零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar lebih natural dan jelas. Gunakan kalimat yang langsung menjawab pertanyaan dengan kalimat topik, lalu berikan detail pendukung dengan kata penghubung yang tepat.

範例: I usually eat snacks after work when I have some free time because it helps me relax and recharge.

建議: Perjelas dan lengkapi jawaban dengan kalimat yang koheren dan logis. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide dan berikan contoh spesifik yang relevan.

範例: I think it depends on the type of snacks. For example, snacks made from vegetables are healthy, but those with a lot of meat or oil might not be good for the body.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat jawaban yang jelas dan langsung menjawab pertanyaan. Hindari kalimat yang tidak lengkap dan gunakan kalimat yang koheren dengan detail pendukung.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I enjoyed trying different flavors and it was a fun part of my day.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kosakata yang lebih tepat. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan tambahkan detail yang spesifik dengan kata penghubung yang sesuai.

範例: I like deep-fried tofu because it is crunchy and has a spicy flavor, which suits my taste very well.

× I usually eat snacks if I got free time when after hour or when I have no longer job in the office.

✓ I usually eat snacks if I have free time after work hours or when I no longer have a job in the office.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'got' which is past tense instead of 'have' for present tense. Also, 'when after hour' is unclear and should be 'after work hours'. 'I have no longer job' is incorrect; it should be 'I no longer have a job'. The corrections align the sentence with present tense and proper phrasing.

× I usually eat snacks if I got free time when after hour or when I have no longer job in the office.

✓ I usually eat snacks if I have free time after work hours or when I no longer have a job in the office.

The phrase 'when after hour' is incorrect preposition usage. It should be 'after work hours' to indicate the time after working. Correct preposition use improves clarity.

× I think it depends on what the snacks.

✓ I think it depends on what the snacks are.

The sentence lacks a verb after 'snacks'. Adding 'are' completes the sentence and correctly uses the pronoun 'it' referring to the situation.

× If it's huge meat or vegetables.

✓ If the snacks are large pieces of meat or vegetables.

The sentence is a fragment and lacks a main clause. Also, 'huge meat' is awkward; 'large pieces of meat' is clearer. The correction completes the sentence and improves clarity.

× I really eat snacks when I was young because I. Don't like it too much?

✓ I really ate snacks when I was young because I didn't like them too much.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was young'. Also, 'Don't like it too much?' is incorrect; it should be 'didn't like them too much' to refer to snacks in past tense and plural form.

× I really eat snacks when I was young because I. Don't like it too much?

✓ I really ate snacks when I was young because I didn't like them too much.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to plural 'snacks'; 'them' is appropriate. Also, the sentence structure is broken and needs correction for clarity.

× I like deep fried tofu because it is so crunchy and it has spicy flavor and it kind of suit with my taste.

✓ I like deep-fried tofu because it is so crunchy, has a spicy flavor, and it kind of suits my taste.

'Deep fried' should be hyphenated as 'deep-fried'. 'Spicy flavor' needs an article 'a'. 'Suit' should be 'suits' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also, 'suit with' is incorrect; it should be 'suits' without 'with'.