零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'so'. Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, mention the time you eat snacks and explain why, using specific reasons and linking words such as 'because' or 'so that'.

範例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because there is a long gap between lunch and dinner. Eating snacks helps me maintain my energy, especially when I want to play basketball or other sports later.

建議: Focus on clarity and grammar. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'however' and 'for example' correctly to make your answer coherent. Also, use precise vocabulary such as 'fried food' instead of 'fires food' and 'vegetable snacks' instead of 'vegetarians snacks'.

範例: I think whether snacks are healthy depends on the type of food. For example, fried foods are usually unhealthy, but vegetable snacks can be beneficial if eaten in moderation.

建議: Try to avoid grammatical errors and filler words. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. Also, use correct plural forms and verb tenses. Linking words like 'because' can help explain your ideas better.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because they were delicious and smelled good. Most children enjoy snacks during their childhood for these reasons.

建議: Make your answer more fluent by reducing filler words and improving sentence structure. Use linking words like 'and' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, use correct plural forms and avoid unnecessary words like 'it's' before listing items.

範例: I like to eat fruits, vegetables, and cookies because they are healthy and help me maintain my energy throughout the day.

× Well, I usually eat snack during, uh, afternoon because I saw, uh, it's a very long term, uh, between the noontime also to the evening.

✓ Well, I usually eat snacks during the afternoon because I saw it's a very long time between noontime and the evening.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to multiple instances of eating small amounts of food. Also, 'afternoon' needs the definite article 'the' to specify the time of day. 'Term' is incorrect here; 'time' is the correct word to express duration. 'Between the noontime also to the evening' is awkward; it should be 'between noontime and the evening' to correctly express the time span.

× Well, I usually eat snack during, uh, afternoon because I saw, uh, it's a very long term, uh, between the noontime also to the evening.

✓ Well, I usually eat snacks during the afternoon because I saw it's a very long time between noontime and the evening.

The preposition 'between' should be followed by two items connected with 'and', not 'also to'. The correct phrase is 'between noontime and the evening'.

× So I definitely need to have some foods and also have some snacks to maintain the energy and so that I can play the basketball and so other sports well.

✓ So I definitely need to have some food and also have some snacks to maintain my energy so that I can play basketball and other sports well.

The word 'foods' is generally uncountable when referring to food in general, so 'food' is correct. 'The basketball' is incorrect; 'basketball' as a sport does not need 'the'. Also, 'so other sports' should be 'and other sports' to connect the ideas properly.

× For example, if people tend to choose more, uh, you know, fires food, then it might not, uh, healthy to our bodies.

✓ For example, if people tend to choose more fried food, then it might not be healthy for our bodies.

The modal verb 'might' should be followed by the base form of the verb 'be' to form 'might be'. Also, 'fires food' is incorrect; the correct term is 'fried food'. The preposition 'to' should be 'for' when referring to health effects on bodies.

× However, if you choose to eat some vegetarians, uh, snacks, then it might be helpful, uh, at sometimes if you don't.

✓ However, if you choose to eat some vegetarian snacks, then it might be helpful sometimes if you don't.

'Vegetarians snacks' is incorrect; the adjective form 'vegetarian' should be used to describe 'snacks'. 'At sometimes' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'sometimes'. The sentence is incomplete at the end but corrected as much as possible.

× I would say, uh, every individuals, uh, love to eat snack when they was young, uh, liking a childhood because, uh, snack is quite attractive, uh, at a young age because, uh, it's delicious and also smell nice then yeah.

✓ I would say every individual loves to eat snacks when they were young, like in childhood, because snacks are quite attractive at a young age since they are delicious and also smell nice.

'Every individuals' is incorrect; 'every' is followed by a singular noun 'individual'. 'Love' should be 'loves' to agree with singular subject. 'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' when talking generally. 'They was' should be 'they were' for past tense plural. 'Liking a childhood' is incorrect; 'like in childhood' is correct. 'Snack is' should be 'snacks are' to agree in number. 'Smell nice then yeah' is informal and awkward; corrected to 'smell nice'.

× Well, personally, I like it's fruits and, uh, vegetable as well as the cookies because I think, uh, those of them are quite healthy to my body and also can, uh, keep my energy, uh, uh, maintained.

✓ Well, personally, I like fruits and vegetables as well as cookies because I think those are quite healthy for my body and can help keep my energy maintained.

'It's fruits' is incorrect; 'fruits' is plural and does not need 'it's'. 'Vegetable' should be plural 'vegetables' to match the list. 'Those of them' is redundant; 'those' suffices. 'Healthy to my body' should be 'healthy for my body'. The phrase 'can keep my energy maintained' is awkward; 'can help keep my energy maintained' is clearer.