花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, be specific about what you like about flowers.

範例: Yes, I love flowers because there are many varieties with different colours and fragrances. Moreover, each colour can express different feelings when I give flowers to someone.

建議: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, provide specific details about the person and their interest in flowers.

範例: Yes, I know many people who love flowers. For example, my neighbour Raj, a retired army officer, enjoys gardening and grows various colourful flowers in his garden, which he takes care of regularly.

建議: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary. Avoid incorrect or unclear words like 'writers' and 'Lily Rowe'. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about the types of flowers.

範例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. For instance, there is a beautiful park in front of my house with various flowers, including roses in red, blue, and other colours. Additionally, there are lilies and other types of flowers.

建議: Work on grammar and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Be specific about your experiences with flower photography.

範例: Honestly, I don't take photos of flowers every day, but whenever I get a chance, I do. For example, last month I visited the Rose Garden in Chandigarh and took several photos, which I later shared on social media.

建議: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Provide specific examples of occasions when flowers are given.

範例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers on special occasions. For instance, on Valentine's Day, friends exchange flowers to express their feelings. Similarly, during weddings, bouquets are given to show appreciation and love.

× Of course I love flowers because they are large variety of flowers in the world and they are of different colors and have different fragrance in it.

✓ Of course I love flowers because there is a large variety of flowers in the world and they are of different colors and have different fragrances.

The phrase 'large variety of flowers' requires a singular verb 'is' instead of 'are' because 'variety' is singular. Also, 'fragrance' should be plural 'fragrances' to match 'different'. The phrase 'have different fragrance in it' is incorrect; it should be 'have different fragrances'.

× Also every color of flower represent the filling to others if I give it to them.

✓ Also, every color of flower represents the feeling to others if I give it to them.

The verb 'represent' should be 'represents' to agree with the singular subject 'every color'. Also, 'filling' is incorrect; the correct word is 'feeling'.

× In my surrounding there are many pupils who like lovers.

✓ In my surroundings, there are many pupils who like flowers.

The word 'surrounding' should be plural 'surroundings' to refer to the area around. Also, 'lovers' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'flowers'.

× My neighbor, his name is Raj, his retired army officer.

✓ My neighbor, his name is Raj, is a retired army officer.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' before 'a retired army officer'. The correct structure is 'He is a retired army officer'.

× He like to grow plants in their home, so he cultivate too many flowers in their garden of different colours and regularly take care of them.

✓ He likes to grow plants in his home, so he cultivates many flowers in his garden of different colours and regularly takes care of them.

The verbs 'like', 'cultivate', and 'take' should be in third person singular form 'likes', 'cultivates', and 'takes' to agree with the subject 'He'. Also, 'their' should be 'his' to match the singular subject.

× Of course there are lot of flowers where I live because in front of my house there is a beautiful park and there's lot of flowers are grown there.

✓ Of course there are lots of flowers where I live because in front of my house there is a beautiful park and lots of flowers are grown there.

The phrase 'lot of flowers' should be 'lots of flowers' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'there's lot of flowers are grown' is incorrect; it should be 'lots of flowers are grown'.

× There are different type of roses like red, blue, black and too many colours are there.

✓ There are different types of roses like red, blue, black and many other colours.

The phrase 'different type' should be plural 'different types' to agree with 'roses'. Also, 'too many colours are there' is awkward; 'many other colours' is better.

× Apart from this there are different writers like Lily Rowe and others.

✓ Apart from this, there are different flowers like Lily, Rose and others.

The word 'writers' is incorrect in the context of flowers; it should be 'flowers'. Also, 'Lily Rowe' seems to be a misspelling of 'Lily' and 'Rose'.

× Honestly speaking, I don't take photos of flowers in my daily life but when I got a chance I got I click a photo of lover with me.

✓ Honestly speaking, I don't take photos of flowers in my daily life but when I get a chance, I click a photo of flowers with me.

The phrase 'got a chance I got I click' is incorrect. It should be 'get a chance, I click' in present tense to match 'don't take'. Also, 'lover' should be 'flower'.

× I remember last month I got I visited a Rose Garden in Chandigarh where I clicked the photos and uploaded on social media.

✓ I remember last month I visited a Rose Garden in Chandigarh where I clicked photos and uploaded them on social media.

The phrase 'I got I visited' is incorrect; it should be 'I visited'. Also, 'clicked the photos' is better as 'clicked photos'. 'Uploaded on social media' should be 'uploaded them on social media' for clarity.

× In my country it it is time to share the flowers with others.

✓ In my country, it is the time to share flowers with others.

The phrase 'it it is time' has a repetition error. Also, 'the flowers' should be 'flowers' unless referring to specific flowers.

× Like in the occasion of Valentine day, friends share the flowers to other to show their feelings.

✓ Like on the occasion of Valentine's Day, friends share flowers with others to show their feelings.

The correct preposition is 'on the occasion'. 'Valentine day' should be 'Valentine's Day'. 'Share the flowers to other' should be 'share flowers with others'.

× Also in the occasion of marriages, people give the bouquet of flowers to others to show their appreciation and love.

✓ Also, on the occasion of marriages, people give bouquets of flowers to others to show their appreciation and love.

The correct preposition is 'on the occasion'. 'The bouquet of flowers' should be plural 'bouquets of flowers' to match 'people'. 'Give the bouquet' is less natural than 'give bouquets'.