天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to reduce hesitation sounds like 'uh' and improve sentence fluency. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, for example, 'In summer, it is dry and hot; however, in winter, it is dry and cold.' This will make your answer more natural and effective.

範例: I live in Tehran, the capital of Iran, where the weather changes with the seasons. In summer, it is dry and hot; however, in winter, it becomes dry and cold. During spring and autumn, the weather is generally mild and pleasant.

建議: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and unclear phrases such as 'I swear' and 'I'm on my skins.' Use clear and precise vocabulary. Also, organize your answer with a topic sentence followed by reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'also.'

範例: I definitely prefer cold weather because I dislike sweating in the heat. Also, I enjoy wearing jackets, hoodies, and sweaters during winter, which makes me feel comfortable.

建議: Clarify your answer by directly stating your preference and reasons. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas logically, for example, 'I don't prefer either dry or wet weather because...'.

範例: I don't prefer either dry or wet weather. Dry weather makes my skin uncomfortable because it is already dry, and wet weather causes me to sweat, making my skin feel sticky.

建議: Improve sentence structure and grammar, for example, use 'I didn't use to do that before.' Also, use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly to make your answer coherent and clear.

範例: I didn't use to check the weather forecast before, but now I do it often because I moved to northern Iran for studying. The weather here changes frequently, so I need to check it to decide what to wear.

建議: Avoid hesitation and improve grammar, for example, say 'The main problem caused by climate change is global warming, which affects all humans and animals.' Also, explain briefly about the policies to enrich your answer.

範例: The main problem caused by climate change is global warming, which affects both humans and animals. Therefore, many countries have implemented policies to reduce emissions and protect the environment.

建議: Make your answer clearer and more structured. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to explain your reasons logically.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit other cities with different climates. For example, I moved from my hometown, which was dry and hot, to northern Iran because the weather here is cold and foggy. I feel much better in this climate, so I want to explore more places like this.

× In the summers it is dry and hot and in the winters is dry and cold, but in uh uh springs and autumn uh, the weather is fine.

✓ In the summers it is dry and hot and in the winters it is dry and cold, but in springs and autumn, the weather is fine.

The sentence is missing the subject 'it' before 'is dry and cold' in the winters part. In English, the verb 'to be' requires a subject, so 'it is' should be used to maintain correct sentence structure.

× I swear and I hate uh, that sun is shining.

✓ I swear and I hate that the sun is shining.

The sentence lacks the definite article 'the' before 'sun'. Also, 'that sun' is incorrect; it should be 'that the sun' to specify the sun being referred to.

× I'm on my skins and I prefer cold weather because of, uh, the jackets, hoodies and sweaters that I can wear in the winters.

✓ I'm on my skin and I prefer cold weather because of the jackets, hoodies, and sweaters that I can wear in the winters.

The phrase 'I'm on my skins' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'I'm on my skin' meaning referring to oneself. Also, 'skins' is plural which is incorrect here.

× Actually, none of them, uh, in dry weather because I have a dry skin, dry weather and makes me uncomfortable.

✓ Actually, none of them. In dry weather, I have dry skin, and dry weather makes me uncomfortable.

The sentence structure is confusing and missing subjects. 'I have a dry skin' should be 'I have dry skin' because 'skin' is uncountable. Also, the sentence needs proper punctuation and conjunctions for clarity.

× Umm and uh, wet weather makes me sweat and uh, my uh, and like it's glue on my skin.

✓ Wet weather makes me sweat, and it feels like glue on my skin.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be restructured for clarity and fluency, removing filler words and completing the thought properly.

× I didn't do that before, but currently I use that applications for weather a lot because I moved to north of Iran for studying and the weather here is changing a lot and I have to check the weather so I can realize that what to wear.

✓ I didn't do that before, but currently I use those applications for weather a lot because I moved to the north of Iran for studying, and the weather here changes a lot, so I have to check the weather to know what to wear.

The sentence has tense inconsistencies and article errors. 'That applications' should be 'those applications' (plural demonstrative). 'North of Iran' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Weather here is changing' is better as 'weather here changes' for habitual action. 'Realize that what to wear' is incorrect; 'know what to wear' is appropriate.

× Uh, the main problem that a climate change has is about a global warming that it can affect on, uh, all humans and animals.

✓ The main problem that climate change has is global warming, which can affect all humans and animals.

The phrase 'affect on' is incorrect; 'affect' is a transitive verb and does not require 'on'. Also, 'a climate change' should be 'climate change' without an article. 'Is about a global warming' is better as 'is global warming'.

× So we had, we, we have had some policies to face with that problem.

✓ So we have had some policies to face that problem.

The sentence mixes past simple 'had' and present perfect 'have had' unnecessarily. Also, 'face with' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'face that problem' without 'with'.

× Actually, I used to when I was in my hometown, uh, there was a dry and hot weather.

✓ Actually, I used to when I was in my hometown; the weather was dry and hot.

'There was a dry and hot weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. The sentence is better rephrased as 'the weather was dry and hot'.

× Uh, so I, uh, bought, uh, as when I decided to move to north of Iran here because, uh, the weather is uh, uh, cold and foggy.

✓ So, when I decided to move to the north of Iran, because the weather here is cold and foggy, I felt much better.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Bought' is incorrect in this context. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity and correct use of articles and prepositions.

× I uh, feel much better, so I want.

✓ I feel much better, so I want to stay here.

The sentence is incomplete; 'so I want' needs an object or complement to complete the thought.