花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and redundant phrases such as 'also, there are also'. Use more precise vocabulary and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details. For example, mention why you like certain flowers and what feelings they evoke, using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I love flowers because they have a beautiful fragrance that uplifts my mood. Among them, I especially like red roses since they symbolize romance and freshness. Additionally, flowers like jasmine and lilies add variety and charm to any garden.

建議: Focus on clarity and correct grammar, such as using singular/plural forms properly and avoiding unclear phrases like 'because of its pregnancy'. Also, provide more specific reasons why your friend loves flowers and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Yes, my friend Axa loves flowers and has decorated her backyard with daffodils and roses. She enjoys them because their beauty and fragrance lift her mood, especially when she takes walks in her garden after work.

建議: Improve sentence structure and grammar, such as using 'many' instead of 'much' for countable nouns. Avoid repetition and clarify your points with linking words. Provide more specific examples and reasons about the seasonal nature of flowers in your area.

範例: No, there aren't many flowers where I live, but there are plenty of green plants like grass, money plants, and aloe vera. I think flowers are seasonal and usually grow in specific climates, which is why they are less common in the hot area where I live.

建議: Work on grammar and sentence flow by avoiding awkward phrasing and ensuring subject-verb agreement. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more concise. Also, clarify how taking photos of flowers relates to your enjoyment of their fragrance.

範例: Yes, I love taking photos of flowers because their fragrance lifts my mood. Whenever I capture a beautiful flower, I set the photo as my phone wallpaper to remind me of that pleasant scent throughout the day.

建議: Improve clarity and vocabulary by correcting phrases like 'evil fitter' (likely 'Eid al-Fitr') and using appropriate linking words. Provide more specific examples of occasions when flowers are sent, and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers on special occasions such as weddings, proposals, funerals, Eid al-Fitr celebrations, and graduations. Flowers are an important part of expressing emotions during these events.

× Well, I do love flowers because they have really attractive and beautiful smell.

✓ Well, I do love flowers because they have a really attractive and beautiful smell.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'really attractive and beautiful smell' because 'smell' is a singular countable noun here. Adding 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Also, uh, there are also a variety of flowers in this world including Jasmine, rose, Lily, daffodils, sunflowers.

✓ Also, uh, there is also a variety of flowers in this world including jasmine, rose, lily, daffodils, sunflowers.

The phrase 'a variety' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are' to agree in number. Also, flower names should be in lowercase unless they are proper nouns.

× including Jasmine, rose, Lily, daffodils, sunflowers.

✓ including jasmine, rose, lily, daffodils, sunflowers.

Flower names should be in lowercase unless they are proper nouns. Also, consistency in capitalization is important.

× So all the flowers I really, uh, like the most and one of my most flavor flowers is red rose because it's a symbol of romanticism and make me feel fresh.

✓ So all the flowers I really, uh, like the most and one of my most favourite flowers is the red rose because it's a symbol of romanticism and makes me feel fresh.

The word 'flavor' is incorrect here; it should be 'favourite' to express preference. Also, 'red rose' should have the definite article 'the' before it. The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'red rose'.

× because it's a symbol of romanticism and make me feel fresh.

✓ because it's a symbol of romanticism and makes me feel fresh.

The verb 'make' should be in third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× Yes, one of my friend name AXA really love flowers and she has also decorated all her backyard with beautiful and attractive flowers including daffodils and roses.

✓ Yes, one of my friends named AXA really loves flowers and she has also decorated all her backyard with beautiful and attractive flowers including daffodils and roses.

The phrase 'one of my friend' should be 'one of my friends' because 'friends' is plural after 'one of'. The verb 'love' should be 'loves' to agree with the singular subject 'AXA'. Also, 'name' should be 'named' to correctly describe AXA.

× she has also decorated all her backyard with beautiful and attractive flowers including daffodils and roses.

✓ she has also decorated her entire backyard with beautiful and attractive flowers including daffodils and roses.

The phrase 'all her backyard' is better expressed as 'her entire backyard' for clarity and correctness.

× Additionally, she also love flowers because of its pregnancy that lifts her mood every day whenever she goes for a walk after If Algebra.

✓ Additionally, she also loves flowers because of their fragrance that lifts her mood every day whenever she goes for a walk after Algebra class.

The verb 'love' should be 'loves' to agree with singular subject 'she'. The word 'pregnancy' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'fragrance'. The pronoun 'its' should be 'their' to agree with plural 'flowers'. The phrase 'after If Algebra' is unclear and corrected to 'after Algebra class' for clarity.

× No there are not that much flowers where I live but yes there are plants and also the greenery like grass and other kinds of plants like money plants.

✓ No, there are not that many flowers where I live but yes, there are plants and also greenery like grass and other kinds of plants like money plants.

The quantifier 'much' is used with uncountable nouns; 'many' should be used with countable nouns like 'flowers'. Also, 'the greenery' should be 'greenery' without 'the' as it is uncountable.

× Aloe Veras are present here but not flowers because I I feel like flowers are seasonal so they just grow in seasons and in specific areas where they have to grow, not all in hotter areas where I live.

✓ Aloe vera plants are present here but not flowers because I feel like flowers are seasonal so they just grow in seasons and in specific areas where they have to grow, not in all hotter areas where I live.

The correct term is 'Aloe vera' (singular) or 'Aloe vera plants' (plural). Also, 'not all in hotter areas' should be 'not in all hotter areas' for correct preposition use.

× Yes, I am big lover of taking photos when especially when it comes to flower because I feel like I really like their fragrances and it's really lifts up my mood.

✓ Yes, I am a big lover of taking photos, especially when it comes to flowers because I feel like I really like their fragrances and it really lifts up my mood.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'big lover'. The phrase 'when especially when' is redundant; 'especially when' suffices. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match 'their fragrances'. The phrase 'it's really lifts up' should be 'it really lifts up' to correct subject-verb agreement.

× Also, I set my wallpaper whenever I see a really good and fresh flower, I just captured that in my phone and sets my wallpaper to feel that fragrance whenever I open my phone.

✓ Also, I set my wallpaper whenever I see a really good and fresh flower; I just capture that on my phone and set my wallpaper to feel that fragrance whenever I open my phone.

The verb tenses should be consistent in present tense: 'captured' to 'capture' and 'sets' to 'set'. Also, 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone'. The sentence is better separated with a semicolon for clarity.

× Yes, people in my country definitely sell flowers but it depends upon the occasions if someone is going to marry or someone is going to propose a girl especially.

✓ Yes, people in my country definitely sell flowers but it depends on the occasion if someone is going to marry or someone is going to propose to a girl especially.

The phrase 'depends upon the occasions' should be 'depends on the occasion' for correct preposition and singular form. Also, 'propose a girl' should be 'propose to a girl' to use the correct verb-preposition combination.

× Also there are flowers in some funerals and other events like evil fitter and when someone graduates from the university or college definitely.

✓ Also, there are flowers at some funerals and other events like Eid al-Fitr and when someone graduates from university or college, definitely.

The preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to events. 'evil fitter' is a misspelling of 'Eid al-Fitr'. The article 'the' before 'university' is unnecessary in this context.