零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by avoiding unnecessary words and fixing sentence structure. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'And these days I usually have a snacks', say 'These days, I usually have snacks between lunch and dinner because I prefer salty ones. However, I also like sweet snacks but try to limit sugar intake as it can be harmful.'

範例: These days, I usually have snacks between lunch and dinner because I prefer salty ones. However, I also like sweet snacks but try to limit sugar intake as it can be harmful.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words. Also, be specific about which snacks are healthy or unhealthy. For example, say 'It depends on the snack. Homemade snacks like celery and carrots are healthy, but I don't eat them often. On the other hand, processed snacks like Cheetos are not very healthy.'

範例: It depends on the snack. Homemade snacks like celery and carrots are healthy, but I don't eat them often. On the other hand, processed snacks like Cheetos are not very healthy.

建議: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words to connect ideas. For example, say 'When I was a child, my mother didn't allow me to eat many snacks, especially junk food. Although I liked them, I rarely ate them. Instead, I often ate healthy snacks like yogurt, carrots, apples, and other fruits.'

範例: When I was a child, my mother didn't allow me to eat many snacks, especially junk food. Although I liked them, I rarely ate them. Instead, I often ate healthy snacks like yogurt, carrots, apples, and other fruits.

建議: Try to improve sentence structure and avoid filler words. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, say 'As I mentioned before, I prefer salty snacks. However, when I listen to my body, I realize it needs more fiber and fruits, such as cherries or sour cherries. I also like sour flavors, but I prefer them when they are healthy.'

範例: As I mentioned before, I prefer salty snacks. However, when I listen to my body, I realize it needs more fiber and fruits, such as cherries or sour cherries. I also like sour flavors, but I prefer them when they are healthy.

× And these days I usually have a snacks between lunch and dinner and it's often salty 'cause my favorites are salty.

✓ And these days I usually have snacks between lunch and dinner and they're often salty because my favorites are salty.

The phrase 'a snacks' is incorrect because 'snacks' is plural and should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Also, 'it's often salty' should be 'they're often salty' to agree with the plural noun 'snacks'. Suggestion: Use plural form without 'a' and match verb agreement with plural subject.

× I like sugar too, but this is gonna harm me if I use lots of sugar.

✓ I like sugar too, but it will harm me if I use a lot of sugar.

The phrase 'this is gonna harm me' is informal and 'this' is unclear. 'Gonna' should be replaced with 'will' for formality. Also, 'lots of sugar' is informal; 'a lot of sugar' is more appropriate. 'This' should be replaced with 'it' referring to sugar. Suggestion: Use 'it will harm me' and 'a lot of sugar' for clarity and correctness.

× So I use and some.

✓ So I use only a little.

The phrase 'use and some' is incomplete and unclear. It seems the speaker wants to say they use a small amount. 'Only a little' is a clearer and grammatically correct expression. Suggestion: Use clear quantifiers like 'only a little' to express small amounts.

× If it's homemade that would be a lot of butter like celery and carrot.

✓ If it's homemade, it would be a lot of butter, like celery and carrot.

The sentence lacks a comma after 'homemade' and the phrase 'a lot of butter like celery and carrot' is confusing. It seems the speaker means 'homemade snacks like celery and carrot, which have a lot of butter' but celery and carrot do not contain butter. Likely, the sentence is incorrect in meaning. Suggestion: Clarify meaning and use commas properly.

× But if I use doughs it's gonna be great.

✓ But if I use dough, it's going to be great.

The plural 'doughs' is uncommon; 'dough' is usually uncountable. Also, 'gonna' should be replaced with 'going to' for formality. Suggestion: Use uncountable noun 'dough' and formal future tense 'going to'.

× But these snacks will I'm taking these days.

✓ But these snacks that I'm eating these days

The sentence structure is incorrect and incomplete. 'Will I'm taking' is ungrammatical. The correct structure is 'these snacks that I'm eating these days'. Suggestion: Use relative clauses properly and correct verb forms.

× Or not very healthy like Cheetos or something like that.

✓ Or they are not very healthy, like Cheetos or something like that.

The sentence lacks a subject and verb. 'Or not very healthy' is a fragment. Adding 'they are' completes the sentence. Suggestion: Ensure sentences have subject and verb for completeness.

× In my childhood, my mother didn't let me eat a lots of snacks, like, uh, junk foods.

✓ In my childhood, my mother didn't let me eat a lot of snacks, like junk food.

The phrase 'a lots of' is incorrect; it should be 'a lot of'. Also, 'junk foods' is usually uncountable as 'junk food'. Suggestion: Use 'a lot of' and uncountable noun 'junk food'.

× I would love them, but I didn't use them more often.

✓ I would love them, but I didn't eat them often.

The verb 'use' is incorrect when referring to eating food. The correct verb is 'eat'. Also, 'more often' is unnecessary here. Suggestion: Use 'eat' for food consumption and simplify adverbs.

× So no. I replaced them with some healthy snacks like yogurt and carrots, apple or other fruits.

✓ So no. I replaced them with some healthy snacks like yogurt, carrots, apples, or other fruits.

The list lacks proper plural forms and commas. 'Apple' should be plural 'apples' to match the list. Suggestion: Use plural nouns in lists and separate items with commas.

× Like I told you before, I rather to eat salty snacks, but if I want to listen to my body, I it needs a lots of fibers and fruits or healthy stuff like, uh, cherry, sour cherry or something like that.

✓ Like I told you before, I prefer to eat salty snacks, but if I want to listen to my body, it needs a lot of fiber and fruits or healthy stuff like cherries, sour cherries, or something like that.

'I rather to eat' is incorrect; correct form is 'I prefer to eat'. 'I it needs' is incorrect; should be 'it needs'. 'A lots of' should be 'a lot of'. 'Fibers' is usually uncountable as 'fiber'. 'Cherry' and 'sour cherry' should be plural 'cherries' and 'sour cherries' when listing. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms, pronouns, quantifiers, and plural nouns.

× I like sour things too, but if it's healthy, it's gonna be better.

✓ I like sour things too, but if it's healthy, it will be better.

'Gonna' is informal; 'will be' is more appropriate in formal speech. Suggestion: Use 'will be' instead of 'gonna be' for formality.