零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "a little bit overweight" and "therefore" together. Also, correct the grammar in "has told me to don't eat snacks" to "has told me not to eat snacks." Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I usually avoid snacks because I'm trying to lose weight, and my nutritionist advised me not to eat them. However, I sometimes have snacks on weekends when I'm playing with my child.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more natural. Avoid vague phrases like "this time" and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like "however" to contrast ideas and be more specific about the health problems.

範例: I think eating snacks once a week is fine for health; however, overeating snacks can lead to serious health problems like obesity and diabetes.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains some unclear phrases like "ice games" which might be a mistake. Also, avoid filler words like "Umm." Improve grammar by saying "I didn't know that overeating snacks was harmful." Use linking words like "although" to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks as a child, especially ice cream, which I really enjoyed. Although I liked them a lot, I didn't realize that eating too many snacks could harm my health.

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm but is repetitive and informal for the IELTS test. Avoid repeating words like "delicious" and phrases like "Oh my God." Use more varied vocabulary and a more formal tone. Provide a reason why you like chocolate ice cream.

範例: My favorite snack is chocolate ice cream because it has a rich, creamy flavor that I find very satisfying.

× my nutritionist has told me to don't eat snacks

✓ my nutritionist has told me not to eat snacks

The modal verb 'to do' is incorrectly used with 'don't' after 'told me to'. The correct form is 'told me not to eat' because 'not to' is used to express prohibition or advice in this context.

× health problems that is very dangerous for us

✓ health problems that are very dangerous for us

The subject 'health problems' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× especially ice games that were really delicious and I liked them so much

✓ especially ice creams that were really delicious and I liked them so much

The word 'ice games' is incorrect; the intended word is 'ice creams', which is plural and matches the context of snacks.

× I didn't know overeating snacks is very harmful for my health and my future

✓ I didn't know overeating snacks was very harmful for my health and my future

When reporting past knowledge, the verb tense should be backshifted from present 'is' to past 'was' to maintain tense consistency.

× especially chocolate ice creams that are very delicious and tasty

✓ especially chocolate ice cream that is very delicious and tasty

'Ice cream' is generally an uncountable noun when referring to the food in general, so it should be singular with 'is'.

× the the most delicious thing in the world are chocolate ice creams

✓ the most delicious thing in the world is chocolate ice cream

The subject 'thing' is singular, so the verb should be 'is'. Also, 'ice cream' is uncountable here and should be singular.