天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat clear but lacks coherence and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I live in Canada, and currently, it's the snow season, which I don't enjoy much. However, my favorite season is fall because the weather is mild, allowing me to go outside comfortably in a light jacket, which makes traveling easier.

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical mistakes. Focus on directly answering the question, use clear linking words, and provide specific reasons for your preference.

範例: I prefer the fall season because the weather is neither too cold nor too hot. This makes it perfect for outdoor activities and traveling, as I can wear comfortable clothes without worrying about extreme temperatures.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to organize your ideas logically and use appropriate linking words to improve coherence.

範例: I definitely prefer dry weather because wet conditions make driving difficult. For example, in Canada, snowy and wet weather often causes accidents, so dry weather helps me avoid problems on the roads.

建議: Your answer is somewhat vague and contains grammatical mistakes. Be more specific about when and how often you check the forecast, and explain clearly why it is important.

範例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast every morning before leaving the house. This helps me dress appropriately and avoid getting sick due to unexpected weather changes.

建議: Your answer touches on important points but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific examples or explanations.

範例: Climate change has caused deforestation, which increases pollution and depletes the ozone layer. For instance, while some countries like India are experiencing higher temperatures, others like Canada are seeing colder weather patterns.

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence.

範例: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates, especially during summer. As someone who enjoys photography and traveling, exploring new places helps me capture beautiful memories and brings me happiness and relaxation.

× It has a very different seasons, but if I have to talk about my favorite 1.

✓ It has very different seasons, but if I have to talk about my favorite one.

The phrase 'a very different seasons' is incorrect because 'seasons' is plural and cannot be preceded by the singular article 'a'. The correct form is 'very different seasons' without 'a'. Also, 'favorite 1' should be 'favorite one' for clarity and correctness.

× So it's definitely the fall season because we can go out in just a normal jacket and it makes traveling.

✓ So it's definitely the fall season because we can go out in just a normal jacket, and it makes traveling easier.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'easier' clarifies the meaning that traveling is more comfortable in fall. Also, a comma before 'and' improves sentence structure.

× Well, it's really hard to pick one older home.

✓ Well, it's really hard to pick one or the other.

The phrase 'one older home' is incorrect and unclear. The intended phrase is likely 'one or the other' to express difficulty in choosing between two options.

× because it's not much cold neither it's too hot.

✓ because it's not very cold neither is it too hot.

'Much cold' is incorrect; 'very cold' is the correct expression. Also, 'neither it's too hot' should be 'neither is it too hot' to maintain proper sentence structure.

× We can enjoy outdoor activities in that season, we can wear any kind of clothes and we can travel everywhere.

✓ We can enjoy outdoor activities in that season; we can wear any kind of clothes, and we can travel everywhere.

The original sentence is a run-on. Using a semicolon and commas properly separates the ideas and improves readability.

× And there are a lot of difficulties in cold or hot.

✓ And there are a lot of difficulties in cold or hot weather.

The phrase 'in cold or hot' is incomplete. Adding 'weather' clarifies the meaning.

× It's definitely dry weather I would go with because it's hard to drive when the weather is wet.

✓ It's definitely dry weather I would go with because it's hard to drive when the weather is wet.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but could be improved for clarity: 'I would definitely go with dry weather because it's hard to drive when the weather is wet.' However, since the instruction is to correct only mistakes from the list, no change is necessary here.

× As I have told you that I'm living in Canada and it's snow, it's a lot of accidents are happening because of the fat weather.

✓ As I have told you, I live in Canada and there is snow; a lot of accidents happen because of the bad weather.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'it's snow' should be 'there is snow'; 'it's a lot of accidents are happening' is incorrect and should be 'a lot of accidents happen'; 'fat weather' is likely a typo for 'bad weather'. Also, sentence structure is improved by splitting into two clauses.

× That's why I love dry weather to avoid any kind of problems on roads.

✓ That's why I love dry weather to avoid any kind of problems on the roads.

Adding the definite article 'the' before 'roads' is necessary to specify the roads being referred to.

× Definitely am in habit of checking the weather forecast because we don't know what kind of weather is outside when we are sitting in the house.

✓ I am definitely in the habit of checking the weather forecast because we don't know what kind of weather is outside when we are sitting in the house.

The sentence is missing the subject 'I' at the beginning. Also, 'in habit' should be 'in the habit'.

× So it helps to avoid any kind of sickness if we wear clothes according to the habit.

✓ So it helps to avoid any kind of sickness if we wear clothes according to the weather.

'According to the habit' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'according to the weather' to indicate dressing appropriately.

× So there are a lot of things we have to keep in mind because of weather.

✓ So there are a lot of things we have to keep in mind because of the weather.

Adding the definite article 'the' before 'weather' is necessary for grammatical correctness.

× It is definitely the cutting of trees which has ultimately increased pollution and the ozone layer is depleting.

✓ It is definitely the cutting of trees which has ultimately increased pollution, and the ozone layer is depleting.

Adding a comma before 'and' separates two independent clauses for clarity.

× The weather is increasing in some countries, whereas the weather is getting low in some countries.

✓ The temperature is increasing in some countries, whereas it is decreasing in others.

'Weather is increasing' is incorrect; 'temperature' is the correct term. Also, 'getting low' should be 'decreasing'. Using 'others' avoids repetition.

× If I talk about the comparison of India and Canada, so both are totally different.

✓ If I talk about the comparison between India and Canada, both are totally different.

'Comparison of' should be 'comparison between'. Also, 'so' is unnecessary and should be removed for correct sentence structure.

× Yes, definitely. I'm a person who is photogenic and loves to travel, so I would love to visit other cities, especially in the summer seasons to capture memories and look for different views.

✓ Yes, definitely. I'm a person who is photogenic and loves to travel, so I would love to visit other cities, especially in the summer season, to capture memories and see different views.

'Summer seasons' should be singular 'summer season' as it refers to one season. 'Look for different views' is better expressed as 'see different views'.

× And I think it's good for you to get happiness and calm.

✓ And I think it's good for you to find happiness and calm.

'Get happiness and calm' is awkward; 'find happiness and calm' is more natural and correct.