天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and redundancy.

範例: The weather in Pakistan is very hot right now, even though it's September. Unlike other countries where fall has started, here it remains hot and humid, causing people to sweat a lot. However, the weather changes suddenly when winter arrives.

建議: Focus on organizing your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use more precise vocabulary to express your feelings and reasons.

範例: I prefer hot weather because it makes me feel happy and comfortable. For example, I enjoy wearing lighter clothes and eating ice cream. Also, the longer days suit my morning routine, making my day more manageable.

建議: Try to avoid repetition and filler words. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Use accurate vocabulary to describe your experiences.

範例: I prefer wet weather because dry weather makes my skin rough and uncomfortable. For instance, my hands and lips get very dry, so wet weather helps me avoid using many skin oils.

建議: Make your answer clearer and more coherent by organizing your ideas logically. Use linking words to connect sentences and avoid repetition and filler words. Be specific about when and why you check the forecast.

範例: I don't usually check the weather forecast regularly. However, if I have plans or events coming up, I make sure to check it beforehand. Still, sometimes the forecast changes, so I don't rely on it too much.

建議: Provide a clear and concise topic sentence, then support it with specific examples using linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use accurate vocabulary related to climate change.

範例: Climate change has caused more hot days and longer hot seasons worldwide. For example, global warming and pollution from industries have increased temperatures, especially in regions that used to be cooler.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Avoid filler words and be more specific about what you want to experience in different climates.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates to learn how people adapt their daily routines and activities. Additionally, I want to experience the weather myself and see how I would dress in those conditions.

× So I live in Pakistan, so weather here is really hot nowadays and as it's September now, but still the weather is really, really hot.

✓ So I live in Pakistan, and the weather here is really hot nowadays, and as it's September now, the weather is still really, really hot.

The original sentence has a missing article before 'weather' and awkward conjunction use. Adding 'the' before 'weather' is necessary because 'weather' is a specific noun here. Also, replacing the second 'so' with 'and' improves sentence flow and clarity.

× And uh, we just do sweat a lot.

✓ And uh, we just sweat a lot.

The auxiliary verb 'do' is unnecessary here and makes the sentence awkward. The correct form is simply 'we sweat a lot' to express habitual action in present tense.

× Although in many countries the weather is becoming more and more pleasant nowadays and fall has begun, but here still there is hot and uh, suddenly the weather changes and then the cold winter.

✓ Although in many countries the weather is becoming more and more pleasant nowadays and fall has begun, here it is still hot, and suddenly the weather changes to cold winter.

The phrase 'there is hot' is incorrect because 'hot' is an adjective and cannot be used as a noun after 'there is'. Instead, use 'here it is still hot'. Also, 'and then the cold winter' is incomplete; it should be 'changes to cold winter' to indicate transition.

× I really love hot weather because I, it really made me feel so happy, nice, cool, and also the lighter clothes, uh, cold drinks, air conditions, ice creams and all the stuff I really like in hot weather.

✓ I really love hot weather because it really makes me feel so happy, nice, cool, and I also like lighter clothes, cold drinks, air conditioning, ice creams, and all that stuff in hot weather.

The original sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'made' when present tense 'makes' is appropriate to express a general truth or habitual feeling. Also, 'air conditions' should be 'air conditioning'.

× So also the days are really long, the nights are short and I'm also a morning person so it's really make my day manageable.

✓ Also, the days are really long, the nights are short, and I'm also a morning person, so it really makes my day manageable.

The verb 'make' does not agree with the singular subject 'it'. The correct form is 'makes'. Also, adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× I prefer wet weather instead of loving dry weather because I really hate dry weather.

✓ I prefer wet weather instead of loving dry weather because I really hate dry weather.

No correction needed here as the sentence does not contain a grammar problem from the list.

× My skin become really love rough, my hands, my feet, even my lips become really bad conditions.

✓ My skin becomes really rough, my hands, my feet, even my lips become really bad.

The verb 'become' should be in the third person singular present tense 'becomes' to agree with singular subject 'skin'. Also, 'love rough' is incorrect; 'really rough' is appropriate. 'Become really bad conditions' is awkward; better to say 'become really bad'.

× So I don't have to use much resins oils on my skin to make me wet.

✓ So I don't have to use many resin oils on my skin to keep it moisturized.

'Much' is used with uncountable nouns; 'resin oils' are countable, so 'many' is correct. Also, 'resins oils' is incorrect; it should be 'resin oils'. 'To make me wet' is awkward; 'to keep it moisturized' is clearer.

× I know I don't have a habit of checking the weather forecast even though if I go outside or have to plan somewhere or if if there's any event coming.

✓ I know I don't have a habit of checking the weather forecast unless I go outside, have to plan somewhere, or if there's any event coming.

The phrase 'even though if' is incorrect; 'unless' or 'if' should be used alone. Also, removing the repeated 'if' improves clarity.

× So then I definitely do check the weather condition.

✓ So then I definitely check the weather conditions.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary here. Also, 'weather condition' should be plural 'weather conditions' to refer generally.

× But it the if I check the weather condition very before.

✓ But if I check the weather conditions very early,

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. Corrected to 'But if I check the weather conditions very early,' to express the intended meaning.

× So it definitely changes that when the time reaches.

✓ So it definitely changes by the time it arrives.

The phrase 'when the time reaches' is awkward and ungrammatical. 'By the time it arrives' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× So I don't check that often.

✓ So I don't check it often.

Replacing 'that' with 'it' is more appropriate when referring to 'weather conditions'.

× Now the climate is being changing drastically and more and more hotter days, more and more hot, hot seasons are here in the world instead of cold region cold seasons and also umm additionally there are also global warming pollution and also there are many industries that affects the weather and it becomes very really hot.

✓ Now the climate is changing drastically with more and more hotter days and hot seasons around the world instead of cold regions and cold seasons. Additionally, there is global warming pollution, and many industries affect the weather, making it really hot.

'Is being changing' is incorrect; 'is changing' is correct present continuous. 'More and more hotter' is redundant; 'hotter' or 'more and more hot' is better. 'Cold region cold seasons' should be 'cold regions and cold seasons'. 'There are also global warming pollution' is incorrect; 'there is global warming pollution' is correct. 'Industries that affects' should be 'industries that affect' to agree with plural subject.

× Yes, I do wanna visit different countries or especially different cities, as you said, uh, because I want to experience how that these people live and how their climate and weather condition affect their daily routines and their activities.

✓ Yes, I do want to visit different countries, especially different cities, as you said, because I want to experience how these people live and how their climate and weather conditions affect their daily routines and activities.

'Wanna' is informal and should be 'want to' in formal speech. 'How that these people live' is incorrect; 'how these people live' is correct. 'Weather condition' should be plural 'weather conditions' to match 'climate'.

× Additionally, I also want to experience, uh, that weather condition on myself and how I will dress according to that.

✓ Additionally, I also want to experience that weather condition myself and see how I will dress according to it.

'On myself' is incorrect; 'myself' alone is sufficient. Also, 'how I will dress according to that' is better as 'how I will dress according to it' for clarity.