花— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you love flowers, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g. because, so). Avoid vague phrasing and repetition.

範例: Yes, I like flowers, but I especially enjoy giving them to others because they make people feel appreciated. For example, I often give roses on special occasions, which helps strengthen my relationships.

建議: Answer directly and organize the story briefly. Use linking words (however, but, eventually) and be specific about why she changed her mind. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and avoid unclear pronouns.

範例: Not really—no one I know is a passionate flower lover. However, my ex-girlfriend didn't like flowers at first, but after I gave her thoughtful bouquets several times, she began to appreciate them because they showed I cared.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and add a specific detail about Sampaguita (appearance, scent, cultural significance). Use a linking word to connect the general statement and the detail.

範例: Yes, there are many flowers around my hometown, especially the Sampaguita. For instance, Sampaguita is a small white jasmine with a strong fragrance, and people use it for garlands at festivals.

建議: Be concise and avoid repeating words like "especially". Start with a direct answer, then give one clear example with linking words (for example, once). Correct grammar (e.g. "that look pretty" not "who are look pretty").

範例: Yes, I often photograph flowers, particularly those I find visually striking. For example, I once photographed a sunflower during a hike because its bright color contrasted beautifully with the mountain scenery.

建議: Give a clear, direct statement and a specific example of occasions when people send flowers. Use linking words (for instance, especially) and avoid redundant phrases like "a lot of many people."

範例: Yes, sending flowers is a common tradition in my country. For instance, people often give flowers for birthdays, funerals, and religious festivals, and many florists do good business around these events.

× Well, I'm specially more interested in giving flowers, so it doesn't matter what kind of flowers it is.

✓ Well, I'm especially more interested in giving flowers, so it doesn't matter what kind of flowers they are.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because 'flowers' is plural; use the plural pronoun 'they'. Also correct 'specially' to 'especially' because 'especially' is the appropriate adverb here. Suggestion: use 'they are' for plural nouns and 'especially' for emphasis.

× But I'm a person who just gives flowers to others.

✓ But I'm a person who just gives flowers to others.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. It uses correct pronouns and structure. (Included for completeness.)

× I don't know a person who likes flowers, but I know a person who I gave one who doesn't like flowers.

✓ I don't know anyone who likes flowers, but I know a person I gave one to who doesn't like flowers.

Use 'anyone' instead of 'a person' for general negative statements. The clause 'who I gave one' is missing the preposition 'to' and places 'who' incorrectly. Use 'I gave one to' and avoid repeating 'who' unnecessarily. Also 'a person I gave one to' is clearer.

× It is my ex-girlfriend and it is.

✓ She is my ex-girlfriend.

Use the pronoun 'she' to refer to a person rather than 'it'. Also avoid the redundant 'and it is'. Use a clear subject-verb structure: 'She is my ex-girlfriend.'

× It's a long story but she did eventually like what I gave her.

✓ It's a long story, but she eventually liked what I gave her.

The original mixes tense and adverb placement. Use simple past 'liked' to match 'gave' and place the adverb 'eventually' before the verb for natural English: 'she eventually liked'. Add a comma before 'but' connecting two clauses.

× There are plenty around my hometown, especially called Sampaguita here.

✓ There are plenty around my hometown, especially the Sampaguita.

'Plenty around my hometown' is okay but 'especially called Sampaguita here' is ungrammatical. Use the noun phrase 'the Sampaguita' to refer to that flower and place 'especially' before it. Alternatively: 'especially the Sampaguita.'

× Oh, that's a great one.

✓ Oh, that's a great one.

This sentence is fine as a short response; no grammatical correction needed. Included for completeness.

× I especially like taking pictures of these flowers, especially the ones who are look pretty in my eyes.

✓ I especially like taking pictures of flowers, especially the ones that look pretty to me.

'Who' should not be used for things; use 'that' or 'which'. Remove the unnecessary 'are' before 'look'. Use 'to me' rather than 'in my eyes' for natural phrasing. Also 'these flowers' can be simplified to 'flowers'.

× There's this one part that I have which is a sunflower, which I took from a mountaineering experience that I had before.

✓ I have one sunflower that I took during a mountaineering trip I took before.

Original is wordy and awkward. Use 'I have one sunflower' and 'that I took during a mountaineering trip' for clarity. 'Experience that I had before' is redundant; 'trip I took before' is more natural. Ensure relative clauses modify the correct noun.

× It's a common culture, not in just my country, but it is especially for a lot of many people, which is giving flowers.

✓ It's a common practice not only in my country but also among many people to give flowers.

'Common culture' is better as 'common practice'. 'Not in just my country' should be 'not only in my country'. 'A lot of many people' is redundant; use 'many people'. Reorder the sentence for clarity: 'to give flowers' at the end explains the practice.