花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition and hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "I love flowers," "my husband usually gives me flowers").

範例: I love flowers, especially roses and carnations. For example, my husband often gives me a bouquet on special occasions or sometimes just to brighten an ordinary day, which makes me very happy.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence then add one specific detail about each person with linking words. Reduce repetition and fix pronoun errors ("he" vs "she").

範例: Yes. My mother loves gardening and has many flowers in her garden, while my husband likes fresh bouquets and often keeps flowers on our dining table.

建議: Answer directly about your current location first, then contrast with past experience using linking words like 'however' or 'whereas'. Avoid tense errors ("live" not "leave").

範例: Where I live now there are not many flowers; however, when I lived in the US for many years there were lots of flowers in gardens and homes, so I miss that variety.

建議: Be concise and correct verb forms ("I usually take photos"). Give one clear reason for taking photos and one specific example. Avoid filler words.

範例: Yes, I usually take photos of flowers and keep them on my phone because they remind me of happy moments with my husband and family, such as photos from a walk in the park last weekend.

建議: Give a clearer, grammatical response: state the general practice, then explain reasons with specific examples. Avoid vague phrases like 'develop flower systems' and correct word choice (e.g., 'delivery services').

範例: In my country, people do not often send flowers by delivery; instead, they usually give flowers in person, especially during religious ceremonies or family celebrations.

× And my husband usually give me flowers for, uh, a special date or just for everyday, uh, we like.

✓ And my husband usually gives me flowers for, uh, a special date or just for everyday, uh, we like.

The subject 'my husband' is third person singular, so the present simple verb should take an -s: 'give' -> 'gives'. Suggestion: add -s for third person singular verbs in present simple.

× They usually have flowers at home. I mean with my husband we usually have flowers at home and table and we really enjoyed uh, I have flowers at home and my mom as well he usually has in the garden.

✓ They usually have flowers at home. I mean, my husband and I usually have flowers at home and on the table, and we really enjoy them. I have flowers at home and my mom usually has them in the garden as well.

Errors: incorrect pronoun order and unclear reference ('with my husband we' -> 'my husband and I'); tense mismatch ('enjoyed' past vs present context) and wrong pronoun placement ('he' referring to mom). Also missing preposition 'on' for 'on the table'. Suggestions: Use correct subject order ('my husband and I'), keep tense consistent (present simple for habitual actions), use correct pronouns and prepositions.

× When I leave I think there are a lot of flowers. Umm, I mean I was living in the US for many years and we had many flowers. There's in gardens or just at home and here I haven't seen many, but umm, I'd like to see them.

✓ When I live here I think there are a lot of flowers. Umm, I mean I lived in the US for many years and we had many flowers. They're in gardens or just at home and here I haven't seen many, but umm, I'd like to see them.

Mistakes: 'leave' should be 'live' (wrong word) which is lexical not in list but treat as correction; 'There's in gardens' is ungrammatical—use 'They're in gardens' to refer to flowers. Also past continuous 'was living' changed to simple past 'lived' to match 'for many years' as a completed period. Suggestion: use correct verb 'live' and plural pronoun 'they're' for 'flowers in gardens'.

× Yes, in my daily life, I usually takes photos of flowers.

✓ Yes, in my daily life, I usually take photos of flowers.

Subject 'I' requires base verb form without -s in present simple: 'takes' -> 'take'. Suggestion: use plain verb for 'I' and 'you' in present simple.

× I have, uh, many, uh, photos in my gallery on my phone and I really enjoy, have a nice reminders of a good moments that I spent with my husband or just with my family.

✓ I have, uh, many, uh, photos in my gallery on my phone and I really enjoy having nice reminders of the good moments that I spent with my husband or just with my family.

Problems: incorrect verb form and structure ('enjoy, have' -> 'enjoy having'); article and number errors ('a nice reminders' should be 'nice reminders' or 'a nice reminder'); 'a good moments' should be 'the good moments' or 'good moments'. Suggestion: use gerund after 'enjoy' and correct articles and plural forms.

× And yes, I, I usually takes photos.

✓ And yes, I, I usually take photos.

Same as above: 'I' requires base verb form 'take', not 'takes'. Keep verb consistent with subject.

× I think they don't usually send, they just give flowers to others because we don't have a develop. Uh, flower systems or something like that, but they usually give flowers to each other or they use flower flowers for religious moments.

✓ I think they don't usually send them; they just give flowers to others because we don't have a developed flower delivery system or something like that, but they usually give flowers to each other or use flowers for religious occasions.

Issues: missing object 'them' after 'send'; incorrect adjective/noun form 'develop' should be 'developed' (past participle used as adjective); awkward phrase 'flower systems' better as 'flower delivery system'; duplicate word 'flower flowers' and wrong noun 'moments' -> 'occasions'. Suggestion: include necessary pronouns, use correct adjective forms, and choose appropriate collocations like 'flower delivery system' and 'religious occasions'.