零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity. For example, instead of repeating 'during my work', you can say 'while working'. Also, use linking words like 'therefore' to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I usually eat snacks after my meals because it signals that I have finished eating; therefore, I can focus better on my work. For example, a small snack helps me feel more energized and improves my concentration while working.

建議: Be careful with word choice and grammar. For instance, 'both' is used for two items, but you mentioned three. Also, 'despite I love to eat snacks' should be 'even though I love to eat snacks'. Use linking words like 'because' to explain reasons clearly.

範例: I usually prefer healthier snacks such as fruits, nuts, and dark chocolate because they contain nutrients like vitamins and minerals. Even though I love eating snacks, I choose these options to maintain good health.

建議: Maintain consistent verb tenses; for example, use past tense 'received' instead of 'receive'. Also, use linking words like 'in addition' to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I ate snacks regularly when I was a child. My parents always gave me nutritious snacks like nuts and fruits after meals to keep me healthy. In addition, I sometimes received snacks as a reward for finishing my chores.

建議: Clarify unclear phrases such as 'craft something sweet' and 'have desire to buy something'. Use more precise vocabulary and linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas.

範例: I enjoy snacks like fruits, nuts, and dark chocolate. When I want something sweet, I usually choose fruits or dark chocolate. However, if I want a crunchy snack, I prefer nuts because they satisfy my cravings.

× They both contain nutrients like vitamins and healthy foods, so I think they are good for my health despite I love to eat snacks.

✓ They both contain nutrients like vitamins and healthy fats, so I think they are good for my health even though I love to eat snacks.

The pronoun 'despite' is incorrectly used here; it should be followed by a noun or noun phrase, not a clause. The correct phrase is 'even though' to introduce a contrasting clause. Also, 'healthy foods' is vague; 'healthy fats' is more appropriate in this context.

× Whenever I craft something sweet, I usually choose fruits and dark chocolate.

✓ Whenever I crave something sweet, I usually choose fruits and dark chocolate.

The verb 'craft' means to make or create, which is incorrect here. The intended meaning is 'crave', which means to desire or want something. This is a common confusion due to similar spelling.

× On the other hand, when I have desire to buy something, I probably will choose nuts because they are crunchy and can satisfy me.

✓ On the other hand, when I have a desire to buy something, I will probably choose nuts because they are crunchy and can satisfy me.

The phrase 'I probably will choose' is grammatically correct but the adverb 'probably' is better placed before the modal verb 'will' for natural English word order. Also, 'have desire' needs the article 'a' before 'desire'.