零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ваш ответ естественный, но есть небольшие ошибки в грамматике и стилистике, например, "grab some snacks with myself" лучше заменить на "grab some snacks for myself". Также стоит избегать двойного отрицания и улучшить связность, используя связующие слова.

範例: I usually eat snacks when I'm watching a movie. Recently, I have also started eating snacks while doing my homework because it helps me stay full and prevents me from getting distracted by hunger.

建議: Ответ содержит полезную информацию, но есть ошибки в произношении и выборе слов, например, "micro valuable mic Mac and cheese" неясно. Рекомендуется использовать более точные и понятные слова, а также улучшить структуру предложения.

範例: It depends on the type of snacks. For instance, fruits and vegetables are healthy options, but snacks like chips or instant macaroni and cheese are unhealthy.

建議: Ответ хороший, но есть небольшие ошибки, например, "instant needles" должно быть "instant noodles". Также можно улучшить связность и добавить больше деталей для полноты ответа.

範例: When I was younger, I often ate snacks, but my parents controlled what I ate. They restricted me from eating chips and instant noodles, and instead gave me fruits and vegetables, which helped me stay healthy.

建議: Ответ понятен, но можно улучшить грамматику и связность, например, заменить "And until now I do the same" на более естественное выражение. Также стоит разнообразить лексику.

範例: Since my childhood, I have enjoyed eating raw carrots with cabbage. It was my favorite snack that my mom used to give me while I was studying or reading, and I still enjoy it today.

× Most of the time I grab some snacks with myself when I'm watching a movie, but recently I started eating snacks while doing my homework because it actually helps me to stay full and don't get distracted on having a meal.

✓ Most of the time I grab some snacks when I'm watching a movie, but recently I started eating snacks while doing my homework because it actually helps me to stay full and not get distracted from having a meal.

The phrase 'grab some snacks with myself' is incorrect because 'with myself' is not used in this context. The correct expression is simply 'grab some snacks'. Also, 'don't get distracted on having a meal' should be 'not get distracted from having a meal' to use the correct negation and preposition.

× Most of the time I grab some snacks with myself when I'm watching a movie, but recently I started eating snacks while doing my homework because it actually helps me to stay full and don't get distracted on having a meal.

✓ Most of the time I grab some snacks when I'm watching a movie, but recently I started eating snacks while doing my homework because it actually helps me to stay full and not get distracted from having a meal.

The phrase 'don't get distracted' is incorrect here because it follows 'helps me to stay full and'. The correct form is 'not get distracted' to maintain parallel structure after 'helps me to'.

× For example it might be some fruits or vegetables but at the same time some people used to eat chips or micro valuable mic Mac and cheese which is not healthy at all.

✓ For example, it might be some fruits or vegetables, but at the same time some people used to eat chips or microwaveable mac and cheese, which is not healthy at all.

The phrase 'micro valuable mic Mac and cheese' is incorrect and seems to be a mishearing or typo. The correct term is 'microwaveable mac and cheese'. Also, commas are needed after 'For example' and before 'but' to separate clauses properly.

× When I was younger, I used to eat a lot of snacks, but all of them were under control of my parents and I was restricted from chips and instant needles.

✓ When I was younger, I used to eat a lot of snacks, but all of them were under the control of my parents and I was restricted from chips and instant noodles.

The phrase 'under control of my parents' should be 'under the control of my parents' to include the definite article 'the'. Also, 'instant needles' is incorrect; the correct term is 'instant noodles'.

× When I was younger, I used to eat a lot of snacks, but all of them were under control of my parents and I was restricted from chips and instant needles.

✓ When I was younger, I used to eat a lot of snacks, but all of them were under the control of my parents and I was restricted from chips and instant noodles.

The preposition 'from' after 'restricted' is correct, but the noun 'instant needles' is incorrect; it should be 'instant noodles'. Also, 'under control of' requires the definite article 'the' to be grammatically correct.

× Back in my childhood, I developed a habit of eating raw carrots with cabbage. It was my absolute favorite snack ever, which my mom used to give me while I was studying or while I was reading. And until now I do the same.

✓ Back in my childhood, I developed a habit of eating raw carrots with cabbage. It was my absolute favorite snack ever, which my mom used to give me while I was studying or reading. And even now I do the same.

The phrase 'And until now I do the same' is awkward. The correct expression is 'And even now I do the same' to indicate continuation up to the present. Also, 'while I was studying or while I was reading' can be simplified to 'while I was studying or reading' for conciseness.