天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami serta efektif. Misalnya, gunakan bentuk tunggal untuk 'weather' dan jelaskan dengan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur.

範例: I live in Indonesia, which has a tropical climate. It is usually hot every day, and sometimes it rains during the rainy season.

建議: Gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas, hindari pengulangan dan kesalahan tata bahasa. Jelaskan alasan dengan kalimat yang terstruktur dan alami.

範例: I prefer cold weather because I don't like hot weather. It can burn my face and make me feel uncomfortable.

建議: Perbaiki pemahaman kosakata dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Jelaskan alasan dengan kalimat yang alami dan efektif.

範例: Honestly, I wasn't sure what dry or wet weather meant, but I think I prefer wet weather because it feels more comfortable, not too hot or dry.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan terstruktur. Jelaskan kebiasaan dengan kalimat yang jelas dan efektif.

範例: Yes, I always check the weather forecast before going out with my friends or family, especially when I want to go surfing. I want to make sure the weather is good for surfing.

建議: Perbaiki pemahaman topik dan gunakan kalimat yang jelas serta logis. Jelaskan efek perubahan iklim dengan kalimat yang terstruktur dan relevan.

範例: I think climate change is dangerous. It can cause many problems for our country and the Earth, making the situation worse over time.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan efektif. Jelaskan alasan dengan kalimat yang jelas dan terstruktur.

範例: Of course, I want to visit Japan and Korea to experience winter and other seasons. I'm bored with the warm weather in Indonesia, so I want to visit cities with different climates.

× I live in Indonesia which is a Tropic weathers so every day it's hot and it could be rainy season.

✓ I live in Indonesia which has a tropical climate, so every day it's hot and it could be the rainy season.

The phrase 'a Tropic weathers' is incorrect because 'tropic' should be an adjective describing 'weather' (singular), and 'weather' is uncountable, so 'weathers' is wrong. Also, 'rainy season' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific season.

× I prefer a cold weather because I'm not really like about the hot weather because it can burn my face like it's hotter being hotter, like I don't comfortable. I'm not comfortable. I mean, sorry. So that's why I love cold weather.

✓ I prefer cold weather because I don't really like hot weather since it can burn my face. When it's hotter, I don't feel comfortable. So that's why I love cold weather.

The phrase 'a cold weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. Also, 'I'm not really like about the hot weather' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't really like hot weather'. The sentence 'like it's hotter being hotter' is unclear and ungrammatical; it was corrected to 'When it's hotter'. 'I don't comfortable' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't feel comfortable'.

× Honestly, I didn't know about what those mean about try or wet weather, but I think I prefer wet weather because wet weather's like it's more comfortable for me, like not hotter and not drying at all.

✓ Honestly, I didn't know what dry or wet weather means, but I think I prefer wet weather because it's more comfortable for me, not hot and not dry at all.

The phrase 'didn't know about what those mean about try or wet weather' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'didn't know what dry or wet weather means'. Also, 'not hotter and not drying' is incorrect; it should be 'not hot and not dry'.

× Yeah, I always taking the weather forecast when I want to go there or when I want to go outside with my friends, with my family, especially when I want to go serving. I always check the weather costs and make sure the weather is good for surfing.

✓ Yeah, I always check the weather forecast when I want to go out or when I want to go outside with my friends or family, especially when I want to go surfing. I always check the weather forecast and make sure the weather is good for surfing.

The phrase 'I always taking' is incorrect; it should be 'I always check' because 'always' is used with the base verb in present simple tense. 'Go serving' is incorrect; it should be 'go surfing'. 'Weather costs' is incorrect; it should be 'weather forecast'.

× It's really, really good. They make the earth or our country because the climate change was a dangerous season. Like it could change anything and make it worse and worse.

✓ It's really dangerous. Climate change affects the earth and our country because it causes dangerous seasons. It can change many things and make them worse and worse.

The original sentences are unclear and ungrammatical. 'They make the earth or our country because the climate change was a dangerous season' is incorrect. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× Of course I'm I want to visit a Japan, Korea and I want to know about the winter, about other season. I just got bored about this chill weather in Indonesia, that's why I want to go to another city.

✓ Of course, I want to visit Japan and Korea, and I want to learn about winter and other seasons. I'm just bored with this chilly weather in Indonesia, that's why I want to go to another city.

The phrase 'I'm I want to visit a Japan' is incorrect; it should be 'I want to visit Japan'. 'A Japan' is wrong because country names do not take 'a'. 'About other season' should be 'about other seasons'. 'Got bored about' should be 'bored with'. 'Chill weather' should be 'chilly weather'.