零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 문장이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 구성하며, 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 답변을 전개하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I usually eat snacks at home a few hours after lunch because I feel hungry again. For example, I might have some fruit or nuts to satisfy my hunger.

建議: 답변이 불완전하고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 자신의 의견을 명확히 표현하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: No, I don't think eating snacks like jelly and soda is healthy because they contain a lot of sugar, which can be bad for my teeth and overall health.

建議: 문장이 단편적이고 연결이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 주제문을 명확히 하고, 이유와 경험을 구체적으로 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. I especially liked Cheetos because they tasted very delicious to me, so I ate them frequently.

建議: 문장이 어색하고 반복적입니다. 좋아하는 간식을 명확히 말하고, 그 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I like gummy jelly snacks because they taste delicious and have a nice chewy texture that I enjoy.

× I did eat snacks in the house after lunch.

✓ I eat snacks in the house after lunch.

The question asks about usual habits in the present, so the present tense should be used instead of past tense. 'Did eat' is past tense, but 'eat' is correct for habitual actions.

× After lunch I feel hungry a few hours after so I feel.

✓ After lunch, I feel hungry a few hours later.

The original sentence is awkward and redundant. 'A few hours after' should be 'a few hours later' and the repeated 'so I feel' is unnecessary. The sentence structure needs to be clearer and more concise.

× Supplement to eat something.

✓ I usually eat something as a snack.

The phrase 'Supplement to eat something' is incomplete and unclear. It needs to be rephrased to express the idea of eating something as a snack after lunch.

× I like snacks like Jelly, coke, like something so it makes my hands. *****.

✓ I like snacks like jelly and coke, but they make my hands sticky.

The sentence is unclear and incomplete. 'It makes my hands' is vague; specifying 'sticky' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'Jelly' and 'coke' should be lowercase unless proper nouns. The pronoun 'it' should refer clearly to the snacks.

× Yes, I did. When I was young. I like Cheetos.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was young, I liked Cheetos.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the time is in the past ('when I was young'), the verb should be in past tense ('liked'). Also, the sentence fragment 'When I was young.' should be connected to the next sentence with a comma.

× It was made very delicious in my taste.

✓ They tasted very delicious to me.

'Made very delicious' is incorrect; we use 'taste' to describe flavor. Also, 'in my taste' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'to me' or 'in my opinion.'

× So I ate many Cheetos.

✓ So I ate a lot of Cheetos.

'Many' is used with countable plural nouns, which is correct, but 'a lot of' is more natural in this context. 'Cheetos' is plural, so 'many' is not wrong but 'a lot of' sounds better.

× I like snacks like Jelly with gummy Jelly is taste very very delicious and chewing.

✓ I like snacks like gummy jelly because they taste very delicious and are fun to chew.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be restructured to connect ideas properly and use correct verb forms ('taste' instead of 'is taste').

× Chewing is good.

✓ Chewing them is enjoyable.

'Chewing is good' is vague. Specifying 'chewing them' and using 'enjoyable' makes the sentence clearer and more natural.