写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，比如“I I”和“watch some ISIS”表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用正确的词汇表达。

範例: Yes, I write quite often. I usually keep a diary to record my daily experiences, which helps me remember important moments and improves my English skills.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“wearing inspired things”和“watch some articles”。建议使用更准确的词汇，并且句子结构要清晰。

範例: I like to write diaries because they help me express my feelings and remember special moments. Also, I enjoy reading English articles to improve my language skills.

建議: 回答中有多处语法错误和表达不清晰，如“watch something about my friends”和“most important incompetent”。建议使用正确的动词和词汇，表达更准确。

範例: Yes, my writing has changed. As a child, I wrote about my family and friends because they were very important to me. Now, I prefer to write about my own feelings and experiences.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，如“prefer to typing”和“watch something using the app”。建议使用正确的表达方式，并且句子更连贯。

範例: I prefer typing because it saves time. For example, I use apps like Memo to quickly write diaries and short notes, which is very convenient.

× Nowadays I I like to write something about my life and I like to write the diary and it can help me record some experience which makes me feel very impressed and happy.

✓ Nowadays I like to write something about my life and I like to write the diary and it can help me record some experiences which make me feel very impressed and happy.

experience是可数名词，表示具体的经历时应使用复数experiences。

× Nowadays I I like to write something about my life and I like to write the diary and it can help me record some experience which makes me feel very impressed and happy.

✓ Nowadays I like to write something about my life and I like to write the diary and it can help me record some experiences which make me feel very impressed and happy.

some后面应接复数名词experiences，表示一些经历。

× And plus I'd like to watch some ISIS to help me improve my ability of English.

✓ And plus I'd like to watch some videos to help me improve my ability in English.

这里的ISIS应为videos，且improve后应接介词in，表示提高英语能力。

× I like to write the Diaries because I think this is a good way to help me record the feeling when I experience wearing inspired things.

✓ I like to write diaries because I think this is a good way to help me record the feelings when I experience inspiring things.

diaries应为复数形式，feelings也应为复数，表示多种感受。

× I like to write the Diaries because I think this is a good way to help me record the feeling when I experience wearing inspired things.

✓ I like to write diaries because I think this is a good way to help me record the feelings when I experience inspiring things.

wearing inspired是不正确的搭配，应使用形容词inspiring来修饰things。

× Plus I'd like to watch some articles using English because it can help me in enhance my ability of English.

✓ Plus I'd like to read some articles in English because it can help me enhance my ability in English.

articles前应使用read而非watch，in English表示用英语，help后直接接动词原形enhance，ability后用介词in。

× When I was a kid, I used to watch something about my friends and my family because that time I thought they are they were the most important incompetent of my life.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to watch something about my friends and my family because at that time I thought they were the most important components of my life.

that time前应加介词at，incompetent用错，应为components，表示组成部分。

× When I was a kid, I used to watch something about my friends and my family because that time I thought they are they were the most important incompetent of my life.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to watch something about my friends and my family because at that time I thought they were the most important components of my life.

they are they were重复，应去掉they are。

× Nowadays I prefer to write something about myself, such as my feeling.

✓ Nowadays I prefer to write something about myself, such as my feelings.

feeling应为复数feelings，表示多种感受。

× I prefer to typing because I think it can shorten sometimes when I'm writing.

✓ I prefer typing because I think it can save time when I'm writing.

prefer后直接接动名词typing，不用to；shorten sometimes表达不当，应改为save time。

× For instance, I'd like to watch something using the app, such as the memo.

✓ For instance, I'd like to use an app to write something, such as memos.

watch something using the app表达不当，应改为use an app to write；memo应为复数memos。

× I can write something such as Diaries and some short sentence, which I think they are very good.

✓ I can write things such as diaries and some short sentences, which I think are very good.

diaries和sentences应为复数，something改为things更合适；which后主语they可省略。