天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中语法和表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有重复和不必要的词汇。建议简化句子，直接描述天气特点，并用连词连接句子，使表达更流畅。

範例: The weather where I live is quite cold, especially in winter. We experience all four seasons, and I really enjoy the changes in weather throughout the year.

建議: 回答表达不清晰，语法错误较多，且缺少连贯性。建议直接表达偏好，并说明原因，使用连词连接观点和细节。

範例: I prefer cold weather because I don't like sweating. In summer, even walking outside makes me feel uncomfortable and sweaty.

建議: 回答中词汇使用错误（如'dry water'应为'dry weather'），句子结构混乱，表达不清楚。建议使用正确词汇，简洁表达偏好并说明原因。

範例: I prefer dry weather because wet weather makes me feel uncomfortable. For example, when it's wet, my bed feels damp and I get cold.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和重复词汇，表达不够简洁。建议直接回答习惯，并用连词连接时间和原因，使表达更自然。

範例: I don't check the weather forecast often in winter because it's usually cold. However, in summer, I check it regularly to prepare an umbrella for rainy days.

建議: 回答表达不清晰，语法错误较多，且缺少具体细节。建议明确说明气候变化的影响，并用连词连接观点和原因。

範例: In recent years, climate change has caused extreme weather in my city, such as very cold and hot days. These sudden changes can make people feel sick.

建議: 回答中地名表达不准确，句子结构混乱。建议直接表达愿望，举具体例子，并用连词连接句子，使表达更清晰。

範例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with colder climates, such as Harbin in northern China. I want to build a snowman and try ice sports there.

× So the place where I live now was cold, which in China we need to suffer from the four season which is winter, autumn, summer and spring, which I really liked the transform of those sweater which really enjoyable and I really like cold weather.

✓ So the place where I live now is cold, and in China we experience the four seasons: winter, autumn, summer, and spring. I really like the change of those seasons, which is really enjoyable, and I really like cold weather.

句中使用了“was cold”，但描述的是现在的情况，应使用一般现在时“is cold”。“suffer from the four season”表达不准确，应该用“experience the four seasons”表示经历四季。"transform of those sweater"表达不清，应改为“change of those seasons”。此外，句子结构混乱，需拆分成多个句子以增强表达清晰度。

× So I'm more prefer umm. Every every place that I want without sweating but in summer I need to like even though I was just only walking on the street I feel hard and also will cause a lot of sweat.

✓ So I prefer places where I don't sweat. But in summer, even when I am just walking on the street, I feel uncomfortable and sweat a lot.

“I'm more prefer”中“more”与“prefer”重复表达比较，应去掉“more”。“I need to like”表达不完整且不合适，应删除。句中“I was just only walking”时态错误，应使用现在进行时“I am just walking”。

× So I prefer dry water because when the weight wet weather was suffered, I will feel uncomfortable because everything I was like staying on the bed, the bed is will become salt watering which really make me become cold.

✓ So I prefer dry weather because when the weather is wet, I feel uncomfortable. When I stay in bed, the bed becomes damp, which really makes me feel cold.

“dry water”应为“dry weather”。“when the weight wet weather was suffered”表达错误，应为“when the weather is wet”。“everything I was like staying on the bed”语法混乱，应改为“when I stay in bed”。“salt watering”用词错误，应为“damp”。

× Sorry umm, nowadays I didn't. I'm checking the weather because umm, right now it's winter so it is kind of cold every day. But when it is in the summer, I usually will check the weather forecast to like trying to look for the rainy day which I need to prepare for this umbrella to to go outside.

✓ Sorry, nowadays I don't check the weather. Right now it's winter, so it is kind of cold every day. But in summer, I usually check the weather forecast to look for rainy days so I can prepare an umbrella before going outside.

“nowadays I didn't”时态错误，应为“nowadays I don't”。“usually will check”中“will”多余，应去掉。句子结构不清晰，需调整以符合英语表达习惯。

× So nowadays in my city where I live, I always will suffer and I'm extremely cold in also an extremely hard which I really don't like. That kind of climate change would really make people to become sick whenever it is a sudden change of weather.

✓ Nowadays in my city where I live, I always suffer from extreme cold and extreme heat, which I really don't like. That kind of climate change can really make people become sick whenever there is a sudden change in the weather.

“I always will suffer”中“will”用法不当，应直接用一般现在时“always suffer”。“make people to become”中“to”多余，应去掉。句子表达不清，需调整以符合英语习惯。

× Yes, I really want to visit to those city with which is really cold for for example the heartbeat, which it is the nor nor Norris in China, which I really want to like build a snowman in there and also playing some sports which related to ice.

✓ Yes, I really want to visit those cities which are really cold. For example, Harbin, which is in the northeast of China. I really want to build a snowman there and also play some sports related to ice.

“visit to those city”中“to”多余，应去掉。城市名“heartbeat”应为“Harbin”。“which it is the nor nor Norris”表达错误，应为“which is in the northeast”。“playing some sports which related to ice”时态和结构错误，应改为“play some sports related to ice”。