花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn nên tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như số nhiều của 'flower'. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

範例: Yes, I love flowers because their fragrance and vibrant colors brighten up my home. For example, I often place fresh flowers in my living room and bathroom to create a pleasant atmosphere.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'most of friends' nên là 'most of my friends'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Actually, most of my friends are not very interested in flowers, so I don't really know anyone who loves them as much as I do.

建議: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi số nhiều. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể.

範例: I live in an urban area where green spaces are limited, so there are not many flowers around. I think this is unfortunate because flowers can make the environment more beautiful.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý thì động từ, ví dụ 'Anytime I saw' nên là 'Whenever I see'. Câu trả lời nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Whenever I see beautiful flowers, I often take photos of them and share these pictures on my social media so that my friends can enjoy them too.

建議: Câu trả lời khá tốt nhưng bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn, ví dụ 'their love' nên là 'their loved ones'. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cụ thể hơn về các dịp đặc biệt.

範例: I believe sending flowers is a popular way to express love in my country. Many people send flowers to their loved ones, family, and friends on special occasions such as birthdays, weddings, and holidays.

× I like fragrance and the vibrance of flower, so I often find flowers to put them in my house or my bathroom.

✓ I like the fragrance and the vibrance of flowers, so I often find flowers to put in my house or my bathroom.

The word 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to flowers in general. Also, 'the fragrance' needs the definite article 'the' to specify the particular scent. The phrase 'put them' is redundant because 'find flowers to put them' is awkward; 'put' alone is sufficient.

× Unfortunately, most of friends around me are not particularly excited with flowers, so I don't know anyone who loves flowers around me.

✓ Unfortunately, most of my friends around me are not particularly excited about flowers, so I don't know anyone who loves flowers around me.

The phrase 'most of friends' is missing the possessive pronoun 'my' to specify whose friends. Also, the preposition 'excited with' is incorrect; it should be 'excited about' when expressing enthusiasm for something.

× I live in an urban areas where it limits or green space show they are not flowers on in my region so I think it is a shame issue.

✓ I live in an urban area where green spaces are limited, so there are no flowers in my region; I think it is a shame.

The phrase 'an urban areas' mixes singular and plural; it should be 'an urban area'. 'Green space' should be plural 'green spaces' to match the context. The sentence structure is confusing and needs to be simplified for clarity.

× Anytime I saw flowers, I often take photos and send photos on my social media for friends to enjoy them with me.

✓ Anytime I see flowers, I often take photos and send them on my social media for friends to enjoy with me.

The phrase 'Anytime I saw flowers' mixes past tense 'saw' with present tense 'take' and 'send'. It should be consistent in present tense 'see' to match the habitual action. Also, 'send photos on my social media' should be 'send them on my social media' for conciseness.

× I think sending flowers to others is the best way to show our love to our others. So many people in my country prefer sending them to their love, their family, their friends in special occasions.

✓ I think sending flowers to others is the best way to show our love to them. Many people in my country prefer sending them to their loved ones, their family, and their friends on special occasions.

The phrase 'our love to our others' is awkward; 'our love to them' is clearer. 'Their love' should be 'their loved ones' to refer to people. Also, 'in special occasions' should be 'on special occasions' as the correct preposition for occasions.