花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and minor errors. For example, avoid repeating 'love' multiple times and correct 'VI vibrant' to 'vibrant'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I absolutely love flowers because they bring a sense of calmness. Moreover, their vibrant colors and the sweet smell of jasmine always brighten my day.

建議: Your answer lacks proper sentence structure and punctuation, making it hard to follow. Try to break your answer into clear sentences and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid repeating the same ideas and be more specific.

範例: Yes, my mom loves flowers and she always plants them in our garden. She believes that flowers, with their vibrant colors and pleasant scents, bring calmness and refresh our mood.

建議: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Also, try to avoid minor grammatical errors like 'multiple kind' which should be 'multiple kinds'.

範例: Yes, there are many flowers around my house because my mom enjoys planting them. Consequently, we have various kinds of flowers with different colors and fragrances.

建議: Your answer is good but can be more concise and coherent by using linking words and avoiding repetition. For example, instead of repeating 'pictures', use synonyms or restructure sentences.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because they make me feel relaxed. I enjoy capturing their beauty and sharing the pictures with my mom.

建議: Your answer has some unclear parts and repetition. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and clarify your points. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and correct the confusing phrase 'common in the youngsters but not in younger people'.

範例: No, traditionally people in my country did not send flowers to each other. However, as our society modernizes, gifting flowers has become popular, especially among young people.

× Yes, my mom loves flowers she always plans flowers in our garden there are multiple flowers that are vibrant in colors and smell good she feels like Flowers are a sense of calmness, they make our mood fresh and.

✓ Yes, my mom loves flowers. She always plants flowers in our garden. There are multiple flowers that are vibrant in color and smell good. She feels like flowers bring a sense of calmness and make our mood fresh.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions, which makes it confusing. Breaking it into shorter sentences and correcting 'plans' to 'plants' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× there are multiple kind of flowers with different colors and fragrances.

✓ there are multiple kinds of flowers with different colors and fragrances.

The phrase 'multiple kind' is incorrect because 'multiple' refers to more than one, so the plural 'kinds' should be used. Also, 'of' is needed after 'kinds' to correctly link to 'flowers'.

× I love capturing flowers in pictures because whenever I see them it makes me feel relaxed and I enjoy taking pictures and showing it to my mom.

✓ I love capturing flowers in pictures because whenever I see them, it makes me feel relaxed and I enjoy taking pictures and showing them to my mom.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'pictures' which is plural, so 'them' should be used to maintain pronoun agreement.

× But it's common in the youngsters but not in younger people.

✓ But it's common among youngsters but not among older people.

The phrase 'in the youngsters' is incorrect; 'among youngsters' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, 'younger people' is unclear and likely intended to mean 'older people' to contrast with 'youngsters'.