天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more grammatically correct and clearer. Use simpler sentence structures and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a clear topic sentence about the general weather, then add specific details about summer and natural disasters using linking words like 'and' or 'because'.

範例: The weather where I live is hot and humid for most of the year. During summer, we often have heavy rains and typhoons, which sometimes cause natural disasters like flash floods and landslides.

建議: Improve your grammar and sentence structure by using singular forms and clearer linking words. Avoid repeating 'cold weathers' and connect your ideas logically. For example, use 'because' to explain reasons and combine related ideas into one sentence.

範例: I prefer cold weather because I can enjoy a hot cup of coffee or tea to warm up. Also, I love seeing snow and going skiing, which are interesting and memorable experiences.

建議: Focus on correct grammar and clearer expression. Use singular forms and correct prepositions. Link your ideas smoothly with words like 'because' and 'also'. Avoid unnecessary words and be specific about your feelings.

範例: I prefer wet weather because I enjoy the humidity, which keeps my skin moisturized. I also find the rain refreshing and relaxing, and the atmosphere feels calm and comfortable after it showers.

建議: Make your answer more coherent and grammatically correct. Use proper verb forms and avoid repetition. Clearly explain when and why you check the forecast, and use linking words like 'so' to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every evening before bedtime to see if it will rain. This helps me decide whether to bring an umbrella or prepare for strong sunshine.

建議: Improve clarity and grammar. Use correct verb tenses and avoid questions in your answer. Provide specific effects with linking words like 'for example' or 'such as'.

範例: Climate change has caused temperatures to rise by about 1 degree Celsius. This has led to more heat waves, especially in Europe, where many people have died from heat-related illnesses.

建議: Make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words like 'because' to explain reasons. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

範例: Of course, I love traveling, especially to cities with unique climates because their geographical locations offer different experiences from where I live.

× The weather's in my living place is hot and humid for most of the years and during summers we is we have a lot of rain such as typhoon and the Superstorm that could really have some natural disasters like the flash flooding or sliding and but most of the time.

✓ The weather in my living place is hot and humid for most of the year and during summers we have a lot of rain such as typhoons and superstorms that can really cause some natural disasters like flash flooding or landslides, but most of the time it is fine.

The phrase 'most of the years' should be 'most of the year' because 'year' is used in a general sense here, not plural. 'Typhoon' and 'Superstorm' should be pluralized to 'typhoons' and 'superstorms' to indicate multiple events. 'Flash flooding or sliding' should be 'flash flooding or landslides' for correct noun usage. Also, 'we is we have' is incorrect and corrected to 'we have'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× during summers we is we have a lot of rain such as typhoon and the Superstorm

✓ during summers we have a lot of rain such as typhoons and superstorms

The verb 'is' does not agree with the plural subject 'we'. It should be 'we have' to match the plural subject. Also, 'typhoon' and 'Superstorm' should be plural to match 'a lot of rain such as typhoons and superstorms'.

× I prefer the cold weathers so that I can have a hot cup of coffee and tea to close up.

✓ I prefer cold weather so that I can have a hot cup of coffee or tea to warm up.

'Weathers' is incorrect because 'weather' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Also, 'to close up' is not appropriate here; 'to warm up' fits the context better.

× I also enjoy the cold weathers where I can see the snow.

✓ I also enjoy cold weather where I can see the snow.

Again, 'weathers' is incorrect; 'weather' is uncountable and should be singular.

× Since that freezing cold and go skiing are also quite interesting and memorable experiences.

✓ The freezing cold and going skiing are also quite interesting and memorable experiences.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Since that' is unnecessary. 'Go skiing' should be changed to 'going skiing' to function as a noun phrase parallel to 'the freezing cold'.

× I prefer wet weather because the I enjoy the humidity and which can keep my skins moisturize and I also find the rainings very refreshing and relaxing.

✓ I prefer wet weather because I enjoy the humidity which can keep my skin moisturized, and I also find the rain very refreshing and relaxing.

'Skins' should be singular 'skin' as it refers to the skin on the body. 'Rainings' is incorrect; 'rain' is uncountable and should not be pluralized. 'Moisturize' should be 'moisturized' to be an adjective describing the skin.

× The atmospheres is also calm and comfortable after the shower so I really love that.

✓ The atmosphere is also calm and comfortable after the shower, so I really love that.

'Atmospheres' should be singular 'atmosphere' to match the singular verb 'is'. The sentence is corrected for subject-verb agreement.

× Of course I I will check the weather forecast every evening or every night before bedtime because I need to make sure if it rain or not.

✓ Of course, I check the weather forecast every evening or every night before bedtime because I need to make sure if it rains or not.

The modal 'will' is unnecessary here as the action is habitual; present simple 'check' is appropriate. Also, 'if it rain' should be 'if it rains' to agree with the third person singular subject 'it'.

× So does I need to bring along my umbrellas to avoid being wet as well as if that is too strong sunshine I also live.

✓ So I need to bring along my umbrella to avoid getting wet, and if there is strong sunshine, I also do.

'Does I need' is incorrect; it should be 'I need'. 'Umbrellas' should be singular 'umbrella' if referring to one, or plural if multiple. 'Being wet' is better expressed as 'getting wet'. The phrase 'if that is too strong sunshine I also live' is unclear and corrected to 'if there is strong sunshine, I also do' to imply taking precautions.

× And does climate change also lead to the heat waves?

✓ And does climate change also lead to heat waves?

'The heat waves' should be 'heat waves' as heat waves are general phenomena and do not require the definite article here.

× Especially in Europe, many people die of the history and his related disease.

✓ Especially in Europe, many people die of heatstroke and its related diseases.

'History' is incorrect; the intended word is 'heatstroke'. 'His related disease' should be 'its related diseases' to refer to heatstroke and its complications.

× So that's I will have the difference experience of the of that climates quite different from the place where I live.

✓ So I will have a different experience of climates quite different from the place where I live.

The sentence is awkward and contains unnecessary words. 'That's' is removed. 'Difference experience' should be 'different experience'. 'Of the of that climates' is corrected to 'of climates'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.