天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。比較の表現も曖昧で、具体的な情報が不足しています。より明確で簡潔な表現を心がけ、文法の正確さを向上させましょう。

範例: The weather in Mexico is generally dry and warm, while in Japan it is very humid and rainy. Even on sunny days in Japan, the air feels quite humid compared to Mexico.

建議: 理由を述べていて良いですが、表現が少し単調で繰り返しが見られます。より自然な表現を使い、理由と結果の関係を明確に示す接続詞を活用しましょう。

範例: I prefer hot weather because cold weather makes my fingers stiff, which affects my piano playing. Therefore, I find it difficult to perform well in cold conditions.

建議: 内容は理解できますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が目立ちます。具体的な例を挙げる際に、より正確な文法と自然な語彙を使うことが重要です。

範例: I prefer dry weather because in summer, dry air feels cooler when you go outside. In contrast, in Japan, the humid weather makes the air sticky and uncomfortable even in the shade.

建議: 回答は具体的ですが、冗長な表現や文法の誤りがあります。より簡潔で明確な表現を心がけ、接続詞を使って文をつなげましょう。

範例: I don't usually check the weather forecast or news. However, when I visit Japan with my grandmother, we often watch the morning news together and discuss our plans based on the weather.

建議: 内容は興味深いですが、文法の誤りや言い淀みがあり、表現が不自然です。より正確な文法と明確な表現を使い、具体的な説明を加えましょう。

範例: I think climate change has caused October to remain warm, whereas it used to get cooler during this month. This year, it still feels like summer throughout the day.

建議: 回答は具体的ですが、形容詞の繰り返しや不自然な表現があります。より多様な語彙を使い、自然な表現に改善しましょう。

範例: I would like to visit Switzerland because it is a sunny country surrounded by mountains. I believe the weather there would be cool and beautiful.

× Mexico is a release on your country.

✓ Mexico is a relief from your country.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition to express relief from something is 'from'. Therefore, 'a release on your country' should be corrected to 'a relief from your country'.

× And compare the weather in Japan was more humid and even on sunny days it was humid.

✓ Comparing the weather, Japan was more humid, and even on sunny days, it was humid.

The original sentence lacks proper structure and connectors. Starting with 'And compare' is incorrect. It should be rephrased to 'Comparing the weather' to make the sentence grammatically correct and clear.

× I prefer a lot more hot weather than the cold weather.

✓ I prefer hot weather much more than cold weather.

The phrase 'a lot more hot weather' is awkward. 'Much more hot weather' or simply 'hot weather much more' is more natural. Also, 'the cold weather' is unnecessary here; 'cold weather' suffices.

× which is because when I play the piano I cannot move my fingers properly because it becomes stiff when it is cold.

✓ which is because when I play the piano, my fingers become stiff and I cannot move them properly when it is cold.

The pronoun 'it' is ambiguous. Fingers are the subject that become stiff, so 'my fingers become stiff' is clearer. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× you go to somewhere really cool and it is actually cool.

✓ you go somewhere really cool and it is actually cool.

The phrase 'go to somewhere' is incorrect. 'Somewhere' already implies a place, so 'to' is unnecessary and should be removed.

× But in Japan when it was very humid, you went to anywhere and it was warm.

✓ But in Japan, when it was very humid, you went anywhere and it was warm.

The phrase 'went to anywhere' is incorrect. 'Anywhere' does not require the preposition 'to'. Removing 'to' makes the sentence correct.

× and discuss about topics about how we spend these days.

✓ and discuss topics about how we spend these days.

The verb 'discuss' does not require the preposition 'about'. Therefore, 'discuss about topics' is incorrect; it should be 'discuss topics'.

× I feel that the effects of climate change is that in October it is still warm and naturally uh used to start cooling up, but this year it doesn't and it feels like summer all day.

✓ I feel that the effects of climate change are that in October it is still warm and naturally used to start cooling down, but this year it doesn't and it feels like summer all day.

The subject 'effects' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'cooling up' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'cooling down'.