天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: The weather here is neither hot nor cold at the moment, but it's gradually getting colder each day. As a result, people in Nepal are starting to prepare warmer clothes.

建議: Try to organize your answer clearly and avoid hesitation. Use linking words to list activities and be specific about your preferences.

範例: I prefer hot weather because it allows me to enjoy various activities like swimming, camping, and other outdoor fun during summer.

建議: Your answer is clear but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words to explain reasons logically.

範例: I prefer dry weather because I dislike getting wet in the rain. Moreover, dry weather means I don't have to worry about my clothes getting soaked repeatedly.

建議: Try to give a direct answer first, then explain with clear and concise sentences. Avoid filler words and improve coherence with linking words.

範例: No, I don't usually check the weather forecast. Instead, I look at the sky before going out to decide what to wear and plan activities with my friends accordingly.

建議: Your answer has good content but needs clearer sentence structure and linking words to connect ideas logically.

範例: In recent years, global warming has been the main cause of climate change in this region. It has led to more extreme temperatures, with colder winters and hotter summers.

建議: Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences. Give a clear and complete answer with supporting details using linking words.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates because I enjoy exploring new environments. Being cautious, I also prepare well to adapt to the different weather conditions.

× The weather is like not hot neither cold right now but it's getting colder day by day as everyone in Nepal can feel the cold that is increasing.

✓ The weather is neither hot nor cold right now, but it's getting colder day by day as everyone in Nepal can feel the increasing cold.

The phrase 'like not hot neither cold' is incorrect. The correct correlative conjunction pair is 'neither...nor' to express two negatives. Also, the sentence needed commas for clarity and better flow.

× So everyone has started gathering their clothes for warm.

✓ So everyone has started gathering their clothes for warmth.

The preposition 'for' followed by 'warm' is incorrect because 'warm' is an adjective. The noun 'warmth' should be used here to indicate the purpose of the clothes.

× because you can do many stops and activities at summer or let's say hot weather, you can go for some more, you can go, sorry, you can go for swimming, different fun activities, camping, etcetera in summer whereas.

✓ because you can do many sports and activities in summer or hot weather; you can go swimming, enjoy different fun activities, camping, etc., in summer.

The word 'stops' is incorrect; it should be 'sports'. Also, 'at summer' should be 'in summer'. The phrase 'you can go for some more' is unclear and redundant, so it was removed for clarity.

× So I basically prefer dry weather over wet because I don't like being wet by the rain and have to be have to just close over again and again.

✓ So I basically prefer dry weather over wet because I don't like being wet from the rain and having to change clothes again and again.

The phrase 'wet by the rain' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'wet from the rain'. Also, 'close' should be 'clothes', and the phrase 'have to be have to just close over again and again' is grammatically incorrect and was corrected to 'having to change clothes again and again'.

× I would prefer dry because you don't have to worry about your clothes anymore in rainy.

✓ I would prefer dry weather because you don't have to worry about your clothes getting wet in the rain.

The phrase 'in rainy' is incorrect; it should be 'in the rain'. Also, 'dry' alone is vague, so 'dry weather' is clearer.

× No I just usually do not care about the weather forecast and the weather.

✓ No, I usually do not care about the weather forecast or the weather.

The sentence is awkward and redundant. Adding a comma after 'No' improves clarity, and replacing 'and' with 'or' is more appropriate when expressing indifference to either.

× I just usually go out as whenever I go out just I see like up in the sky, oh it's sunny or something, oh it's foggy and I do wear clothes according to the weather and vibe with my friends along the weather.

✓ I usually just go out, and whenever I do, I look up at the sky to see if it's sunny or foggy, and I wear clothes according to the weather and hang out with my friends depending on the weather.

The adverbs 'just' and 'usually' were misplaced, causing confusion. The sentence was restructured for clarity and correct adverb placement. 'Vibe with my friends along the weather' is informal and unclear, so it was changed to 'hang out with my friends depending on the weather'.

× So the main causes of climate change in this region recent years has to be the global warming.

✓ So the main cause of climate change in this region in recent years has been global warming.

'Causes' is plural but 'has' is singular; subject-verb agreement error. Also, 'has to be' is awkward here; 'has been' is more appropriate. Added 'in' before 'recent years' for correct prepositional phrase.

× The cold in winter season and the hotness in summer season has rapidly increased because of this major.

✓ The cold in the winter season and the heat in the summer season have rapidly increased because of this major change.

'Hotness' is an awkward noun; 'heat' is better. 'Winter season' and 'summer season' need definite articles 'the'. Also, 'has' should be 'have' to agree with the compound subject. 'Because of this major' is incomplete; 'change' was added for clarity.

× Yes, I do wanna experience a different type of climate farther from the city I live.

✓ Yes, I want to experience a different type of climate farther from the city where I live.

'Wanna' is informal and should be 'want to' in formal speech. The phrase 'the city I live' is incomplete; 'where I live' is correct.

× I am a very. I'm a very, you know, I'm a very. Cautious person and I like to explore many things about different.

✓ I am a very cautious person, and I like to explore many different things.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. It was corrected to a clear, complete sentence. 'Many things about different' is incomplete; 'many different things' is correct.