天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 注意时态和主谓一致，回答要更简洁并直接回应问题。可以先一句话总结天气（现在时），然后用1–2句具体细节支持，用连接词使逻辑更清楚。例如避免混用过去时和现在时（I was living → I live），并把频率表达简化。

範例: I live on a university campus in Jiangxi Province, in southeast China, and it's usually rainy. In spring and summer it often rains several times a day, so I always carry an umbrella.

建議: 改进句子结构与时态用法，先直接给出偏好（现在时），再用一两句原因支持。避免冗长从句和语法错误（after entered → after I entered），用连接词如 because 或 so。

範例: I prefer cold weather now. After I entered university in southern China, I experienced very hot summers and even hot autumns, so I find cooler weather more comfortable.

建議: 注意词汇准确性与句子清晰度（dry/wet 后无需冠词；地名和表达要准确），减少重复并用一到两句说明原因，使用连接词如 because 或 for example。纠正拼写和搭配（e.g. southeast, heavy rain, humidity）。

範例: I prefer dry weather because my campus in southeast China is very humid and experiences frequent heavy rain. The constant moisture makes everything feel damp and uncomfortable.

建議: 用现在时更自然（needed → need），并直接回答频率（several times a day）然后给出原因和具体场景。可以用连接词如 because 或 so，使回答更连贯。

範例: Yes, I check the weather forecast several times a day, especially during the rainy season, because I often travel between campuses and need to know if I should bring an umbrella.

建議: 回答要更清晰、有条理。先给总体观点（e.g. winters are warmer），然后用具体事实或比较支持（less snow, higher winter temperatures）。注意语法和词序（e.g. 'there is less snow than in my childhood'），并使用连接词 like as a result 或 for example。

範例: In recent years winters have become noticeably warmer. For example, my hometown gets far less snow than when I was a child and winter temperatures are generally higher.

建議: 先直接回答（Yes/No），然后用简洁的原因和期望细节支持。注意主谓一致（places that are），简化重复信息并使用连接词 like because or so. 提供具体目标或活动会更好（e.g. hiking in dry mountains）。

範例: Yes, I would. Because my campus has heavy rain in spring and summer, I want to visit places that are cold and dry during those seasons, such as highland cities where I could go hiking and enjoy clear weather.

× As a college student now, I was living in the campus in southeast China, Jiangxi Province, and the weather here was rainy.

✓ As a college student now, I live on campus in southeast China, Jiangxi Province, and the weather here is rainy.

句子中使用了过去时态“was living/was rainy”，但句子开头说“now”（现在），因此时态应为现在时。建议统一使用一般现在时，表示当前事实：将“was living”改为“live”，将“was rainy”改为“is rainy”。此外，介词和名词搭配也调整为“live on campus”。

× Especially in the spring and summer, it may rain four to five times a day, so it's a must to bring an umbrella with you.

✓ Especially in spring and summer, it may rain four to five times a day, so it's necessary to bring an umbrella with you.

原句用“it's a must to”虽可理解但口语化且搭配不够自然。根据情态动词和固定搭配，改为“it's necessary to”更正式自然。另去掉冠词“the”使“spring and summer”更通顺。

× While I was young, I preferred a hot weather.

✓ When I was young, I preferred hot weather.

“while I was young”可改为“When I was young”更常用；“a hot weather”中“weather”为不可数名词，不应使用不定冠词“a”，应去掉“a”。因此改为“preferred hot weather”。

× However, after entered the university, I studied in the South part of China which was very hot during the summer or even autumn.

✓ However, after entering university, I studied in the southern part of China, which was very hot during the summer and even in autumn.

“after entered the university”结构错误，应使用动名词“after entering”或完整从句“after I entered”。“South part”应改为“southern part”作形容词用。并将“or even autumn”改为连词结构“and even in autumn”。

× So I prefer cold weather nowadays.

✓ So I prefer cold weather nowadays.

该句时态本身正确，符合现在的喜好，故保持不变。这里只是确认无错误。

× I prefer a dry weather because my campus was located in a SE Groins in China and the weather here is quite wet, often mixed with heavy rains and after the rays.

✓ I prefer dry weather because my campus is located in the southeast of China and the weather here is quite wet, often with heavy rains and after the rains.

“a dry weather”错误，weather为不可数名词，不用不定冠词。地理位置表达应为“the southeast of China”或“southeast China”；“was located”改为一般现在时“is located”与当前描述一致。原句“after the rays”显然为拼写错误，应为“after the rains”。此外“SE Groins”拼写与表达错误，应改为“southeast”。

× The heavy moist always brings the wet weather together.

✓ The heavy moisture always makes the weather wet.

短语“heavy moist”搭配不当，应使用名词“moisture”或形容词“moist”。动词“brings ... together”在此不合适，改用“makes the weather wet”更清晰自然。

× Sure, as a college student, I needed to attend the lessons in another campus frequently, so I may check the weather forecast several times a day, especially in the rainy seasons.

✓ Sure, as a college student, I need to attend classes on another campus frequently, so I often check the weather forecast several times a day, especially in the rainy season.

句中“needed”使用过去式与语境不符，应为一般现在时“need”。“attend the lessons in another campus”搭配不自然，改为“attend classes on another campus”。“may check”表达可能性，不符合常态事实，应改为“often check”。“rainy seasons”通常用单数“rainy season”。

× The climate changed from cold to cold in recent years and in my hometown in the middle part of China is obviously that the snow for for less times than in my childhood and nowadays the winter usually had a higher temperature.

✓ The climate has changed in recent years. In my hometown in central China, there is clearly less snow than in my childhood, and winters are usually warmer now.

原句结构混乱，时态混用且冗长。将句子拆分为两句更清晰；使用现在完成时“has changed”表达近年来变化；“in the middle part of China”改为“central China”；“snow for for less times”是错误表达，改为“there is less snow”或“there is clearly less snow”；将“winter usually had a higher temperature”改为“winters are usually warmer now”，保持现在时态并语义清晰。

× Sure, because now I am living in the campus in southeast part of China where is always lots of heavy rains during the spring and the summer.

✓ Sure, because now I live on campus in the southeast part of China, where there are always lots of heavy rains during spring and summer.

“am living”可以改为一般现在时“live”更自然，表示常住。应改介词搭配为“live on campus”。“where is always lots of heavy rains”语序错误，应为“where there are always lots of heavy rains”。去掉“the”使“spring and summer”更自然。

× The weather is quite wet as well, so I want to go to some place that are cold and dry in the spring and summer.

✓ The weather is quite wet as well, so I want to go to some places that are cold and dry in spring and summer.

“some place”与动词“are”搭配不一致，应使用复数“some places”或将“are”改为“is”。另外“in the spring and summer”可简化为“in spring and summer”。