零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan penggunaan kata kerja, serta hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan jelas, misalnya dengan memperbaiki struktur kalimat dan ejaan kata.

範例: I usually eat snacks on weekends during my leisure time. Sometimes, I also have snacks while reading a book or watching television.

建議: Perbaiki penggunaan kosakata dan tata bahasa, serta buat kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Hindari pengulangan kata dan gunakan kata yang tepat untuk menjelaskan alasan.

範例: Actually, eating snacks is not healthy because they often contain a lot of MSG and highly processed ingredients. However, I find them very delicious, so I eat them frequently.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan alami. Gunakan kalimat lengkap dan hindari pengulangan kata serta filler seperti 'uh' dan 'umm'.

範例: I did not often eat snacks when I was a child because my parents strictly prohibited me from eating them. However, I started eating snacks more often as I grew older.

建議: Perbaiki penggunaan kosakata dan tata bahasa, serta buat kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Jelaskan jenis camilan dengan kata yang tepat dan hindari kalimat yang membingungkan.

範例: I like to eat chips, which in Indonesian we call 'potato cheetah' and 'lace'. I especially enjoy chips with flavors like smoked beef or BBQ steak because they taste very delicious.

× I'm usually eat snacks in the weekend during my leisure time.

✓ I usually eat snacks on the weekend during my leisure time.

The verb 'eat' should be in the simple present tense without 'am' for habitual actions. Also, the preposition 'on' is used with days and weekends, not 'in'.

× when I'm reading a book, watching a television, I'm sometimes eat snake.

✓ when I'm reading a book or watching television, I sometimes eat snacks.

After 'I'm' (I am), the verb should be in the -ing form to indicate ongoing actions. Also, 'sometimes' should be placed before the verb 'eat'. 'Snake' is a typo and should be 'snack'. 'Watching television' does not need 'a'.

× Actually, it's not healthy at all because next contains a many MSG and under, uh, uh, high processing, uh, ingredients, but I found it's very delicious, so I a lot.

✓ Actually, it's not healthy at all because snacks contain a lot of MSG and highly processed ingredients, but I find them very delicious, so I eat a lot.

'Next' is a typo for 'snacks'. 'A many' is incorrect; use 'a lot of' for countable and uncountable nouns. 'Under, uh, uh, high processing' should be 'highly processed'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Did you often eat snacks when you were young? Not often when I was in when when I was a kid it's not usual for me to eat snacks because my parents strictly, uh, prohibits me eating some snacks.

✓ Not often. When I was a kid, it was not usual for me to eat snacks because my parents strictly prohibited me from eating some snacks.

'Prohibits' should be in past tense 'prohibited' to match 'was'. The phrase 'prohibits me eating' is incorrect; it should be 'prohibited me from eating'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× But when I'm grow older and, umm, often it's.

✓ But when I grew older, I often ate them.

'I'm grow' is incorrect; it should be past tense 'I grew' to match the past context. 'Often it's' is incomplete and unclear; corrected to 'I often ate them'.

× It's kind of chips like in Indonesian we call it potato, cheetah and also lace because I found that chips is very delicious, particularly when it comes to the taste of smoked beef or steak BBQ.

✓ They are kinds of chips; in Indonesian, we call them potato cheetah and also lace because I find that chips are very delicious, particularly when it comes to the taste of smoked beef or steak BBQ.

'It's kind of chips' is incorrect; 'chips' is plural, so use 'They are kinds of chips'. 'We call it' should be 'we call them' to match plural. 'Chips is' should be 'chips are'. Verb tense adjusted to present simple for habitual statements.