies meaning and corrects plural usage.

× So I have a lot of flowers in my garden, especially Jasmine, rose and roughly share and everything in my cartoon here.

✓ So I have a lot of flowers in my garden, especially Jasmine, roses, and roughly shrubs and everything in my garden here.

The sentence contains unclear words like 'roughly share' and 'cartoon' which seem to be errors. Likely intended 'roughly shrubs' and 'garden'. Also, 'rose' should be plural 'roses'. Correcting vocabulary and plural forms improves clarity.

× I have many flowers in there surrounded by home varieties of flowers are there.

✓ I have many flowers there, surrounded by various varieties of flowers.

The phrase 'home varieties' is incorrect; 'various varieties' is appropriate. Also, sentence structure is improved by separating ideas and using correct quantifiers.

× I planted in my near my room

✓ I planted it near my room

The phrase 'in my near my room' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'near my room'. Removing 'in my' fixes the prepositional error.

× I really enjoyed capturing the photos of flowers.

✓ I really enjoy capturing photos of flowers.

The question is in present tense, so the answer should be in present tense as well. 'Enjoyed' is past tense; 'enjoy' is present tense to match the context.

× It's make me very happy and I like to capturing such photos in different angles, especially varieties of flower.

✓ It makes me very happy and I like capturing such photos from different angles, especially various kinds of flowers.

'It's make' should be 'It makes' for subject-verb agreement. 'Like to capturing' is incorrect; it should be 'like capturing'. Also, 'varieties of flower' should be 'various kinds of flowers'. Correct verb forms and plural nouns improve grammar.

× especially varieties of flower

✓ especially varieties of flowers

The noun 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' when used with 'varieties of' to indicate multiple types.

× When I see different varieties of flowers, it's make me very happy.

✓ When I see different varieties of flowers, it makes me very happy.

'It's make' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it makes' for subject-verb agreement.

× Yes of course, in my country usually they often send flowers to others for their happy and make to express their love.

✓ Yes, of course, in my country people usually send flowers to others to make them happy and to express their love.

The original sentence misuses 'for their happy' and 'make to express'. Correct modal and infinitive forms are needed: 'to make them happy' and 'to express their love'.

× Also someone will come come back from other country their beloved ones who will come in with the flowers and at all.

✓ Also, when someone comes back from another country, their beloved ones will welcome them with flowers and so on.

The original sentence is confusing and contains repetition and incorrect word order. Rephrasing clarifies meaning and corrects sentence structure.