零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding awkward phrases and redundancy. Use simpler and more precise language, and limit your answer to about 3-4 sentences. For example, directly state when you eat snacks and what kind of snacks you prefer, using linking words to connect ideas.

範例: I usually eat snacks when my mother is not at home or when I don't have the energy to cook. In such cases, I prefer healthy snacks like organic biscuits and nuts because they are convenient and nutritious.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting minor grammar errors and using more precise linking words. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and keep the answer concise. For example, use 'help' instead of 'helps' to agree with plural subject and use 'therefore' to link ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I think snacks can be healthy if you choose the right ones. For instance, I often eat dried fruits and nuts because they are rich in vitamins and minerals, which help boost my immunity. Since I regularly go to the gym, these nutritious snacks therefore provide me with energy and support my overall health.

建議: Improve your answer by using correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structure. Avoid repeating 'usually' and explain your ideas with linking words. Also, mention the lack of knowledge about nutrition more clearly.

範例: When I was young, I often ate snacks because I preferred them over homemade food like chapati or rice. I loved snacks but didn't know much about their nutritional value or possible side effects, so I ate them quite frequently.

建議: Make sure to use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to contrast past and present preferences clearly. Also, keep the answer concise and natural.

範例: As a child, I usually enjoyed chips and sweets after school. However, now that I am an adult, I follow a healthy lifestyle and have switched to eating almonds, cashews, and other nuts as snacks.

× When my mother is not at home or I can't have energy to cook any meal or any food for myself, I usually eat healthy snacks such as related to the arta biscuits and multi more organic stuff.

✓ When my mother is not at home or I don't have the energy to cook any meal or any food for myself, I usually eat healthy snacks such as Arta biscuits and many more organic stuff.

The phrase 'I can't have energy' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I don't have the energy'. Also, 'such as related to the arta biscuits and multi more organic stuff' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. It should be 'such as Arta biscuits and many more organic stuff'. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Additionally, since I regularly go to the gym, these nutritious snacks provides me with suitable energy and support my overall health.

✓ Additionally, since I regularly go to the gym, these nutritious snacks provide me with suitable energy and support my overall health.

The subject 'snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'provide' instead of 'provides' to agree in number. This is a subject-verb agreement error.

× When I was young, I usually eat snacks because I prefer eating snacks rather than eating the homemade food such as chapati or rice.

✓ When I was young, I usually ate snacks because I preferred eating snacks rather than eating homemade food such as chapati or rice.

The sentence refers to past habits, so the verbs should be in the past tense: 'eat' to 'ate' and 'prefer' to 'preferred'. This aligns the verb tense with the time frame.

× Because I love them and without knowing their nutritious value and side effect, I usually eat them more and more.

✓ Because I love them and without knowing their nutritious value and side effects, I usually ate them more and more.

The phrase 'side effect' should be plural 'side effects' because it refers to multiple possible effects. Also, since the context is past, 'eat' should be 'ate'. This corrects article and tense usage.

× When I was a child, I usually like to enjoy chips and sweets after my school but as I am a growing adult now, I follow healthy lifestyle and switches these snacks to a healthy snacks such as almonds and cashews and nuts.

✓ When I was a child, I usually liked to enjoy chips and sweets after school, but as I am a growing adult now, I follow a healthy lifestyle and switch these snacks to healthy snacks such as almonds, cashews, and nuts.

The past habit 'like' should be 'liked' to match past tense. 'After my school' is incorrect; it should be 'after school'. 'Follow healthy lifestyle' needs an article: 'a healthy lifestyle'. 'Switches' should be 'switch' to agree with the subject 'I'. Also, 'a healthy snacks' is incorrect; it should be 'healthy snacks' without 'a' because 'snacks' is plural. Commas are added for clarity in the list.