天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 文法の誤り（例えば、'Spring and autumn is'は'are'にすべき）を直し、'com comfortable'のような誤字を避けましょう。また、文を簡潔にし、冗長な表現を減らすことが大切です。

範例: The weather varies by season. Spring and autumn are warm and sunny, making it comfortable to spend time outside, but summer is extremely hot.

建議: 文法と語順の誤りを修正し、理由をより明確に述べましょう。例えば、'I don't get sweat'は'I don't sweat'にし、'my skin is weaker than general person'は'compared to most people'などに直すと自然です。

範例: I definitely prefer cold weather because I don't sweat much, and my skin is more sensitive compared to most people, so hot weather makes me itchy.

建議: 文が不完全で意味が伝わりにくいです。理由を具体的に述べ、文をつなげる接続詞を使いましょう。

範例: I prefer dry weather because it feels fresher and brighter, which makes me feel more comfortable.

建議: 文法と語彙の誤りを直し、理由を明確に述べましょう。'whether'は'weather'、'automatically'は不要です。

範例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every morning using a weather app because I want to plan my day accordingly.

建議: 文法の誤りを直し、'stronger and heavier'の表現をより自然な言い方に変えましょう。また、具体的な影響を一つ加えると良いです。

範例: The effects of climate change have become more severe in recent years, causing extreme weather events, so we all need to be more careful.

建議: 口語表現を控えめにし、文法を正しくしましょう。'somewhere has'は'somewhere that has'に直し、'wanna'は'want to'に変えると良いです。

範例: Yes, I would like to visit places with tropical climates, such as Bali or Hawaii, because they are very different from where I live.

× Spring and autumn is warm and sunny and it's com comfortable to spend the time, but summer time is crazy hot.

✓ Spring and autumn are warm and sunny and it's comfortable to spend time, but summer is crazy hot.

The subjects 'Spring and autumn' are plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'com comfortable' seems to be a typo and should be 'comfortable'. 'Spend the time' is better as 'spend time' for natural expression. 'Summer time' can be simplified to 'summer'.

× I definitely prefer cold weather because I don't get sweat and it made me itchy sometimes because my skin is weaker than. General person.

✓ I definitely prefer cold weather because I don't sweat and it makes me itchy sometimes because my skin is weaker than a general person.

'Don't get sweat' is incorrect; the correct form is 'don't sweat' (present tense). 'It made me itchy' should be 'it makes me itchy' to maintain present tense consistency. Also, 'weaker than. General person' is incomplete and should be 'weaker than a general person'.

× Dry weather would be better for me because. The feeling is bright.

✓ Dry weather would be better for me because the feeling is bright.

The sentence is broken incorrectly by a period after 'because'. It should be one sentence without a period separating the cause and effect parts.

× Yes, I'm checking whether automatically every morning with weather application. Because I want to make sure choosing.

✓ Yes, I check the weather automatically every morning with a weather application because I want to make sure of my choices.

'I'm checking' suggests a continuous action but here a habitual action is intended, so simple present 'I check' is appropriate. 'Whether' is a homophone error; it should be 'weather'. 'With weather application' needs an article: 'with a weather application'. 'Because I want to make sure choosing' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'because I want to make sure of my choices' or similar.

× Yes, the effects of climate change is getting stronger and heavier, so we all have to be more careful for it.

✓ Yes, the effects of climate change are getting stronger and heavier, so we all have to be more careful about it.

'Effects' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'careful for it' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'careful about it'.

× Yes, totally. I would like to visit somewhere has tropical weather, for example Bali or Hawaii, because it's totally different from where I live. So that's why I wanna visit there.

✓ Yes, totally. I would like to visit somewhere that has tropical weather, for example Bali or Hawaii, because it's totally different from where I live. So that's why I want to visit there.

'Somewhere has tropical weather' is missing a relative pronoun; it should be 'somewhere that has tropical weather'. 'Wanna' is informal; 'want to' is more appropriate in this context.